Pursuing Computer Science and the US Air Force ROTC at the University of North Georgia

In this admissions essay, a student describes a desire to study computer science and be a cadet in the US Air Force ROTC program. The student explains why the University of North Georgia is their college of choice.

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"Your essay reflects the research and thought you’ve put into your higher education and career path, but there’s a disconnect between the quote you’ve chosen to highlight and the rest of your content. Consider adding more explanation about why you’re especially passionate about the Air Force and computer science. At the moment, you talk about how you want to serve your country, which is commendable, but you could achieve this goal through any branch of the military; it doesn’t have to be the Air Force. The first line of each paragraph should be indented by half an inch, and there’s a word choice problem with the use of “erratic.” The term “senior military college” should not be capitalized, and there are many issues with comma use. The sentence that begins “Not only will I” is especially awkward and should be recast for clarity."

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Kibin. (2025). Pursuing computer science and the us air force rotc at the university of north georgia. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/pursuing-computer-science-and-the-us-air-force-rotc-at-the-university-of-north-georgia-QCQopSxI

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("Pursuing Computer Science and the US Air Force ROTC at the University of North Georgia.")

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"Pursuing Computer Science and the US Air Force ROTC at the University of North Georgia." Kibin, 2025, www.kibin.com/essay-examples/pursuing-computer-science-and-the-us-air-force-rotc-at-the-university-of-north-georgia-QCQopSxI

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"Pursuing Computer Science and the US Air Force ROTC at the University of North Georgia." Kibin, 2025. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/pursuing-computer-science-and-the-us-air-force-rotc-at-the-university-of-north-georgia-QCQopSxI.