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The Life and Accomplishments of Sean Diddy Combs

In this biographical essay, a student describes the life and accomplishments of Sean Combs, a well-known rapper, producer, and entrepreneur. The writer describe's the musician's impact on the music industry and the traits that the writer personally admires.
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Erin's feedback:

"Your admiration of Sean Combs is evident in your writing, and you provided a good amount of detail to support those ideas. The transitions between your paragraphs aren't always smooth; if your headings aren't required, I'd recommend that you use transition words/phrases to segue between ideas rather than relying on the headings to do that work for you. I think that will improve the overall flow of your research paper. It's obvious that you're using APA style to cite your sources, and you did a good job of citing external information as you used it; however, there are some mistakes in the in-text citation formatting. Finally, there are some punctuation and capitalization errors remaining. These don't impact the overall flow or readability of your research paper, but having your essay proofread will result in much more polished work (and likely a higher grade)."

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