10 Thesis Statement Examples to Inspire Your Next Argumentative Essay
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Have you ever watched a great film trailer and thought, “I have to see that movie!”? A good trailer gives you the basic premise of the movie, shows you the highlights, and encourages you to want to see more.

A good thesis statement will accomplish the same thing. It gives readers an idea of the most important points of an essay, shows the highlights, and makes them want to read more.

A well-constructed thesis serves as a lighthouse for your readers, offering them a guiding light in the stormy sea of claims and evidence that make up your argumentative essay.

It will also help keep you, the writer, from getting lost in a convoluted and directionless argument.

Most importantly, a good thesis statement makes a statement. After all, it’s called a thesis statement for a reason!

“This is an interesting statement!” you want your reader to think, “Let’s see if this author can convince me.”

This blog post will dissect the components of a good thesis statement and will give you 10 thesis statement examples that you can use to inspire your next argumentative essay.

The Thesis Statement Dissected

Before I give you a blanket list of thesis statement examples, let’s run through what makes for a good thesis statement. I’ve distilled it down to four main components.

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1. A good argumentative thesis is focused and not too broad.

It’s important to stay focused! Don’t try to argue an overly broad topic in your essay, or you’re going to feel confused and unsure about your direction and purpose.


Bad ExampleDon’t write, “Eating fast food is bad and should be avoided.”

This statement is too general and would be nearly impossible for you to defend. It leaves a lot of big questions to answer. Is all fast food bad? Why is it bad? Who should avoid it? Why should anyone care?

Good exampleDo write, “Americans should eliminate the regular consumption of fast food because the fast food diet leads to preventable and expensive health issues, such as diabetes, obesity, and heart disease.”

In this example, I’ve narrowed my argument to the health consequences related to a diet of fast food. I’ve also chosen to focus on Americans rather than everyone in the universe. (Because, as we all know, inhabitants of the faraway planet Doublepatty 5 require the starches and fats inherent in fast food to survive).

2. A good argumentative thesis is centered on a debatable topic.

Back in the ‘80s, teens loved to say “that’s debatable” about claims they didn’t agree with (such as “you should clean your room” and “you shouldn’t go to that movie”). This age-old, neon-colored, bangle-wearing, peg-legged wisdom holds true today—in your thesis statement.

thesis statement examples

Bad ExampleDon’t write, “There are high numbers of homeless people living in Berkeley, California.”

No one can argue for or against this statement. It’s not debatable. It’s just a fact.

An argument over this non-debatable statement would go something like this:

“There are lots of homeless people in Berkeley.”

“Yes, there sure are a bunch of them out there.”

“Yup.”

As you can see, that’s not much of an argument.

Good exampleDo write, “Homeless people in Berkeley should be given access to services, such as regular food donations, public restrooms, and camping facilities, because it would improve life for all inhabitants of the city.”

Now that’s debatable.

Opponents could easily argue that homeless people in Berkeley already receive adequate services (“just look at all those luxurious sidewalks!”), or perhaps that they shouldn’t be entitled to services at all (“get a job, ya lazy loafers!”).

3. A good argumentative thesis picks a side.

I went into a lot of detail about the importance of picking sides in my post The Secrets of a Strong Argumentative Essay. Picking a side is pretty much the whole entire point of an argumentative essay.

Just as you can’t root for both the Yankees and the Mets, you can’t argue both sides of a topic in your thesis statement.

Bad ExampleDon’t write, “Secondhand smoke is bad and can cause heart disease and cancer; therefore, smoking should be outlawed in public places, but outlawing smoking is unfair to smokers so maybe non-smokers can just hold their breath or wear masks around smokers instead.”

A wishy-washy statement like this will make your reader scratch his head in puzzlement. Are you for smoking laws or against them? Yankees or Mets? Mets or Yankees?

Pick a side, and stick with it!

Then stick up for it.

Good exampleDo write, “Secondhand smoke is just as harmful as smoking and leads to a higher prevalence of cancer and heart disease. What’s worse, people who inhale secondhand smoke are doing so without consent. For this reason, smoking in any public place should be banned.”

4. A good thesis makes claims that will be supported later in the paper.

As I explained in my blog post How to Create a Powerful Argumentative Essay Outline, Your claims make up a critical part of building the roadmap to your argument.

It’s important to first include a summary of your claims in your thesis statement. During the course of your essay, you will back each of your claims with well-researched evidence.

Bad ExampleDon’t write, “Humans should relocate to Mars.”

This statement doesn’t include any supporting claims. Why should humans move to Mars? What are the benefits of moving to a planet without oxygen or trees?

Good exampleDo write, “It is too late to save earth; therefore, humans should immediately set a date for their relocation to Mars where, with proper planning, they can avoid issues of famine, war, and global warming.”

This statement includes some thought-provoking claims. The reader will wonder how the author plans to defend them. (“Famine, war, and global warming can be easily avoided on Mars? Go on…”)

Now that you understand the four main components of a good thesis statement, let me give you more thesis statement examples.

10 Thesis Statement Examples

Finally, I’ve come up with 10 debatable, supportable, and focused thesis statements for you to learn from. Feel free to copy these and customize them for use in your own argumentative essays.

There are a couple of things to be aware of about the following examples:

  1. I have not done the research needed to support these claims. So some of the claims may not be useable once you dig into them.
  2. Be careful not to use these thesis statements word-for-word; I wouldn’t want you to get in trouble if your teacher did a copy/find Google maneuver on you!

#1. Why Vaccinations Should Be Mandatory

Inspired by this sample essay on vaccinations.

Today, nearly 40% of American parents refuse to vaccinate their children due to a variety of unfounded fears. Vaccinations against diseases such as polio, rubella, and mumps, should be mandatory, without exception, for all children of the U.S. who wish to attend school. These vaccinations are critical to the control and eradication of deadly infectious diseases.

#2. Government Surveillance Is Harmful

Inspired by this sample essay on government surveillance.

Government surveillance programs do more harm than good because they invade civil liberties, lead innocent people to suffer unfair punishments, and ultimately fail to protect the citizens that they are designed to safeguard. For these reasons, programs such as PRISM operated by the NSA should be discontinued.

#3 Financial Compensation for Organ Donors

Inspired by this sample essay on organ donation.

People who sign up for organ donation freely give their hearts and other organs, but this free system limits the number of available donors and makes it difficult for recipients to access lifesaving transplants. Thus, organ donors should be financially compensated to produce more available organs and, at the same time, to decrease profitable, illegal organ harvesting activities in the black market.

#4. Our School Is Too Dependent on Technology

Inspired by this sample essay on technology dependence.

Our school’s dependence on technology has caused students to lose the ability to think independently. This dependence has caused a greater prevalence of mood disorders, memory loss, and loneliness. Educators should combat these issues by requiring students to participate in regular technology detoxes.

#5 School Officials’ Should Fight Cyberbullying

Inspired by this sample essay on cyberbullying.

Bullying has extended far beyond school and into cyberspace. Even though these acts of aggression take place outside of school boundaries, school officials should have the authority to discipline students who engage in cyberbullying without fear of reprisal. Doing so will help improve the online behavior of students and decrease incidences of cyberbully-related suicide attempts.

