Investigating Social Issues Depicted in the Movie Friday
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"Your essay examines many different aspects of the movie Friday and you show some thoughtful consideration of the movie's content and themes. However, because you do discuss many different topics related to the movie, the primary purpose of your paper is a bit unclear and you don't seem to have an overall focus for your analysis. What is your main point or main idea? You also have some spelling, typographical, and grammatical errors that should be corrected with a round of proofreading. Note that movie titles and titles of other works should be formatted in italics. In regards to language, do not use *censored* in an academic paper to denote profanity. If the profanity is not part of a direct quote, choose a different word (for example, in the paragraph at the top of page 2, you could say "They barely escape and are terrified"). The same holds true for the use of slang ("Smokey puts the moves on anything in a skirt," "His dad was a real trip," "Friday is [a]...morally questionable flick," etc.). While this type of colloquial language is no doubt derived from the movie you are analyzing, you are still writing a formal, academic paper and your own words should be appropriately formal. Finally, be sure that you can support your claims with evidence. For example, where you say, "The amount of gang violence... has probably risen dramatically since the introduction of drugs in society," it would be better if you can support that claim by citing statistics or research."
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