1. Home

How Robot Companions Could Prevent Overpopulation and STIs

In this argumentative essay, a student argues that robot companions should be legal for non-platonic intimate relationships. The writer supports the thesis by pointing out that robot companions could have positive impacts on human overpopulation and the transmission of sexually transmitted infections.
PAGES
4
WORDS
1,171
  Cite
View Full Essay
About this essay
This essay received a C by one of Kibin's paper graders. Click here to see what was done well and what needs improvement.

More essays like this:

Not sure what I'd do without @Kibin
- Alfredo Alvarez, student @ Miami University
Exactly what I needed.
- Jenna Kraig, student @ UCLA
Wow. Most helpful essay resource ever!
- Chris Stochs, student @ UC Berkeley
Generating Preview...
This essay received a C by one of Kibin's paper graders. Click here to see what was done well and what needs improvement.

More essays like this:

Not sure what I'd do without @Kibin
- Alfredo Alvarez, student @ Miami University
Exactly what I needed.
- Jenna Kraig, student @ UCLA
Wow. Most helpful essay resource ever!
- Chris Stochs, student @ UC Berkeley

View other essays like this one:

Erin's feedback:

"Your introduction is pretty strong, but the language/grammar shifts pretty abruptly after the first paragraph; if that does indeed contain information/wording borrowed from another source, then be sure to paraphrase or quote and cite it properly to avoid plagiarizing -- even if it's accidental. If you've simply edited the introduction, I'd be sure to do so for the rest of the essay as well. Not only will this make the writing more consistent, but it will resolve the grammar and sentence structures that are sometimes distracting from your main ideas. In terms of content, your arguments in favor of legalizing robots for non-platonic intimate relationships are pretty compelling, and you do a good job of illustrating the problems these robots could solve with statistics. With a topic this controversial, though, I can't help but think that your argument would be even stronger if you addressed more of the counterarguments *against* using robots for these purposes in order to change minds and get people to consider your perspective. Overall, you've got an interesting take on a pretty controversial topic, but for a higher score, you'll need to polish the grammar, sentence structure, and word choice."

Learn more about this feedback