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"You have created an essay that is logically guided by a well-written thesis statement. The introduction is written in an intriguing manner that compels the reader to want to learn more. You have included a substantial amount of evidence that supports all the points you identified in your thesis. There are some errors in your citation formatting. Sometimes you have page numbers in citations that do not follow direct quotes, which is not necessary, and sometimes you do not have page numbers in citations after direct quotes. Because of your tone and use of language, oftentimes it is unclear if this is supposed to be a scholarly persuasive essay or an opinion piece. If you are supposed to be presenting a scholarly paper, it is necessary to remove "I" language and conversational language. "
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