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Bridget's feedback:
"This is tense, personal, and compelling--the reader sees it coming thanks to your introduction/set-up, but you keep us hooked as we go thanks to a good sense of storytelling rhythm and flow. My main recommendations are all about proofreading and editing to make sure the writing is as clear as possible and error-free. Errors can really distract readers, affecting author credibility. Errors also impact clarity, as does some of the diction here. For example, you write "Then the guy walks up..." At this point, because we know Theo's name, we might think, "Is this some other guy?" So instead, write "Theo"--that is, keep the reader up to speed by being specific when possible. (On the other hand, it makes sense not to give your best friend's name--and since she is always "my friend" or "my best friend," we always know who this refers to.) To sum up: you've got the story, the details, and the narrative beats and flow down on the page. The next step is to polish up the mechanics and diction so your reader can experience the narrative without any distractions like mechanical errors or clarity issues."
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Kibin. (2023). When your best friend betrays you: a personal narrative. http://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/when-your-best-friend-betrays-you-a-personal-narrative-I8jiXUX2
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