Definition and Theory of Battered Women's Syndrome
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"You have done a great job breaking down your topic and presenting the information in a neat and logical order. You create smooth transitions between ideas lending to improved comprehension and readability of the material. You have a compelling opening with a thesis statement that guides the body of the paper nicely. There are a minimal amount of grammar, word choice, punctuation, and spacing issues that need to be resolved. While you have credited a lot of the original authors for their work, there are sections where there are a lot of facts presented but no authors names mentioned. Also, when authors names are mentioned there are no proper citations that include the year that their work was published. There is a bit of a disconnect between the conclusion and the rest of the paper. The conclusion is the first place that you mention that thinking women enjoyed being battered is an issue. "
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