The Presence of Prejudice in William Shakespeare's The Merchant of Venice
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"You have done a great job presenting what the topic of your paper is by providing excerpts from the text that support your position. You also clearly have a good command of the English language since there are very few grammar or sentence structure errors in your paper. There are a few issues with the organization of your paper. It is not clear what your introduction and your conclusion are because they are not separate paragraphs. Also, if I were to create paragraphs for each one, that would show how basic they are. Use the introduction as an opportunity to thoroughly introduce to the reader what your paper is going to be about and use the conclusion as an opportunity to summarize all of the main points made in the body of the essay. Also, since you make a list of the points you are going to talk about in your thesis statement, the body of the paper should address the points in the order that you presented them. Last, make sure that you take care of any grammar and punctuation errors that exist. The most noticeable error I saw is that "of" in the title "The Merchant of Venice" should not be capitalized. "
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