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The Harmful Effects of Beauty Standards on Women and Girls

In this essay, the student discusses the harmful effects of beauty standards on young women and girls, in addition to exploring the role that media plays in enforcing these standards.
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This essay received a B by one of Kibin's paper graders. Click here to see what was done well and what needs improvement.

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Natalie's feedback:

"Beauty standards and the media portrayal of those standards definitely pose a great risk to young women and girls, especially in the age of social media. Your research paper successfully proves as much. Overall, you stayed focused on the topic, provided a lot of great content supporting your argument, and had few conventional errors. Of the few conventional errors, however, the one that seemed to occur most often was incorrect word choice, so proofread carefully! There were also some formatting errors, so be sure to reference an MLA style guide (there are several great guides online) before submitting your final copy. As for organization, I would suggest that you briefly lay out your main points in your introduction and conclusion, since this is a longer paper. Typically, an introduction should consist of three parts: an interesting "hook" (like your example of the often asked question, "does this make me look fat?"), your thesis, and what you plan to cover in the essay. The conclusion is the same, but inverse: shortly summarize your essay, restate your thesis, and end with a few sentences connected to the hook in your introduction. All in all, your essay only needs a few edits. You did a good job of tackling a difficult but important subject."

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