The Attraction Theory and the Role of Similarity
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"You go into great detail about the Attraction Theory, allowing the reader to fully comprehend what you are talking about. You then do a good job relating the theory to a personal life experience so that the reader can find the theory to be relatable. At the paragraph level, your paper has good flow, helping improve readability. At the sentence level, there appear to be grammatical and sentence structure issues that are negatively impacting readability. Some of the grammar issues are occurring because of the use of conversational language. When reading through the writing, there are a number of areas in which redundancy occurs which catches a reader off guard. Your presentation of the Social Penetration Theory appears as an after-thought since so little is written about it. Consider elaborating on the concept and the relationship between the two theories. Consider elaborating on the conclusion also. The conclusion allows for an opportunity to summarize all of the points you made in the body of the essay and reiterate the goal of the paper. Last, make sure that your references are consistently formatted. "
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