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Seeing My Parents Fight Inspired Me to Not Be a Victim

In this personal narrative, a student describes one particularly bad argument between her parents that she witnessed as a child. The student explains how seeing her parents fight made her into a stronger person.
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Angela's feedback:

"You provide many moving descriptions in the narrative that help the reader better imagine your situation as a child with your parents. However, sometimes your descriptions are presented in sentence fragments that are confusing because they lack a subject. Likewise, other statements can be difficult to understand because there are pronoun-antecedent problems. For example, it can be unclear what or whom “they” refers to in a given sentence. The pacing of your narrative is thrown off by run-on sentences, and it would be helpful to review your work to break it up into multiple paragraphs. This would give the reader more places to pause and reflect on your content. When a piece of dialogue ends with an exclamation mark, no comma is needed after the closing quotation mark."

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