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The Various Things Humanity Can Do to Heal Planet Earth

This is an argumentative essay about how humanity needs to treat planet Earth better. The author discusses water, air, land, plants, and animals. They also bring up reducing the use of plastic, reusing, recycling, planting trees, reducing food waste, becoming vegetarian, taking short showers, and stopping open burns.
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Jenn's feedback:

"Your essay is off to a good start. If a bit of time is invested into each graded component of the piece, it will be significantly improved. The best place to start is with the organization. First, you need an introduction that ends with a strong thesis statement. The introduction should provide a brief amount of background information about the topic, and the thesis statement should identify the specific aspects of that topic that you will talk about and why those aspects are essential. The body of the paper should then align with your thesis statement. Finally, the conclusion should summarize the main points you made in the document's body and relate them to the thesis statement. Doing all of this will make it clear what the purpose of your paper is and show the reader that you focused on that purpose throughout your writing.

Some improvements can be made to the content to improve your paper further. As the paper reads, it seems like you present a lot of opinions, but these same opinions can be presented as facts if you cite sources and add quotes. It is also crucial that your writing flow in a cohesive manner. You can accomplish this by adding transitional words, phrases, and sentences between new ideas to create a relationship between them. Overall, the formatting of your paper does not impact reading comprehension. I recommend that you make sure all text is the same color and not bolded. I also suggest that you indent new paragraphs. The last aspect to work on is writing conventions. Several grammar, sentence structure, and word choice errors are scattered throughout your writing. These must get resolved so that your paper has a better flow."

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