The History of Our Imaginary Friend in the Family, Bones
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"You are off to a good start with this essay. You have done a good job writing about your family and their experience with the imaginary friend. A reader is able to understand how unique and special this experience is to you and your family. As written, the essay does not have an introduction and has a very simple conclusion. Adding an introduction would allow the reader to understand what the point of your essay is. Right now it is unclear if you are trying to focus on the uniqueness of the situation or the existence of the supernatural. On one hand while the simple conclusion is fitting, you could elaborate upon it to further emphasize what your intended writing goal is. There are some grammar and sentence structure errors that lead to some awkward word flow. These issues can be resolved through a round of proofreading. "
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