The History and Philosophy of Fascism in the Twentieth Century
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"You do a good job of explaining the philosophy of fascism and how Mussolini and Hitler adopted it to achieve their own goals. You also provide good examples of fascism in the United States. That said, addressing writing convention errors would strengthen your work. There are repeated problems with hyphenation where terms are either missing a hyphen or have been mistakenly hyphenated. Meanwhile, making more use of commas would facilitate the readability of various statements. There are also typos such as “I” instead of “in” and simple grammar errors such as “who’s” instead of “whose.” Phrases such as “organize an organization” should be recast to avoid repetition, and sentence fragments should be recast for clarity. Maintaining consistent capitalization practices with the word “fascism” and related terms such as “fascist” would give your essay more polish. When including a citation at the end of a given statement, the end punctuation (typically a period) comes after the citation itself, not before the closing quotation mark."
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