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Police Officers Should Wear Body Cameras

In this argumentative essay, a student takes the stance that police officers should wear body cameras. The student explains how body camera footage can be helpful to both officers and the general public.
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Angela's feedback:

"You provide many valid reasons to support the notion that police officers should wear body cameras. However, while you have a detailed thesis statement that could be an accurate representation of your argument, the thesis doesn’t currently line up well with your body paragraphs. Consider doing some rearranging so that your body paragraphs line up more cleanly with your supporting points. It might even be a good idea to join some of your body paragraphs since some topics, such as reviewing camera footage for missed details, are repeated across different paragraphs. Your writing would be easier to understand if pronoun-antecedent problems were fixed. For example, it is often unclear whom or what you’re referring to when you say “they.” Other writing convention errors include mistakenly ending a question with a period instead of a question mark. Note that standard practice in academic writing today is to include one space only between sentences, not two."

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