#6 The U.S. Media Should Update the Depiction of Traditional Families

Inspired by this sample essay on families.

The U.S. media depicts the traditional family as being comprised of a mother, father, and children; however, this notion of the traditional family is outdated and can be harmful to children who look to this as the gold standard. The U.S. media should, therefore, expand and redefine the definition of the traditional American family to include divorced and remarried parents, extended families living together, and families with same-gender parents. This will increase the overall sense of happiness and well-being among children whose families don’t necessarily fit the mold.

#7 Student Loans Should Be Forgiven

Inspired by this sample essay on student loans.

Crippling student debt is stifling the growth of the U.S. economy because it inhibits graduates from being able to spend money on consumer goods and home purchases. To alleviate this, lenders should be required to forgive student loans in cases where students are unable to repay their debts. Doing so would benefit the growth of the economy by increasing tax revenues, unfreezing credit markets, and creating jobs.

#8 Marijuana Should Be Legalized

Inspired by this sample essay on legalizing marijuana.

Marijuana has numerous medical applications, such as treating symptoms of epilepsy, cancer, and glaucoma. Legalizing the use of marijuana in the U.S. will greatly benefit the medical sector by giving physicians access to this lifesaving drug.

#9 Foreign Aid to Africa Does Not Work

Inspired by this sample essay on foreign aid to Africa.

Sending foreign aid to African countries is doing more harm than good, and it should be discontinued; the practice has caused African countries to become vulnerable to inflation, currency fluctuations, corruption, and civil unrest.

#10 China’s One-Child Policy Should Be Reversed

Inspired by this sample essay on China’s one-child policy.

China’s one-child policy was intended to help control population growth. Instead, it has led to unintended and negative consequences, such as a diminishing labor force, an aging population, the neglect of basic human rights, and an unbalanced gender population. To improve China’s situation, the policy should be reversed.

 

Any one of these thesis statement examples will get you started on the road to writing an awesome argumentative essay. Once your essay is finished, feel free to send it to a Kibin editor who can check it for grammar, sentence structure, and the strength of your thesis.

Good luck with your essay!

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  • Kaaaaaaaaaaaaaayyyyyy

    Thanks so much! This is all super helpful info 🙂

  • Nicole Simser

    So I have previously handed in my thesis: Do social relationships have an impact on students’ stress reduction, and have gotten it back from my prof saying that it is not a debatable topic. I cannot change my topic but how can I make it more debatable in my thesis statement? Can you help?

    • My advice would be for you to take a strong stance on the issue. Instead of framing it as a question, as you have it now, frame it as a statement (after all it’s a thesis statement, right), and also take a stance on what should or should not be done about this topic.

      For example: “Social relationships are proven (or not proven) to reduce student stress, so professors/administrators/someone else SHOULD (or shouldn’t) encourage more social interactions in education because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3”

      This outline of a thesis statement is an improvement on your original for a couple of reasons:
      1. It creates a debatable question around your topic (should professors/someone be responsible for encouraging more social interactions among students?)
      2. It takes a stance: you argue that they should or shouldn’t do something, and you’re going to show three (or four, or five) reasons why you are right.

      I’m not saying that this is necessarily SUPPORTABLE because I haven’t done the research you will be doing, but I hope you can see where I’m going with this… I encourage you to consider your topic in this light and come up with a debatable statement about what should or shouldn’t be done about it.

      Good luck!

      • Nicole Simser

        Thank you so much for your help! Although, I think this is another topic that anyone could agree with. I am in need of a topic that some people could easily be against.

        • Without being able to change your topic, as you stated in your first comment–I think the trick is to find something debatable that should or shouldn’t be done about the topic of social relationships reducing student stress. I’m not 100% sure what that might be since I haven’t done any research into it…

  • Brishonna Williams

    I’m having trouble writing a good thesis for a research project. Can you help me?

  • omalicha

    Can someone help me in writting introduction and thesis statement of technology. I want to write on negative effect

  • Keedy

    i need help with writing a thesis statement on falling into debt (Cause and effect)

    • Hi! What’s your stance on the topic? What do you argue is causing people to fall into debt? For example, is it how easy it is to get into high interest credit cards, student loans, or something else? Also… are you arguing that anything should or should not be done about debt? Finally, who are you talking about specifically? Students? Americans?

  • dreamchaser8

    i need help with writing a thesis statement on comparing and contrasting two poems by robert frost Stopping by woods on a snowy day and The sound of trees

    • Hi there! I’d definitely recommend downloading my free thesis statement guide to help you out. It will help you break down your topic, pick a stance, and write a better thesis statement in 6 easy steps. You can access it by signing up in one of the boxes on this page.

      • yahya panezai

        It was very helpful and it guided me how to develop a well argumentative thesis statement. Can you check my thesis statements, or perhaps essays, on few topics which i believe could come in an upcoming exam i am preparing for?

  • Hi there! As you can see, I get a lot of questions from students just like you on how to write a thesis statement. That’s why I created my thesis statement guide. It will walk you through each step from idea to thesis. You should sign up to download it using any of the boxes for it on this page.

    • robelto

      can yo help me please?

  • Jimoh

    Hi, can you help me write a thesis statement on “a comparative evaluation of the traditional management accountant role and management accountant as a business partner” in a Non-governmental organisation

    thanks

    Jimoh

  • LILLY

    I NEED HELP ON A THESIS STATEMENT ON ADOLF HITLER AND HOW IS HE A LEGEND CAN ANYONE HELP????!!!!!!

    • Hi there, what an interesting topic! All you need to do is take a stance and support it with specific and supportable reasons. For example: Adolf Hitler is a legend because he is extremely notorious for his role in World War II, the murder of millions of innocent people, and the rise of Nazi Germany.

      (I wrote “extremely notorious” because that is one definition of a “legend”)

      This is just an idea… you should definitely make this thesis statement your own. For more help, I suggest you download my free, thesis statement guide (just enter your email in the box on the right bottom corner of this page).

      Good luck!

  • Mary Lou

    I need a thesis statement about my overall improvement from the beginning of the semester in my writing till now the end of the semester. PLEASE HELP!!!!!

    • Hi Mary Lou… I suggest using a basic framework like this:
      My writing has improved a great deal since the beginning of the semester as evidenced by reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      Obviously you want to argue that your writing HAS improved! (At least, I hope it has… and I’m sure your instructor hopes so too.)

      Each reason you choose should be supported in your paper. For instance, if reason 1 is “my improved thesis statements,” give an example of a thesis statement you wrote early on and one you wrote later that was much improved.

      You might also benefit from downloading my free thesis statement guide offered in the email box at the bottom right of this page.

      Good luck!

      • ISOLDMYSOULFORBOOBS

        maybe I should ask you a question about a topic that pretty much got me upset, my prof keeps telling me im wrong and well I need a second opinion. My first essay is about “personal learning experience” and here is my intro.
        Like many Americans I held views about the world that were negative compared to the views that I held about the United States. Before 2010 I knew little about the world besides that which I learned in the news media and soon I came to learn that it was highly biased. I used to believe that the United States was the greatest and that anything else was subpar. As the sole child of immigrants who came to the first world for a better life, I was raised with the idea that the roads where paved with gold and that everything America did was right. However that all changed when I joined the military and proceeded to experience different cultures and customs that were unfamiliar to those that I experienced in America.
        Okay that’s my intro but my prof keeps telling me that I’m talking about the world and not me, which sure I am, but this is the rough draft. But after he reads my thesis he says that there had to be something that changed my life and if he would read farther along he would know it.
        I’m just looking for a second opinion what the hell is he talking about, its right in my thesis statement.

