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The Black Lives Matter Social Movement

This is an essay written about the Black Lives Matter social movement. The author mentions many prominent figures such as Alicia Garza, Opal Tometi, Patrisse Cullors, Rosa Parks, Martin Luther King Jr., Trayvon Martin, and Barack Obama. The author also mentions critical concepts and events such as the Civil Rights Movement, the Montgomery Bus Boycott, and the Ferguson protest.
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Jenn's feedback:

"This essay is off to a great start. You have included a lot of very specific information to support the points that you are trying to make throughout the body of your writing. On this note, there tends to be a lack of cohesion throughout most of the paper. You tend to jump from one idea to another without including transitional phrases or sentences to create relationships between those ideas. I also suggest that you end your introduction with a clear and concise thesis statement. Right now, you have the start of a thesis statement included in your introduction, but it is not written in a way that gives solid direction to the body of your paper.

There are minor inconsistencies that appear in your in-text citations, so I suggest making an effort to review those.

Last, there are a significant number of sentence structure and grammar issues throughout the essay. Make sure you're incorporating any previous feedback into future drafts, and an additional round of editing and/or peer review would help you strengthen some of the areas that are lacking."

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