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Why Students Deserve a Two-Month Break from School

This response essay provides reasons that students should get a two-month break from school, including spending time with people and preparing themselves for the next grade.
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This essay received a C by one of Kibin's paper graders. Click here to see what was done well and what needs improvement.

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Christina's feedback:

"Well done sharing the purpose of your paper, explaining your view that students should get a two-month break from school. You're off to a good start with your argument and body paragraphs, but your introduction should have an overview of what you will be discussing in your body paragraphs along with your thesis statement. Your conclusion should have a summary of your body paragraphs and a takeaway for the reader. You have good depth in your body paragraphs, but your essay would be more well-rounded by including fleshed-out intro and conclusion paragraphs. I like that you use transition words to go between body paragraphs, but make sure you're not capitalizing the word *after* the transition. There are a few run-on sentences and grammar errors impeding the readability of the essay, so be sure to resolve those through a round of proofreading or editing."

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