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Why Teenagers Should be Tried as Adults for Violent Crimes

This essay states that teenagers should be tried as adults for violent crimes. The student gives examples of brutal crimes committed by teenagers and states that they are fully aware that what they are doing is wrong.
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Bob's feedback:

"You've taken a definitive stance on a controversial issue and stood by your convictions. It would be a good idea to address the counterarguments to your claims. For example, you state that teenagers are "fully aware" of the choices they make, but that point is often contended. This contention is the basis for the counterargument to your stance.

Many of your sentences are confusing as written. For instance, the way you introduce the example about Jae Williams makes it seem at first as if he is a commentator, not the perpetrator. Make sure to proofread carefully.

Your main claims are repeated many times. This is not only unnecessary, but it can also undermine your credibility without support as mentioned above."

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