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Kibin. (2023). My experience growing up in africa. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/my-experience-growing-up-in-africa-SaS80mWD
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"You did a great job using descriptive words that communicate your experience to your readers. These words also communicate the purpose of your paper well. While you were able to draw readers into your experience and communicate the intensity of it, there are things that you can do to further communicate the intensity. First, consider removing any language that is apologetic. If you do not want to talk about something, omit it. If you want to include something, do not apologize for including it. You hinting at things you are unwilling to elaborate on also leaves readers with questions in their mind that they want answers to. The reader will leave your paper feeling more satisfied without these hints. There are a couple of areas of your paper where you have not presented events in chronological order. Read through and make an effort to move these areas around to reduce reader confusion. There are a large number of grammar and punctuation errors that are also leading to some comprehension issues. Make sure that your paper goes through a round of proofreading to resolve these types of issues."
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(Kibin, 2023)
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Kibin. (2023). My experience growing up in africa. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/my-experience-growing-up-in-africa-SaS80mWD
In-text citation:
("My Experience Growing Up in Africa.")
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"My Experience Growing Up in Africa." Kibin, 2023, www.kibin.com/essay-examples/my-experience-growing-up-in-africa-SaS80mWD
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1. "My Experience Growing Up in Africa." Kibin, 2023. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/my-experience-growing-up-in-africa-SaS80mWD.
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"My Experience Growing Up in Africa." Kibin, 2023. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/my-experience-growing-up-in-africa-SaS80mWD.
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