The Character of Lancelot in T. H. White's The Ill-Made Knight

Angela's feedback:

"You have put together a thorough summary of the book, so it is easy to follow the narrative. But your work runs long for a summary. More revision could be done to explain key points or main ideas from the story without presenting such a close recap of the narrative. There are many capitalization issues that prove to be distracting throughout the work. Words such as "royal" and "saving" should not be capitalized unless they appear at the beginning of a sentence while proper nouns such as "Malory" should always be capitalized. Review is needed to ensure that you spell the name "Guinevere" correctly throughout the work. You have a tendency to write run-on sentences when using the word "however," and there are some confusing phrases such as "joined in on at on of" that need to be recast to improve the quality of your writing. Your use of the semicolon should also be revisited."

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