  • Gin

    I really need a thesis statement about the effect of the Leader’s age on the Business performance. We’ve been rejected by our Professor for a lot of times, and she only give us ONE LAST CHANCE to pass a right one. Please help me 🙁 Thanks!

    • Hi there,

      I may be a little late to help on this… my first question is what is your stance? For example does a younger leader have a positive impact on business performance or vice versa? Once you choose a side that you can defend, you may have better luck creating your thesis.

      Here’s an example: “Young leaders in their twenties are more effective and have a positive impact on business performance due to REASON 1, REASON 2, REASON 3.” It’s up to you to fill in the reasons why this is true.

      Or you might want to reverse the argument. Example, “Young leaders in their twenties are less effective and have a negative impact on business performance due to REASON 1, REASON 2, REASON 3.”

      Good luck!
      Naomi

      • Gin

        Thank you so much! 🙂

  • Samantha

    I’m having trouble writing a thesis statement about why the Nothern Gateway Pipeline project is a bad idea. Thank you so much, Samantha

    • Hi Samantha, you’re part way there already!

      You have already taken your stance against the pipeline, and now you just need to come up with some reasons that it is a bad idea. Make sure they are reasons that you can defend using credible sources.

      Ultimately, your thesis statement might look something like this: “The Northern Gateway Pipeline project should not be completed because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.” Fill in the reasons with the research you have found and that you can support throughout the rest of your paper.

      Good luck! Naomi

  • yeunhum16

    can you help me to make an thesis statement on the ASEAN INTEGRATION 2015 AT THE PHILIPPINES? thanks

    • Hi there! I suggest that you download my free thesis statement guide for help. Look to the bottom right of this page to see the box where you can request the guide. Good luck!

  • noah r

    i need help on a thesis for weapons used and made during the civil war

  • Heyty

    I need help on my essay. I have to show how peace , love and another value relates to a theme but I don’t know what that theme would be. Or thesis that realtes to those values.

  • Gorge

    hello there 😀 i have a research coming up ( argumentative ) and i was hoping if you could be kind enough to give me a thesis . my topic is about the moon landing , is it fake or true and provide examples to back up your side ( i am with the side that says it is fake ) so can anyone here help me please ?

  • lindsey

    I need help writing a thesis statement about how children with anger behavior issues need to get help at a young age please.

  • sabrina

    Hey i read everything but i still don’t know what kind of thesis i should pick.. can you give me some ideas???

  • ChocoNerd

    Please help ASAP! I need a thesis statement. My topic is ”The Effects of Media” Thanks soooo much

    • Hi there,

      I definitely recommend you pick up my FREE thesis statement writing guide. It will help walk you through how to build a thesis statement from that topic. You can get it by putting your email address into the box at the bottom right corner of this page. I made this guide for students just like you!

      Good luck!

  • noor

    hi dear
    I need a research question. my thesis topic is causes and prevalence of hallucination and delusions in women with schizophrenia.

  • Hi Blessie,
    It sounds like you want to say something like the following:

    Good nutrition, defined as X, is the key to improved cognitive ability in second grade students; studies show that a healthy diet is linked to X, X, and X.

    The Xs are placeholders since I haven’t done your research.
    1. Define good nutrition (for example, a diet high in vitamins, lean proteins, and fibers…)
    2. Define the results of good nutrition (for example, higher levels of class participation, better behavior, excelling in reading and math… etc.)

    If you haven’t already, I suggest requesting my thesis statement guide to further assist. Just enter your email in the box at the bottom right of this page and I’ll send it to you right away.

    Good luck!
    Naomi

  • mems

    hi need help writting a good thesis about what i learned guring my teens

    • Hi there,
      I think the trick for you is to come up with about three very interesting things that you learned in your teens. Can you think of some distinct life experiences that changed who you are as a person?

      Then your thesis statement can be something like:
      “My teen years were transformational; during this time I learned thing 1, thing 2, and thing 3.”

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • Renee Torri

    Hi! thanks so much for your amazing post!. I am writing an essay about my personal narrative (story), just pretty much aspects in my life such as hobbies, family, goals and things that define who i am. Im not sure what type of thesis to include.. or thesis sentence. Id appreciate some much needed guidance. thanks so much.

    • Hi Renee,

      Thanks for the kind words; I’m glad you liked this post!

      Your thesis statement can be pretty simple since the goal is to just lay out the foundation of your narrative. I would pick about three experiences/things that have defined who you are and write something like this:

      Three major experiences in my life have defined who I am today, these include experience 1, experience 2, and experience 3.

      So for example, mine might be: Three major experiences in my life have defined who I am today, these include having my daughter, publishing my first book, and moving to California.

      You can then go on to expand on each of your experiences in your supporting paragraph.

      Or you could focus in more tightly (depending on the assignment) and write specifically about three goals you have achieved, or three hobbies that you enjoy.

      I like to use three examples, but depending on how long your essay needs to be, you can find as many examples as are appropriate!

      I also recommend you read this blog post about writing a great personal narrative: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-narrative-essay/

      Good luck!

      • Renee Torri

        You are simply amazing! thanks a million!

  • Sarah

    I need to submit an essay so can you please please write a thesis statement for this ASAP:
    How useful and rewarding do you find social networking sites?

  • Amanda White

    Hi
    I need help writing a thesis statement on the book Sula by Toni Morrison. I was thinking of the topics of power or injustice

  • kendall smiler

    i need help writing a thesis statement about current issues in Papua new guinea. maybe relating to the war between Indonesia or the amount of refugees?

  • Rachelleb20

    I need help writing my thesis statement.
    My question is – What factors limit healthcare resources and how do these limitations challenge the work of a healthcare professional? (based on short story the steel windpipe)
    my key points :
    Secluded (rural area)
    Inexperience
    Lack of confidence
    Young
    Limited Support (Only doctor)
    Lack of compassion
    can you help me put this into a thesis sentence please 🙂

    • You have all the components in place. Your thesis might look something like this:

      “Several factors limit healthcare resources and challenge the work of the healthcare professional including working in health clinics located in rural or secluded locations, inexperience, youth, and lack of confidence in the healthcare professional, an overall lack of compassion exhibited by healthcare professionals, and limited (financial? emotional?) support for the doctor.”

      My question for you is, what do you mean by limited support? You might want to refine this to say “limited financial support” or “limited staff support” or whatever it is you mean that is more specific and can be better explained in your essay.

      • Rachelleb20

        Hi Naomi,

        This is what I have so far:

        For
        many communities, the demand for qualified healthcare professionals may be
        scarce, but for rural and remote areas, they are on the rise, becoming one of
        the key challenges for these health care systems. To reduce competition, these communities
        offer a mix of incentives in order to attract these healthcare professionals to
        their areas. As these positions are less
        desired by experienced professionals, most become filled by young, new
        graduates. Several factors that challenge these new graduates working in remote
        clinics are seclusion, inexperience, and limited resources and staff support.

