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Why Pharmaceuticals and Cosmetics Must Find Alternatives to Animal Testing

This op-ed piece argues that animal testing should be banned. The student seeks to persuade the reader on this point from an ethical point of view (animals have rights), as well as a scientific point of view (differences between human and animal biology). Finally, the student addresses counter-arguments by offering alternatives like computer models.
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Bridget's feedback:

"Well done! You've crafted a clear, well-organized presentation, with solid use of specific evidence to back claims, appeals to logos and pathos, and a good incorporation of and rebuttal to the counter-argument. As appropriate, make sure to incorporate clearly formatted citations--this will depend on your prompt and instructions, so make sure to double-check those. (If you are not meant to have in-text citations, do check if your references need to be formatted according to a specific style guide.) Your writing is very clear, with good flow and solid mechanics. There are a few conversational moments, which is fine ("In my opinion, ..." and "Do you know..."); however, I recommend against using "Well, ..." as it is overly casual. As mentioned, your argumentation is solid. However, the first body paragraph's claim and premise feels unspecified or unsubstantiated--do animals have fundamental rights? Narrowing your focus to a specific country or industry might help explore this from a legal point of view, or you may want to be more explicit in crafting an ethics-based claim."

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