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Kibin. (2023). Money management for first-year college students. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/money-management-for-first-year-college-students-AME8uwdo
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"Your title is long and confusing, and you should hyphenate “first year.” See if you can condense the title to one line. You misuse words; be sure you know a word’s definition. For example, by “governance” you mean “government.” What is “Money Management?” This is a source, but the reader cannot tell. You should identify it, such as “the Money Management website.” You mention “the three questions,” but we do not know what they are. Unless specifically instructed to do so, you should not use “body” as a section title. The title should relate to the content.
Your writing is complex and often unclear. Unless you are certain, check word definitions. Use a thesaurus to find the right word. Run a grammar check. Read through your work multiple times, looking for ways to clarify meanings and express your thoughts more concisely. Ask yourself: if you were a reader, would this be clear to you? Make a habit of doing these things and your writing will improve."
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(Kibin, 2023)
Reference list entry:
Kibin. (2023). Money management for first-year college students. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/money-management-for-first-year-college-students-AME8uwdo
In-text citation:
("Money Management for First-Year College Students.")
Works Cited entry:
"Money Management for First-Year College Students." Kibin, 2023, www.kibin.com/essay-examples/money-management-for-first-year-college-students-AME8uwdo
Footnote:
1. "Money Management for First-Year College Students." Kibin, 2023. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/money-management-for-first-year-college-students-AME8uwdo.
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"Money Management for First-Year College Students." Kibin, 2023. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/money-management-for-first-year-college-students-AME8uwdo.
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