        • Pretty good job! It was just a little too wordy and confusing. Here is my suggested edit:

          The demand for qualified healthcare professionals in rural and remote areas is on the rise, and meeting this demand is becoming a challenge. To reduce competition, rural communities offer a mix of incentives in order to attract competent healthcare professionals to their areas. Because positions in rural areas are less desired by experienced professionals, most positions are filled by young, new graduates. Several factors that challenge the new graduates working in remote clinics are seclusion from the medical community, their own inexperience, and limited resources and staff support.

  • Lele

    I am doing research on African americans discrimination in the criminal justice system. Would love some feedback on how to conduct a thesis statement for this exactly.

    • This is definitely an interesting and rich topic with a wealth of information. I highly suggest that you download my thesis statement writing guide for more help–>just input your email address in the box at the bottom right of this screen.
      Good luck!
      Naomi

      • Lele

        Thank you!

  • Sab

    Hi Naomi. I am having trouble coming up with a thesis statement on weather the legal drinking age should be lowered to 18, raised to 25, or kept at 21.. HELP!

    • Hi Sab,
      Well it sounds like you first have to make a choice on which you want to defend. I think you could ostensibly defend any of these three drinking ages. If it were me, I would defend the drinking age of 18 and use the moderate drinking behaviors of students in countries like France as supporting evidence that a lower drinking age is better. You could also argue that if you’re old enough to join the military, you should be old enough to drink.

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • Isabelle Esparza

    Hi Naomi,
    I need help writing a thesis statement on, Pets are often treated like surrogate children.,. Can you help?

    • Hi Isabelle,

      As both a parent of a human and a (crazy) dog owner I think you could have a lot of fun with this topic. You’ve already chosen a topic and a stance, so all you need is to include the supports that you are going to defend in your paper. For example:

      “Dog and cat lovers often treat their pets like surrogate children as evidenced by the way they speak to their animals, the extra care they give to their pets, and the tight bonds they form. These actions are all reflective of those exhibited in parent-child relationships.”

      Since I haven’t done your research, I don’t know if those supports are any good; but I hope you get the idea! (Don’t forget to download my thesis statement writing guide for more help–>just input your email address in the box at the bottom right of this screen.)

      Good luck!

  • Lissa

    Hello ! So I’m trying to develop a these statement for the story “The Love of my Life” by Coraghessa Boyle. I dint it a little difficult to find an argument in which I’m picking a side. Any type of advice would be very helpful.
    Thank you
    Lissa

  • kyle

    Hi I really need help about my thesis. My topic is about “The effects of labeling our society” can you help me? whhy do people afraid of theirselves? why do people judge? Why is society getting worse?

    • You need to narrow your topic down quite a bit. You are trying to cover too many different ideas in this paper.

  • jazoguza

    can you give me a strong thesis statements focusing on climate change.

    • Climate change is such a huge topic. I would suggest narrowing it down as much as possible to help you write a stronger thesis statement.

      For example:

      The US government should take actions to reduce emissions leading to global warming and climate change by doing action 1, action2, and action 3.

      Or you could take it to a local level. For example,

      The city of X should take actions.

      Or you could take to an individual level. For example:

      Every individual has a responsibility to take actions to reduce his or her carbon footprint and , therefore, decrease global climate change, including action 1, action 2, and action 3.

  • Lisa O

    Single parents who are primary caregivers of disabled children suffer from depression because of x, y, and z.

  • John Paulo

    hi, i need some help on thesis statement, about Exposing controversies over national achievement test. thanks. your reply will be greatly appreciated. 🙂

    • Hi John Paulo- I think you’d definitely benefit from downloading my thesis statement guide! You need to choose a stance and supports for this topic and the guide will help you. Download by putting your email in the box at the bottom-right corner of this page. Best, Naomi

  • nick

    Hey Naomi, I’m struggling my thesis. I have no idea on how to start. I want to write about compare and contrast essay… “soccer played on Xbox and soccer played in a field”

  • Stef

    Hi,

    I need help with my thesis, its about

    Gwendolen tells Jack, “We live, as I hope you know, Mr. Worthing, in an age of ideals” (1. 894). What “age” is she referring to? Can you deduce what these “ideals” might be from the words and actions of the characters in The Importance of Being Earnest? Ultimately, does the play merely ridicule the characters for not measuring up to these ideals, or does it also ridicule the ideals themselves for being impossible to achieve by flawed human beings?

    • Your instructor has your task pretty well laid out for you. Start by doing the following:
      1. Define the “age”
      2. Define the “ideals”
      3. Pick a side–does the play ridicule the characters? Or does it ridicule the ideals themselves (I would think that writing about how the play ridicules the ideals themselves would be more interesting)
      4. Put it all together.

      Good luck!

  • loryanne

    hi can i ask the statement of the problem my thesis is Lived experiences of heart transplanted men

    • Men who have received heart transplants are prone to different problems including problem 1, problem 2, and problem 3.

      The difficult thing about your topic is it’s hard to take a side or a stance. If you are writing an expository essay, and your goal is to simply inform your reader on the topic of heart transplants than this is okay.

      However, if you are trying to persuade or argue whether men should receive heart transplants, you need to frame your topic in a way where you can pick a side to defend.

      For example:

      American men should not undergo heart transplants because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      OR if you want to take a problem-solution type angle you could write:

      The organ donation system needs to be simplified to improve patient access to heart donors and receive life-saving heart transplants. Three solutions can be used to simplify this process including solution 1, solution 2, and solution 3.

  • Kelly

    I need help writing a thesis that will describe a person that has special meaning in my life.

    • First pick the person who has special meaning to you, and then reflect on 2-5 reasons why this person is meaningful. What has he or she done to change your life for the better?

      For example,

      “My older sister has special meaning in my life because she gives me the best advice, she inspires me to work hard, and she makes me laugh.”

  • Matt

    Hi Naomi, I’m working on a book critique thesis statement. Wondering if you have any pointers? I’m thinking something like this- ” My Beloved World by Sonia Sotomayor truly depicts how adversity can be subjugated by hard work, perseverance and native optimism.” What do you think?

    • Hi Matt!

      I think this looks really clean. I would suggest removing the unnecessary adjective “truly” and I might recommend changing your word choice “subjugated” to “overcome” for a better connotation in meaning.

      “My Beloved World by Sonia Sotomayor depicts how adversity can be overcome by hard work, perseverance and native optimism.”

      Otherwise, you have set yourself up to write a well-organized paper. Good work!

      Naomi

  • BasedGodVine

    I need help with writing a thesis on how students shouldnt be required to wear a school uniform

    • Hi there!
      First things first, you need to pick a side! For example:

      Students should be required to wear school uniforms because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      Or

      Students should not be required to wear school uniforms because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      You might find some of these example essays that other students wrote about the school uniform issue to be inspirational: https://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/search/school%20uniforms

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • Hi there!
    You first need to pick a side! For example:

    Beauty pageants negatively affect young children because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

    Or

    Beauty pageants positively affect young children because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

    I would pick the perspective that has more research and supports to back it up.

