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Maintaining a Work-Life Balance

This essay gives simple advice for balancing work in one's life.
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Jim's feedback:

"This paper wraps simple advice in complicated statements. Is the opening quote attributable? If so, that should be included; note that the quote within the quote should be placed in single quotation marks. The word “very” often adds no useful information, and that would seem to be true here. The sentence, “If you’re nowhere …,” is confusing, and “hard-working” is not a noun. This sentence should be rewritten for clarity. The words, “When you begin the day,” are redundant and should be deleted. The fourth paragraph starts with an incomplete sentence, as it lacks a verb acting on a subject. Advice is then given on “what they do in a day,” where “they” means “you.” The next sentence (“Once you have …”) is long and confusing. The closing addresses the mixing of life and work life, but work life is part of life, so this makes no sense."

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