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Why You Should Get an Annual Flu Shot

This research paper argues for the importance of annual flu vaccines. The student shows how mutation necessitates a yearly response and explains how scientists meet this demand.
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Bridget's feedback:

"Your paper is very successful: clearly argued, logically organized, and effectively presented. Your handle of the topic and the persuasive form is clear, and your writing is strong mechanically and in flow, sentence variety, and style. Your MLA citations are properly formatted (though an APA author-date style would be best for this kind of paper--you may or may not have the option depending on your instructor). My main concern is that a lot of the discussion is overly reliant on direct quotations. I should note that these quotations are properly cited--the problem is more a rhetorical issue. Overreliance on direct quotations can weaken ethos and also tends to complicate presentation by including more detail than the paper needs (detail the original source needed, but your paper may not). Instead, try to summarize and paraphrase--you will still provide a citation for those. Use direct quotations rhetorically--that is, when doing so is more persuasive thanks to a certain source word choice or the source's ethos contributing to your own. Signal phrases can help guide the reader in understanding the rhetorical purpose of a direct quote. Related, make sure to embed all quotations into your own syntax--don't present a quote on its own, standing as its own sentence."

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