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"You do a good job of making your opinion clear in the second half of your paper, but your essay would be stronger if you had a thesis statement in your introduction that plainly shares your view on the censorship of music. While you include valid quotes, your decision to present some of them as block quotes does not follow standard academic writing practices. Editing is needed to recast run-on sentences, sentences with parallel structure issues, and awkward phrases. Addressing these problems will enhance the clarity of your writing. Meanwhile, there are punctuation errors with semicolons and colons, and a period should come before a closing quotation mark. There are multiple places (e.g., “pass on, the common”) where commas should be inserted to improve readability."
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Kibin. (2024). Why censorship in music is wrong. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/music-censorship-wrong-y3UsyHle
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