    Good luck!
    Naomi

  • Brandon

    I need help writing a thesis for why violent video games affect youth drasticly

    • Hi Brandon,

      It sounds like you are taking a stance against violent video games, so your thesis statement could look something like:

      Violent video games drastically and negatively affect (American) youth and because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

  • Samuel

    Thanks so much.. I didn’t even finish reading your article before i came up with sum thing new…just your opening about a Movie Trailer. and the Fast food Example coupled with previous knowledge from class.

    • Awesome! I’m really happy to hear it. Keep on Kibin on! Naomi

  • Bly.Elle.Coryne

    I’m writing a paper on elder financial abuse/exploitation and having trouble with my thesis statement. Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated. Thanx

    • It sounds like you are working on a problem-solution style paper. You should start by stating the problem (the financial exploitation of the elderly) and your proposed solutions to this problem. So your thesis statement would look something like this:

      The financial exploitation of elderly citizens (in a specified location would be best) is on the rise. Law enforcement/government/family (WHO?) needs to take measures to protect older people from these types of abuses. Potential solutions include solution 1, solution 2, and solution 3…etc.

      As you can see the above draft still leaves a lot of question marks. Which citizens, exactly, are being targeted? Who needs to protect them? What should they do to protect them?

      Then you can spend the rest of your paper discussing your proposed solutions.

      Good luck!

      • Lei

        i need to write an arguable thesis statement for my essay on this Topic>The current rise in diabetes
        among young people today is directly related to their diet. Most evidence
        suggests that the diet of young people is full of convenience and junk food
        that contain high levels of sugar and harmful additives. This has led to an
        obesity epidemic with serious consequences.

        Do you agree that the health
        of young people today is related to their diet? What are your reasons and what
        can parents, schools and communities do to control the obesity epidemic?

        can you please give me an example for one thesis statement according to this topic?

  • mlaura

    hi, could someone please help me on a thesis statement for an essay that I have to write about artist William turner and james turrell and how they relate through light in their work

  • Frozen

    I’m working on a persuasive essay on why computer shouldn’t be used so much in school. Any suggestions on my thesis statement?

    • Hi Frozen,

      How about something like this.

      “Schools should limit their use of computers in the classroom because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.”

  • Stella

    Hi! i need help starting my thesis sentence. I’m writing a critical thinking essay on the privacy issues of technology, but I can’t think of a way to get it started.

  • pmc

    I need help writing a thesis on what can i do to ensure that i am not going to be an unhappy and frustrated employee?? helppp please.

    • Hi pmc,

      This one is a pretty basic set up, you should write something like this:

      “I will take the following steps to make sure that I avoid becoming an unhappy and frustrated employee: step 1, step 2, and step 3.”

  • marcus

    I am trying to come up with a thesis statement to compare or contrast the Bulger Brothers

    • Hi Marcus,

      Let’s say you want to compare the brothers. You could write something like:

      “The Bulger Brothers are more similar than different as evidenced by the fact that they both like coffee, they’re both gazillionaires, and they both married their high school sweethearts.”

      Haha obviously I have no idea who the Bulger Brothers are or what makes them similar, but I hope you see what I’m doing here.

      “The Bulger Brothers are similar as evidenced by similarity #1, #2, and #3.”

      Also, you might find this blog post helpful: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-compare-and-contrast-essay/

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • marcus

    Hi I need a thesis statement for comparing the Bulger Brothers..thank you..really stuck for wording..

  • tyo

    I need a thesis statement why women a preventing from entering parliament?

    • You can take one of two sides to this issue:

      Women should be prevented from entering parliament because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      OR

      Women shouldn’t be prevented from entering parliament because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      I think you’d have better luck defending the second option.

      Good luck!

  • minerva

    please help me to write our thesis proposal about “the significance of project based multimedia learning to teaching-learning process…. asap plsssss…. tnx

    • Hi Minerva,

      I would start with something like this for your thesis statement.

      Project-based multimedia learning is significant to the teaching-learning process because reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      Fill in the reasons with the claims you plan to support in your paper.

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • Nerd Student

    Hi! Can you help me to write a thesis statement for my essay? I’m going to write about bad effects of consuming fast food. Thanks for helping 🙂

    • Hi Nerd Student (I like the handle!)

      You might write something like this:

      Eating fast food has serious negative impacts on Americans because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.
      or
      Americans should not eat fast food because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      Remember to choose who you are writing about (your focus) and offer reasons that you can easily support in your paper.

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • Mickey

    I need help writing a thesis statment

    How to determine if one is capable of
    starting a business

  • maya

    hello, can somebody help writing a thesis please?

    1) The welfare of the individual is more important than the welfare of the group.
    2) Earning a lot of money is more important than having an interesting job.
    3)The government should take care of the poor and homeless.
    4)Life is basically a competitive race for success.

    I have no idea what to do, please help

    • You are so close. It looks like any 4 of those statements can make the beginning of a strong thesis statement.

      1) The welfare of the individual is more important than the welfare of the group because reason 1, reason 2, reason 3.
      2) Earning a lot of money is more important than having an interesting job because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.
      etc. etc.

      I would pick the topic that interests you most and that you can find the best reasons to back with your research.

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • Nice post. Thanks for sharing.

  • It sounds like you might be comparing time-out and time-in? If so you might consider something like this:

    Time-in is a better method for disciplining children than the typical time-out method. The benefits of time-in include benefit 1, benefit 2, and benefit 3.

    Or you could reverse this and argue that time-out is more effective.

    Good luck!

  • You might benefit from using our free thesis statement builder.

    You need to figure out who should be against surveillance cameras and why!

  • Hi Krystal,

    Technology is good for our society because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

    Select three reasons you think it’s good that you can defend with research!

    You might also find the thesis statement builder to be helpful. Check out the box on the right—>

    Good luck!

  • Hi Melly,

    You could write something like this:

    Teachers should use regular portfolio assessments in the classroom because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

    You will cite reasons that you can back up with research.

    Good luck!
    Naomi

  • I think you are off to a good start with this. The percentage statistic could be used as a great way to hook your readers (especially if that number is staggering). For more info on hooks, check out this post: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/good-hook-sentences/

    Regarding your thesis statement, you are almost there. I feel like you are working on a problem-solution essay, in which case your thesis could look like this:

    X% of African American women have been negatively impacted by being molested (by who?) as children (your hook). Many families cover up instances of child molestation and never deal with the issue, which leads to alarming rates of depression and suicide. It is critical that (WHO? social workers? be specific) offer families suffering from this abuse help in the form of solution 1, solution 2, and solution 3. (your thesis)

    Make sure to offer solutions that are well researched and can actually make a difference to this heart-wrenching problem.

    Good luck!

    Naomi

  • elizaa

    i really need help writing a thesis statement on “so much water water so close to home”
    the question ask, the more this editor induced
    the original writer to pare down his stories the less meaningful they became.’ To what extent do you agree with this statement?
    basically its a short story written by raymond carver but edited by Gordon Lish.

    personally i strongly believe the edited version by his editor where more meaningful, so how would i start off my thesis?

  • Bella

    I’m having a hard time writing a thesis about the culture of London and my main three topics are diverse population, tourism and architecture (buildings).. Would be very thankful for some help ASAP

    • I think you are missing your key argument… what exactly are you arguing that the culture of London IS? London’s culture is ??? as evidenced by its divers population, tourism, and beautiful architecture.

