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Why Education Should be Free and Equal for All

This TOEFL writing response argues that education is a basic human right and as such should be administered by governments with a focus on equal access and standardized quality.
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Bridget's feedback:

"Now that you've staked out your position and started developing your claims and examples, let's think about how best to organize and present the ideas. By using a single, explicit topic sentence at the beginning of each body paragraph, you can guarantee each paragraph treats a single, focused point; in this current draft, some overlap across the body makes the discussion a little hard to follow in any specific way. Try a reverse outline technique to get started.

In terms of lower-order concerns, I do notice a number of errors, including sentence boundary and grammar issues. Diction is largely solid, so focus on syntax and clarity as you move forward."

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