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How Our Perceptions Differ from Reality

In this admissions essay, a student talks about the difference between perception and reality. The student uses the trompe l'oeil art technique as an example of how our perception of reality can easily be manipulated.
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Angela's feedback:

"You put together a focused discussion of human perception versus reality, and you include solid examples of how our perceptions can differ quite drastically from reality. However, your conclusion would be more meaningful if you talked about why it's important to recognize that what we believe to be true isn't always true. This is probably the heart of the matter that university admissions readers would want to hear your thoughts on. A final edit of the work is recommended to address various writing convention issues including problems with sentence fragments. Remember that questions should end with a question mark instead of a period and that words such as "Whopper" should be capitalized. Your essay would better follow standard formatting practices if the first line of each paragraph was indented by half an inch. Given the overall approach you've taken to address the topic, it would be a good idea to eliminate contractions in order to establish a more academic tone with your writing."

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