      I think if you could fill in that missing word that will tie this all together, you’ll be in good shape. You might need to revise your supports to better support that key argument. I hope this helps!

  • Gabrielle

    Hi, im having a hard time coming up with a thesis statement. My paper is about Acts 1:8 and the prompt “is what does ends of the earth mean in Acts 1:8.”

    But you will receive power when the Holy Spirit comes on you; and you will be my witnesses in Jerusalem, and in all Judea and Samaria, and to the ends of the earth.”

    my professor is asking us what does it mean when they say ends of the earth. From the sources that ive read its talking about a geographical content. I have no idea how to start this paper or even give a strong thesis, can you please help me!!

  • Andrea

    Hello, I need a thesis statement on how a canine rescue influences the community

  • Daughterofaking

    Hi!
    Can you help me write a thesis statement about FACE-TO-FACE LEARNING BETTER THAN ONLINE LEARNING? Thanks 🙂

    • Hi! You’re almost there:

      Face to face learning is better than online learning because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      Remember to choose reasons that you can easily defend using research.

      Good luck!

      • Daughterofaking

        Can you give me my thesis statements ? please. thank you

      • wahida

        can you please help me too in my thiese

        • Based on the small amount of information you have given me here is my suggestion for a thesis:

          ​Public schools should not serving junk food, defined as food with no traditional value, to students because it leads to obesity, poor behavior, and health problems.

          ​In this suggestion your focus is: public schools
          ​Your stance is: against junk food
          ​Your reasons are: leads to obesity, poor behavior, and health problems

          ​What do you think?

          • wahida

            Can you write me an argumentative thesis about this junk food please

  • nono

    i need help in starting my intro essay my topic is child limitation in china can anyone help?

  • Lei

    hi
    can you please help me with a arguable thesis statement about this topic
    Obesity epidemic.
    Do you agree that young people health is related to their diet? eating of junk food. and what should family, schools and communities do about it?

    • The health of young people is related directly to their diets; therefore, families, schools, and communities should take measures to promote healthy eating and limit junk food intake among young people by taking action 1, action 2, and action 3.

      Good luck!

      • gege

        hi can you please help me with a thesis my topic goes like this, stricted penalty for cell phones usage while driving.

      • dude

        Hey, I need a thesis statement over the comparisons and contrasts of the election of 1860 and slavery in the american revolution. plz help!

  • Missy

    hello, I am writing an argumentative paper on the right to choose death when faced with terminal illness and I am not sure how to start it. Thanks.

    • Hi Missy,

      You have a topic and a stance, so now you just need supports. Here is my suggestion for the framework:

      People who face terminal illness should have the right to die because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      Good luck!

      Naomi

  • Jerene Tan

    Hello, can anyone please help me to write a paragraph of thesis
    statement about the effects of smoking topic? thank you so much!!

  • Athena Riley

    need a thesis on why items are important to me. Can someone help me?!!

  • Alexis

    I need help with a thesis statement on long-distance relationships between college students in America.

    • Long-distance relationships are becoming more prevalent in the U.S. because of the internet; these relationships are beneficial (OR detrimental) to college students’ well-being because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

  • jaja

    Help plss….i need to create a thesis its all about “more job opportunities are needed in the PH” plsss help me

  • maria

    i need help writing a thesis for muslim americans after 9/11

    • Muslim Americans have been unfairly maligned since 9/11 as evidenced by evidence 1, evidence 2, and evidence 3.

      Although there are a thousand different ways you can approach this topic, that seems like one that would be fairly simple to support.

      Good luck!

      • eric

        that is some good advice

  • Oliver Hickox

    Hi, im having trouble with my thesis statement, i have no clue what to put! It is about the Social Impact of tornadoes.

    • Tornadoes are devastating to the communities they hit because they lead to human loss, property loss, and enormous expenses in a matter of minutes.

  • Charlotte Coultas

    I need help writing a thesis statement. My topic is The media’s perception on women in the working field.

  • fn

    i need a thesis about children and internet and about rights of people with disabilities

  • Joverlyn Pizzuto

    hi, I need help writing a thesis statement on teenage brain and underage drinking. thank you.

    • Underage drinking is bad for the teenage brain because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      OR

      Underage drinking isn’t as bad for the teenage brain as one would think because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      Good luck!

  • Being a social worker comes with many benefits including benefit 1, benefit 2, and benefit 3.

  • Hi there–here are a few blog posts that can help you pick a topic.
    Problem solution essay topics:
    https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/problem-solution-essay-topics/

    Compare contrast essay topics:

    https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/compare-and-contrast-essay-topics/

    Good luck!

  • Cooking at home is better than eating out because it helps save money, it is healthier and lower in calories, and it is easier to control the sources and types of foods in your diet.

    Good luck!

  • Writing is difficult because grammar and spelling is tough to master and it can be very tough to put thoughts into words.

  • Obesity is one of the biggest problems Americans face today due to the health risks, psychological implications, and high incidence of mortality.

  • The Nashville 2010 flood was one of the most devastating natural disasters to ever hit the city due to the number of lives lost, the displacement of the city’s citizens, the high insurance costs, and the large number of businesses that were shut down.

  • Depictions of violence on television negatively influences teenagers because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

    I would recommend keeping it focused on just teenagers and just violence for a more easy to manage paper.

  • Help

    I am trying to write a good thesis statement on Vietnamese Boat People and their journey escaping. Any suggestions?

    • The Vietnamese Boat People faced numerous challenges and struggles during their escape from (where?) including challenge 1, challenge 2, and challenge 3.

      Good luck!

  • Jenipher

    I am to write an essay answering these three questions. What was the intent of the Act of Union? To what extent did it create circumstances that necessitated confederation? To what extent did it create circumstances that enabled confederation? So confused on a thesis for my essay.

    • Your teacher has kind of already given you a working thesis statement. I’d just rewrite it as follows:

      This paper will discuss the intent of the Act of Union and the extent to which it created the circumstances leading to and enabling confederation.

      Good luck!

  • LilQeenb Bebe Pina

    I need help on a thesis statement I’m doing a argument paper, I’m doing it on drugs and family, I’m agents it when I know a family who has people in it that use drugs can I get help in a strong thesis?

    • Drug abuse is harmful to families because it leads to bad effect 1, bad effect 2, and bad effect 3.

      Choose the bad effects that you can defend based on the examples you have!

      Good luck!

  • Sabrina

    Hi I need help with coming up with a thesis statement for a paper over the culture of the Potawatomi tribe. The paper overall needs to include their oral tradition, religious beliefs, and how their worldview shapes their organization. I’m not sure how to portray this in a thesis statement that isn’t really arguing anything.

    • Hi there, sounds like you need an expository thesis statement that simply lays out your paper (it’s like a mini-outline of what you’re going to write about). So for example:

      This paper will discuss the Potawatomi tribe’s oral traditions and religious, beliefs and how their worldview shapes the tribe’s organization.

      Good luck!

      Naomi

  • Dhvani Bhayani

    I need help writing a thesis on comparing/contrasting how gender informs the way love us understood, defined, experienced, represented, and/or demonstrated.

    • Your almost there. You can write:

      A person’s gender, whether it be male, female, or third gender, informs the way love is understood, defined, experienced, and demonstrated.

