The Significance of Freedom Explored Through Different Texts
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"Your writing has a clear purpose and focuses on a single topic, showing that you have a good understanding of the subject matter. You provide a significant amount of well-developed information that supports your ideas. You have what has the potential to be a strong introduction once grammatical errors are fixed and you turn the "question" into a thesis statement since it is not actually a question. You have a conclusion that serves your essay well. There are a number of places where there are not natural transitions between sentences or one idea and another. The essay is neatly formatted, making it easier to read. Although you did not specify a certain style guide, you do have some citations and a reference page. There are a lot of details provided that do not have citations. This should be resolved so that nothing is viewed as plagiarism. You also need to cite things in a consistent manner. With the way that the Works Cited page is formatted it is a bit hard to read. Also, as they are written now, your headings tend to get lost in your text. Consider making them bold or centering them. There are a number of grammatical and punctuation errors. Many of the errors revolve around the word order of the addition of unnecessary words."
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