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Consequences of the September 11 Attacks

In this informative essay, a student discusses some of the impacts of the September 11 attacks on the United States. The student looks at the economic cost of the cleanup required in the aftermath of the attacks, the new safety regulations that came into force with the establishment of the Transportation Security Administration, and the social consequences of the attack in terms of racism against people of Middle Eastern descent or Islamophobia.
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Angela's feedback:

"You've got the basic structure of your essay down, and you found some solid outside resources and quotes to include in your argument. Moreover, your introduction and conclusion work well together to bookend your main body content and reiterate your key takeaways. However, note that in covering the September 11 attacks, you should capitalize the word "Flight" when referring to specific flights and include the relevant airline, so for example, one of the flights involved was American Airlines Flight 11. Also, in your overview of the attacks, you fail to mention United Airlines Flight 93, which crashed in Pennsylvania after its passengers managed to thwart the hijackers on board. While your body paragraphs all work as stand-alone units that address relevant topics mentioned in your prompt, your second body paragraph doesn't match your thesis. In the introduction, you say that you'll be talking about economic, educational, and social impacts, but it looks like you instead cover economic impacts, safety regulations, and social impacts. Also, it would make sense to mention in your second body paragraph that the Transportation Security Administration was created in response to the attacks instead of saving that fact for your conclusion. In terms of writing conventions, watch out for run-on sentences and simple errors such as "a event" instead of "an event" or the use of the word "lead" instead of "led.""

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