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How Gender Affects Hierarchy at the Societal Level

This is an essay about hierarchy. The author emphasizes their belief that, in society, hierarchy is based on gender more than anything else. The author suggests the gender hierarchy affects how peoples' physical fitness and appearance are viewed along with social class, status, and positions of power.
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Jenn's feedback:

"Your paper is off to an excellent start. However, with a bit of effort put into the organization and content of the paper, you can significantly improve it. Regarding organization, work on both the introduction and conclusion will better communicate the purpose of your paper and will show that you are focused on it throughout your writing. The introduction should include more background information about the concept of hierarchy. It should end with a clear and concise thesis statement that highlights the topics the reader should expect to come across in the body of the paper. The conclusion should then summarize the main points you made in the document's body and relate them to the thesis statement.

You can do several things to improve the content of your essay. First, make sure that you discuss every concept that you present adequately. When you discuss one idea more than another, it places more importance on one concept than another. Also, include transition words, phrases, and sentences between new ideas. Doing this will help the reader understand the relationships between various ideas. Last, since you have included so much factual information to support your views, it is crucial to include in-text citations to avoid plagiarism issues. In general, the formatting of your essay is excellent. There are only a couple of places with inconsistent spacing. Last, you generally have a good handle on writing conventions. However, some areas with grammar and sentence structure errors need to be resolved to improve reading comprehension."

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