Will Cloning the Black Footed Ferret Lead to Preservation or Extinction?

Bridget's feedback:

"This report is excellent: the organization is logical, with the argumentation building up persuasively to the conclusion. The use and evaluation of sources are sound, and your clear communication of the concepts indicates mastery. Overall, these "higher order" elements (argumentation, organization, source use) are looking great. With those operating well, you will want to turn your attention to the "lower-order" matters (grammar and other mechanics; formatting details from your style guide). Your writing is clear and fluid--the main issue to keep an eye on are sentence boundaries and punctuation, especially commas and semicolons. For example, under "Rationale", "given the success of..." begins an independent clause and will need a semicolon--not a comma--ahead of it. Once you straighten out the punctuation, make sure to review the edited sentences for clarity. To take the same example, the semicolon now makes it unclear if "this beloved mammal" refers to the ferrets or the pandas (this was also a little unclear in the original). In terms of the style guide, double-check against your guidelines. It looks pretty similar to APA, so my next comments will use APA as a general reference: usually, you will separate multiple sources within a parenthetical with a semicolon, and make sure all sources mentioned in the actual text include a publication year in a parenthetical; also, a quick look over the Bibliography suggests to me that you haven't added in all the reference information, so just make sure to do that before a final draft! Again, this report is in great shape, and what remains is a detail-oriented proofread to ensure a polished final product. As a final comment, I wonder if your very last sentence would better serve to open your "Conclusion", rather than close it as the final word, considering the complexity of the topic."

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