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The Benefits of Facing and Overcoming Challenges

In this argumentative essay, a student talks about the benefits of facing challenges in life and overcoming them. The student specifically addresses her difficulties with attention deficit hyperactivity disorder (ADHD) and her tendency to suffer from mood swings.
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Angela's feedback:

"You have a clear thesis statement about the benefits of facing challenges in life, and you chose some good personal examples to illustrate your point. However, your essay would be stronger with some reorganization. Many of your paragraphs are short and could be combined with other paragraphs to strengthen the overall flow of the work. For example, your discussion of your struggles in various hard classes and math in particular would make more sense merged into a single paragraph since you make many overlapping points. In terms of formatting, all your paragraphs should be aligned to the left, and line spacing should be kept consistent within a each paragraph and between paragraphs. The formatting for block quotes needs to be revised to better match MLA standards. An edit is recommended to address various writing convention errors, such as issues with parallelism and punctuation placement. When working with quoted material, an end period should be placed either before a closing quotation mark if the sentence ends with the quote or after the parenthetical citation if the sentence ends with one."

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