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Ways to Improve Mental Health Education

In this argumentative essay, a student discusses the need to better educate young people on the subject of mental health. The student argues that such education for students could come from therapists, guidance counselors, and the internet.
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Angela's feedback:

"You provide a good discussion of the different mental health resources potentially available to students, but your reasoning would be more convincing if you backed it up with a greater amount of outside evidence from scholarly sources. At the moment, it stands out that you only have one direct quote very early in your essay. If you are following APA style, then your running head needs to be tweaked a bit to include a page number and so that the first page features the "Running head:" label before your title. Whether or not you're following APA guidelines, your in-text citations need to be revised to reflect standard academic writing practices such as the inclusion of a period after a closing parenthesis. Regarding other writing convention errors, the use of apostrophes should be revisited. Note that ampersands should not be included in main body text."

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