The Role Politics and Social Media Play in America's Self-Segregation

Jenn's feedback:

"Your paper is off to an excellent start, and with some time invested into each aspect of the paper, you can significantly improve it.

One of the most critical aspects of the paper to focus on is the organization. To enhance the paper's organization, I recommend that you include both an identifiable introduction and a conclusion. The introduction should provide some background information about the topic you will discuss and should end with a clear thesis statement that guides the body of the paper. The conclusion should summarize the main points you made in the document's body and relate them to the thesis statement. Adding both of these to the paper will make it so that the purpose of your writing is more apparent, and the reader will be able to see that you stayed focused on that purpose throughout your piece.

For the most part, the content of your paper is good. However, there are some places where it feels like you talk about a particular idea too briefly. There are other places where it feels like quotes are not integrated into your text as well as they could be. Last, it would help if you made sure that everything is properly cited according to APA standards.

The writing conventions could use some work to improve reading comprehension and the paper's cohesion. Many grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure errors are impacting the paper. I also recommend that you not use the phrase "colored people" and instead choose terms preferred by people of color.

Last, I had to mark very low for formatting because you noted that the paper is supposed to follow APA style guidelines, which is not reflected. The most notable things that need to be changed are the paper needing to be double spaced, paragraphs needing to be indented, and the references needing to be in the same font as the rest of the document and formatted with hanging indents."

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