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An Introduction to Louis Armstrong's Life and Musical Career

This introduction to Louis Armstrong's life focuses on his musical career, starting with receiving his first musical instrument, at the age of 12, in 1913. The student notes the critical assessment of Armstrong's career at the time of his death in 1970.
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Bridget's feedback:

"You show very good control over writing mechanics, with few errors, and good flow and sentence variety. The straightforward chronological organization communicates the events clearly and efficiently to the reader.

The final sentence regarding 1953 feels rather lonely down at the end; forced to stand as its own paragraph, it suggests more is coming. I suggest reorganizing the final lines so that your assessment of Armstrong's career ("...though his music was considered by some...") serves as the conclusion of the essay. This will also allow you to end on an analytical note, creating purpose and depth. As a final note, make sure to format your page (line spacing, indentations) according to your reference format."

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