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Since Ive given you notes several times Im going to make this quick generally this is a good response Id like you to watch out for word repetition especially in the same sentence and overuse of vaguegeneral terms somehow great etc -- try to be specific and adverbs that dont add much to the sentence Watch out for pronoun shiftsTry to make sure you tie in the specific terminologyimportant ideas from class discussion -- the work should be specifically connected to era themes and ideasThere are many minor grammatical issues here-- mostly problem relating to tense misplaced modifiers use of passive voice and capitalization errors Your observations are strong and its obvious that youre connecting our lessons to the material --the local-error stuff ie small sentence-level errors can be corrected with practice which I know youre doing Have you ever visited the Writing Studio Theyre really helpful and may give you a few strategies to employ when youre editing work on your own There are minor clarity issues eg your first sentence--the implication is that the poems title emphasizes the tyranny of England and I know thats not what you actually mean I cant do a line edit for you for each paper but I can definitely show you a few things to watch out for -- maybe a visit to my office hours or a conversation after class You are doing all the right things -- thinking critically focusing on analysis connecting your opinion to specific aspects of the material--just work on cleaning up the delivery One note remember our conversation re Wheatley and sarcasm Sarcasmreally specific form of scathing wit and Wheatley isnt employing itDiscussion question for 82812 Jonathan Edwards was a famous writer who had a great impression during the Great Awakening Edwards famous piece of writing was Images or Shadows of Divine Things What does Jonathan Edwards means about the Images or Shadows of Divine Things and how does he related
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