The Disability of Hearing Loss
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"Your paper is well organized and informative. You are obviously knowledgeable about the topic. You did a good job taking the information and communicating to the reader how it personally relates to you. I noticed that you did not select a specific style guide for your writing. Despite this being the case, I also noticed that you specifically mentioned specific sources such as Gallaudet University. It is important that any information that you use in your paper that you found in a source is properly cited. If you do not cite information, it appears that you are saying that the information is your own, and this could be viewed as plagiarism. Once you have created citations, it is also important that you create a reference section. As written, your paper currently does not have a conclusion and the introduction could be stronger. Consider adding some interesting facts about hearing loss to your introduction, facts that compel your reader to want to read more. While you have a good command of grammar and punctuation, there a number of errors that were consistently made throughout the document. One example is: "A conductive hearing loss occurs in the middle ear." This would read better as: "Conductive hearing loss occurs in the middle ear." There a number of instances in which there is an unnecessary "a.""
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