The United States Government Should Regulate Prescription Drug Prices

Angela's feedback:

"You put together a compelling argument for more government regulation of prescription drug prices. Your second paragraph is especially strong because you do a superb job of providing an overview of your essay's a content. But there are a number of edits that could be made to strengthen the quality of your writing. The word "hepatitis" should not be capitalized unless it appears at the beginning of a sentence, and your use of apostrophes should be revised in phrases such as "Drug manufacturer's claim." Meanwhile, there are some sentence structure issues. For example, there's a problem with parallel structure with the pairing of "living" and "die" in the last sentence of your first paragraph. Run-on sentences such as the one beginning "The doctor calms" should also be recast to improve the flow of your work. Regardless of the style guide you're following, including a URL in an in-text citation is typically discouraged since URLs tend to detract from a text's uniformity."

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