      Then you will develop the rest of your paper around comparing the genders experience of love. (I threw in third gender, but feel free to take it out if you aren’t including the possibility of a third gender in your paper, which could make your paper more complex.)

      For more information on writing a compare/contrast paper, I suggest reading: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-compare-and-contrast-essay/

      Good luck!

  • Women should have the right to choose abortion because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

    You can make this even better by narrowing it down to a specific group of women. “American women?” “The women of Texas” (or Indiana, or another state or city in particular where this right is hotly contested?)

    Good luck!

  • You are close! Here’s a revision:

    “The Throw Like a Girl commercial is effective because it shows how girls’ confidence is as strong as boys’, and how this confidence gets even stronger as girls grow older.”

    You might refine your idea to discuss how the commercial is effective because it shows that “throwing like a girl” really translates to “throwing like a person” and that girls can accomplish anything they put their minds to. Therefore your thesis might say:

    The Throw Like a Girl commercial is effective because it shows how “throwing like a girl” is really just “throwing like a person,” and it underlines that girls, just like boys, can accomplish anything that they put their minds to so long as they have self confidence.

    Good luck!

    • Shirley Brown

      Hi Naomi, my mane is Shirley and I need help on writing a paper. I have my introduction which is! Several factors, both internal and external have a lasting effect on the impact of a child’s education, My e-mail is keenee02@yahoo.com. Thanks so much!!!

    • Shirley Brown

      Hi Naomi I am having trouble with a paper for my class due tomorrow. I have my introduction. but need my thesis. My Introduction: Several factors internal and external have a lasting effect on the impact of a child’s education.

      • The internal and external factors that impact a child’s education include factor 1, factor 2, factor 3, and factor 4.

        You’ll want to include those factors that you have found in the course of your research. For example: the parents’ level of education, the child’s economic status, and the child’s level of ambition and innate intelligence.

        These are just examples because I have not done your research.

        Good luck!

  • Jeremiah Lukus

    Hello Naomi ,

    i have been trying to think of a proper statement but i lack the wording after 2 days if just typing random things my essay is very scattered I thought maybe writing would have narrow it down … anyway i want to write about how characters in 3 different books have an inward struggle with good and evil.Maybe how they overcome good /evil and good does not always win

    these a few questions but i need help formatting them so a proper statement so i can have focus can you help please ?

    thank you so much

    you have responded to so many of these question you have helped many people thank you for doing thank

    PS i have went to my prof office didn’t really get anything out of it .

    • Hi Jeremiah,
      You say that you have written down your statement already. Can you send it here and I can see if I can edit it for you?
      Naomi

  • Tangiereshun

    I need help writing a thesis statement on why welfare recipients should be drug tested

  • Hi Stephanie, Email your thesis statement to me at essayninja@kibin.com and let me see if I can help you make sense of it. It seems to me that you have taken on a lot with this topic, so I could understand why your thesis statement would be too long!

  • Hi Shellie-

    I suggest reading this blog post about writing a compare/contrast essay: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-compare-and-contrast-essay/ It should help you organize your thoughts about these two experiences.

    Then your thesis statement can look something like this:

    My experiences in two clinical rotation facilities for nursing school were very different from each other as evidenced by difference 1, difference 2, and difference 3.

    Or

    My experiences in two clinical rotation facilities for nursing school were very similar to each other as evidenced by similarity 1, similarity 2, and similarity 3.

    Good luck!

  • Holding grudges is a bad idea because reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

  • roxanne aben

    Hi! I’m writing a book review as our final requirement in English. Our instructor wants us to write an essay for the Reaction. The reaction has to contain the ff: Intro, Most & and least liked characters, storyline comment,cinematography,issue/theme of the story, end. Do I still need a thesis statement? If I do, could you please help me?

    • Even though it doesn’t sound like you need to write an argumentative thesis statement, you’ll still want to set up a thesis statement that gives the reader a road map for what you will be addressing in your paper and also that offers your opinion on the work (since it’s a book review).

      For example (if you liked the book) you might write something like:

      The Reaction is an excellent book with vibrant characters, a powerful storyline, effective cinematography, and a compelling theme.

      This type of thesis states your opinion on the book and breaks down the elements you will address further in the paper.

      Good luck!

  • Timothy Gill

    I am having a difficult time coming up with a basic Sociology thesis statement. It is a self-analysis of how my life has been affected by three factors, Inequality (class/gender/race), Work/Economy, and Marriage/Family.

    • Here’s an example:

      A person’s life is defined by his or her experiences with class, gender, and race inequalities, work opportunities and economic status, and family of origin; my life is no exception. This paper will address how my life has been directly influenced by these external social factors.

      I recommend spending a paragraph or two addressing each of these factors and giving one specific example of how each factor directly impacts you.

      This is a pretty huge topic though. If your teacher allows it, I suggest you focus on one particular aspect instead of all three. You may have a better chance at writing a more cohesive paper. If that is an option, I would choose the factor that has affected you the most and offer three specific examples of how that factor influenced you.

      For example:
      My life has been profoundly impacted by my family’s poor economic status, which led me to grow up in a violent neighborhood, caused me to struggle to obtain a quality education, and taught me the true value of money and hard work.

      Good luck!

  • Hi Meme,

    You’ll want to pick a side first!

    For example:

    Ebooks are better than textbooks because they are lightweight and easier to carry, less expensive for students to purchase, and less wasteful because they are easier to revise and update.

    OR

    Textbooks are better than ebooks because they are easier to annotate… (honestly I can’t think of any other reasons for this side of the argument, but I bet you could if you do the research.)

    Good luck!

  • You are almost there! You just need to come up with your three arguments (something that will require you to research).

    Parents should have the right to choose whether or not to vaccinate their children because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

  • Wow! You are biting off a really big topic here, is there any way you can narrow it down? It will be really hard to address all of these elements in one short paper.

  • It sounds like you need to take a stance to make it argumentative.

    Music has a positive effect on the human brain because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

    Good luck!

  • Lauren

    Can you help me? My essay is on the importance of exercise and nutrition and i’m having a horrible time with a thesis statement!

    • Exercise and nutrition is paramount to a person’s overall health as it leads to benefit 1, benefit 2, and benefit 3.

      Good luck!

  • Theresia Shindingeni

    i need help in writing a thesis about should critical thinking be taught in high schools

    • Critical thinking should be taught in high school as it will lead to benefit 1, benefit 2, and benefit 3.

  • Nikkie

    Hi Naomi, I have trouble coming up with my thesis statement. Could you help please? My topic is: Approaches to the root cause of State Failure.

    • It sounds like you need to define the root cause in your thesis.

      The root cause of state failure is (BLANK), and it needs to be addressed by approach 1, approach 2, and approach 3.

      Good luck!

  • Keesh

    hi Naomi! can you help me to write a thesis statement about elder abuse and neglect? thank you! 🙂

    • Hi Keesh!

      I’m guessing that you are writing a problem-solution essay on this? As in, talking about solutions to the problem of elder abuse and neglect. A good thesis statement for you would look something like this:

      Elder abuse and neglect is a serious problem in (somewhere specific–your town? the U.S.? some other country?) that needs to be addressed by solution 1, solution 2, and solution 3.

