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The Most Memorable Day in My Life

In this personal narrative, a student describes the most memorable day in her life. She talks about the day she learned from her brother and sister-in-law that she was going to be an aunt.
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Angela's feedback:

"You share many details about the most wonderful day in your life that help keep the reader engaged in your narrative, but you should not copy sentences from your introduction and paste them into your conclusion. While it’s good to do some summarizing in your conclusion, you should also leave the reader with some key takeaways or thoughts you want them to mull over. With dialogue, a new paragraph should be started whenever there’s a new speaker. Phrases such as “In introduction” and “As well as” are awkward as introductory phrases for a sentence and should be reworked. In addition, the word “introduction” should not be capitalized in the middle of a sentence. Typos include the appearance of “one” instead of “on” and “one” instead of “once.” There are many writing convention errors overall, so the essay would benefit from a thorough edit."

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