The Advantages and Benefits of Arts Education
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"You provide a lot of valuable information to support arts education, and it's notable that you were able to show its wide-ranging benefits. It was especially good that you discussed how the arts can make students better problem solvers since creativity is a desirable characteristic in businesses today. However, because you have a lot of content to share, your points can get somewhat repetitive. Thus, I suggest you review your body paragraphs and reorganize them with the intent of combining content from certain paragraphs to shorten your essay overall. For example, your paragraph on how art encourages creativity in general could be merged with your discussion of how creativity is valued in the workforce. Aside from that, you should review your direct quotes since there are places where closing quotation marks are present without matching opening quotation marks."
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