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How I Got Injured in Softball and Made a Full Recovery

In this personal narrative, a student recounts how she got injured in softball and her rehabilitation journey. The student focuses in particular on the fear she felt after sustaining her injury and her determination to return to the sport.
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- Alfredo Alvarez, student @ Miami University
Exactly what I needed.
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Angela's feedback:

"It's admirable that you were willing to share such a traumatic and trying experience. The reader can understand the fear you felt after you were injured and the work it took for you to make your return to softball. While your essay is written well overall, a final edit is still recommended to address minor errors. For example, there's a typo with the phrase "in an in doped state." Moreover, dialogue should be revisited and reformatted to reflect the standard practice of starting a new paragraph whenever the speaker changes. In terms of visual presentation, it would be better to incorporate the phrase "a couple hours later" into the beginning of the subsequent paragraph instead of having it as a sentence fragment on its own line. Keep in mind that line spacing should be kept consistent throughout the work, so no extra spaces should appear in between paragraphs."

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