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My Life With Eczema

This essay is about a person's personal experience with atopic dermatitis (eczema) and dietary restrictions. A dermatologist told the author not to eat foods with artificial coloring and that they would need to apply topical antiseptics. The dermatologist also told the author not to swim in chlorinated pools. The author mentioned how being responsible and learning to take care of themselves positively impacted them and those around them.
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Jenn's feedback:

"Overall, the formatting of your paper is good. There are a couple of places where you did not indent your paragraphs, and there is extra spacing between them. To make it more clear what the purpose of your essay is, I recommend that you write an introduction that includes a thesis statement and elaborate on your conclusion so that it summarizes all of the points you made in the body of the paper. This way, it will also be more apparent that you remained focused on your topic.

Overall, the content of your essay is excellent. You communicated your life experiences in a way that allows the reader to relate to you. There are a couple of places that brought questions to mind that you could elaborate upon. To significantly improve reading comprehension and the cohesiveness of the paper, the aspect of the document that needs the most work is conventions. There is a significant amount of punctuation and sentence structure errors scattered throughout the essay."

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