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Fast Food Should Be Banned

In this argumentative essay, a student discusses whether fast food should be banned. The student presents multiple studies that show the negative effects of fast food and suggests that fast food should be banned if isn't made more healthful.
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Angela's feedback:

"You fully address the prompt by presenting an argumentative paper on a food-related topic, and your body paragraph has many well-researched pieces of information to support your position. However, review is needed for your MLA in-text citations. MLA style emphasizes citing the author(s) of a given work and relevant page numbers for information, not the year of publication. Year of publication is used in APA and Chicago. There are also a number of writing convention errors that should be addressed. Commas come before a closing quotation mark in American English, and the phrase "et al." should not be translated to "and others" in main body text. "Et al." is a Latin term that has been adopted into the English language (especially for academic writing) just like "via" or "ad hoc." Exactly one space should appear between all sentences in the work, and the last sentence in your first paragraph needs special attention."

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