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War Memorials: A Personal Reflection

The writer of this paper reflects on the meaning of war memorials, with a personal background of growing up in a country experiencing civil war.
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Jim's feedback:

"This is an excellent essay, making logical arguments about a subject that summons deep emotions.

You should use a comma between “my country” and “Liberia.” You end the first sentence with “Liberia,” and you start the next sentence with the same word. While not incorrect, it is good to avoid such repetition. In this case, you could combine the two sentences and write “… Liberia, which has suffered ….” You end the first paragraph with an incomplete sentence, i.e., one without a verb acting on a noun. Again, you could link two sentences, ending the first with a comma and continuing with the second. This issue occurs again in the next paragraph; you should look for these instances and correct them. Referring to those who have passed away, you should write “who lost” and not “who have lost,” and “6ft to the ground” should be “six feet under the ground.” It is good to avoid writing “etc.” when possible."

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