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Time Is Not Worth Money Because Time Is a Genuine Treasure

In this response to a question, a student considers whether time is worth money. The student argues that time is not worth money because time is a genuine treasure. The essay discusses the meaning of "treasure" in this context as well as the value of time.
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Angela's feedback:

"Your work is organized in a logical manner, and it is easy to follow your argument throughout most of the speech. However, there are places where the points you’re making get muddled. For example, when you say that with every twenty-one births there are nine deaths, the audience is likely to make the false assumption that the nine deaths are all of children since the twenty-one births you initially described covered only children. Also, even though you explain early in the work why diamonds aren’t a genuine treasure, by including the comparison of diamonds to sand in the last sentence right before you reiterate that time is a genuine treasure, it sounds like you’re also saying that diamonds are a genuine treasure. In terms of writing convention errors, you have a tendency to place commas where they’re not needed (e.g., in the phrases “irreplaceable, and of” and “enthralled, and won’t.”"

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