1. Home

Why Colleges Must Confront the Dangerous Practice of Hazing

This persuasive essay argues that hazing, despite being illegal or against an institution's rules, remains an urgent problem that universities must confront more honestly and actively. The student describes the role of civil suits in ending the practice.
PAGES
4
WORDS
1,225
  Cite
View Full Essay
About this essay
This essay received a B by one of Kibin's paper graders. Click here to see what was done well and what needs improvement.

More essays like this:

fraternities, american colleges
Not sure what I'd do without @Kibin
- Alfredo Alvarez, student @ Miami University
Exactly what I needed.
- Jenna Kraig, student @ UCLA
Wow. Most helpful essay resource ever!
- Chris Stochs, student @ UC Berkeley
Generating Preview...
This essay received a B by one of Kibin's paper graders. Click here to see what was done well and what needs improvement.

More essays like this:

fraternities, american colleges
Not sure what I'd do without @Kibin
- Alfredo Alvarez, student @ Miami University
Exactly what I needed.
- Jenna Kraig, student @ UCLA
Wow. Most helpful essay resource ever!
- Chris Stochs, student @ UC Berkeley

View other essays like this one:

Bridget's feedback:

"You are off to a good start, and reading this draft, I can see you know how to incorporate and properly cite research to create ethos and enhance your argumentation. I urge you to keep using that strength as you move into the next draft: instead of recourse to dictionary definitions (which enhance but don't necessarily carry the discussion), focus your evidence around your other, more relevant sources.

Part of the above suggestion can entail a bit of reorganization. Instead of opening with the longer definition-based paragraphs, try creating urgency in describing the problem using the anecdotes that come later in the paper. Doing so can help the reader immediately understand what the problem is and why it must be addressed."

Learn more about this feedback