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Kibin. (2024). Alcoholism in three societies. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/an-overview-of-alcoholism-in-three-district-societies-PgPwLpu7
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"This is an interesting paper on an important subject. You should not capitalize common nouns, such as “alcoholism.” Your explanation of the three cultures is a bit confusing. You should be more explicit, such as by stating them in one short sentence. Your sentence introducing the Russian culture is incomplete (as is another sentence near the end of your paper), i.e., it lacks a verb acting on a subject. You can correct this by merely deleting “which.” Note that “within” is one word, and hyphenate “16 to 24 year olds.” One paragraph is a single sentence. This should be integrated into another paragraph, or you should add material after the sentence. You omit a letter (“Often times alcoholics”), and note that “children and spouse” can be rewritten simply as “family.” We generally use double quotes, with single quotes if material is quoted inside a quotation. Write out ordinal numbers such as “nineteenth.” For the purposes of your paper, there is no reason to explain Amish beliefs on mode of dress and beards. You refer to the Soviet Union in the present tense, which is incorrect. Note also that vodka can be made from a variety of things, such as grains. Place a space before and after an ellipsis, as appropriate."
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Kibin. (2024). Alcoholism in three societies. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/an-overview-of-alcoholism-in-three-district-societies-PgPwLpu7
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