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My Experience Being Airlifted from One Hospital to Another

In this personal narrative, a student recounts a time when she fell ill and had to be airlifted from one hospital to another. The student talks about how this incident taught her not to take life for granted.
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Not sure what I'd do without @Kibin
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Angela's feedback:

"You do a good job of describing the ordeal you went through when you got quite sick. It would be helpful to the reader, though, if you provided more context or background information on the abbreviations DECH and IWK so that the reader can better understand what you’re talking about. Run-on sentences such as the one that starts “On the sixteenth time” should be recast to improve the flow of your writing, and editing is needed to fix grammar errors such as “Him and I.” The term “grandfather” should not be capitalized unless it is being used in place of or as a part of a name, and you should review the difference between the noun and verb forms of certain terms (e.g., “hangout” versus “hang out”). In addition, remember to italicize movie titles."

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