      For more information on writing a problem-solution essay check out this post: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-problem-solution-essay/

      Good luck!

  • It is clear that (WHO? all of humanity?) has stopped caring for earth as evidenced by issue 1, issue 2, and issue 3.

  • Kelly

    Hi,
    I need help writing a thesis statement for a research paper on domestic violence? Please help!

  • Kelly

    I need help with a thesis state on should minimum wage be increased and this is for a persuasive essay, Please help me?

  • Tee

    Please I need some help on a thesis paper.

    How does Joseph Campbell’s ideas regarding the hero’s
    journey relate to the novel Kinderd by Octavia Butler?
    Thank you so much.

  • Lisa

    I need help with a thesis for my paper. I’m comparing dysfunctional lifestyle to the violent mentality of adolescents. Can someone please help. Thanks.

  • Lisa

    I need help writing a thesis on why adolescents that grew up in poor, dysfunctional neighborhoods tend to be violent criminals.

  • Jaylynn Francis

    I need help writing a thesis statement on how Julius Caesar is considered ambitious. Any ideas?

  • maryluna

    i need help writing a thesis statement: my topic is

    the education is the bases of every human to live with rest of world but all parents must be involve in all respect about education. However …..

  • yuli

    hi…
    I really need help to make outline argumentative essay about harmful of drugs..
    thank you.

  • meeka

    i need to write a persuasive essay for a very liberal teacher and im struggling to find an essay that can really make her think. any ideas?

  • Rogerio araujo

    Mrs. Naomi T. I am from Timor-Leste. I am now studying at one the universities in Timor-Leste. And, I’m finalist student of education faculty and now developing my thesis about “a comparative study between school boys and girls student on scanning reading”. Can I have some ideas from you as related to my thesis above mentioned. Thanks

    • Hi Rogerio,

      I’d suggest basing your thesis around the findings of your comparisons. Here’s a quick example of a structure for you:

      Boys and girls performed (similarly/differently) on scanning reading as evidenced by fact 1, fact 2, and fact 3.

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • blue_owl

    Help!
    Any ideas for a thesis of a non argumentative essay? I’m writing a informative on J.K Rowling. The teacher says she would like it to be one sentence or so in length.

    Thanks!

  • fdf

    I need to write a thesis on why tax payers should pay for unemployment insurance.

  • Jerry Amador

    doing a thesis about MLK “i have a dream” speech need help!!! someone

    • You should definitely download the thesis statement guide. Enter your email in the box at the bottom right corner of this page to get it! Good luck!

      • chad

        “the effects of alcoholic beverages in one’s health” please help me to make a thesis statement

        • Hi Chad– choosing a stance against overconsumption OR a stance in favor of moderation would be best for you:

          Overconsumption of alcoholic beverages leads to major health problems including problem 1, problem 2, and problem 3.

          OR

          Moderate consumption of alcoholic beverages can be beneficial to health including benefit 1 and benefit 2.

          Whichever side you take, make sure you can support it with your research!

          Good luck!

  • Catherine Liandu

    Hi Naomi,

    I have to come up with a one paragraph thesis statement on “Identify and discuss the key causes and effects of individual success in education”. How exactly do I make it debatable and picks a side when (I don’t think) it will not be very argumentative?

    Thanks

  • parismirela

    Hello ^^ i need to make a thesis statement for animation and i can`t come up with anything good..i just write general things and this is not good enough…can anybody help me with some ideas? i will really apreciate

  • Fatma Lg

    Hi you guys I’m kinda stuck on writing my thesis. I intended to talk about the trend in Canadian life expectancy since mid 20th century but now I think it might be too factual and something non-debatable. Also it might be too broad too. Im not sure how to twist this idea to make it an appropriate thesis like I was thinking of maybe giving some ideas on what I think has accounted for the improved lifespan Canadians now enjoy… but again talking about vaccines or universal health coverage etc might be too big of a topic for a 1500 word research essay 🙁

    • Hi Fatma, yes I see you might have a problem with debatability and scope on this. Maybe you are on the right track though.

      Are there perhaps two contested theories about the reason for the improved life expectancy? If so, you could argue for one over the other. For example: “Canadian life expectancy has improved by XX since the mid-20th century due to universal health coverage, and not due to XX, as evidenced by evidence 1 and evidence 2.” Then you could spend the rest of the paper arguing how universal health coverage is the primary contributor to this phenomenon.

      Good luck!

      • Fatma Lg

        Thank you Miss.Tepper for your advice! Yes now that I think about it there are some different theories I’ve encountered of what different scientists think has played the major contribution. I appreciate your help I think now I know where to go with this topic! Thanks=D

      • Fatma Lg

        Also you think in the thesis there should be evidence? Cuz I wasn’t really sure what u meant by evidence 1 and 2

        • It helps to give a brief summary of the evidence that you plan to support in your paper. Remember, your thesis serves as a mini-outline for your paper.

          • Fatma Lg

            Ohh ok got it Thank you very much

  • Heather Doran

    I’m in need of help writing a thesis statement about the affects children experience today because religion isn’t allowed in schools?

  • Tara K

    Im new to essay writing this will be my first essay. Im stuck on the thesis statement.
    The scope is: Communication considerations between workers and clients family in a PCP meeting.
    I was going to write about phatic communication being an integral part of achieving communication competence but is that a thesis statement or do I try to look at more of a whole picture of communication and add phatic in the body? It is only 1200 to 1500 words so I need it to be pretty defined I guess.

  • Fatma Lg

    Mrs. Tepper I just wanted to ask you if this was a good thesis. Because I plan to have 4 body paragraphs in the essay the last one kinda tackling the objective views on Canada’s universal health care scheme. Okay here it goes..

    Through the examination of its accessibility, lower
    expenditures and good social morals it enjoins upon its citizens, it can
    determined that Canada’s publicly funded health care system is a better
    approach than the private system countries like the US use. And although Canada’s
    healthcare system is still not where it needs to be, public opinion has not been to reconsider the model, but to call upon the government
    to make slight adjustments that will cause it to excel further.

  • Kat A

    I need help writing a thesis statement comparing and contrasting multiple births and fertility drugs in our society today with the society of the book, Brave New World. Can anyone please help me?

  • Shelby Tubbs

    i need a thesis statement for How does the American popular culture reflect or mediate the contradictory tendencies in American views of the good life.

  • wykenna

    im writing a paper about homosexuals in the Holocaust, need a thesis statment

    • What type of paper are you writing? Argumentative? Informative? Something else? The topic of homosexuals in the Holocaust is pretty big and can take on many different forms. Narrowing down what type of paper you are writing can help you determine which angle of this topic you are hoping to address.

      For example, an argumentative thesis statement may go something like this:

      Homosexuals were persecuted in the Holocaust, but their story remains relatively unknown; schools should make an effort to educate students on the plight of homosexuals in the holocaust because of reason 1 and reason 2. (Two reasons why this is important to do).

      If this is an informative essay meant to educate, your thesis statement may go something like this:

      Homosexuals were persecuted in the Holocaust, but their story remains relatively unknown; this paper will discuss in detail this persecution of homosexuals in the holocaust and how, ultimately, German activists reformed social attitudes about homosexuals and how these reformations have positively impacted current views.

      As you can see–this topic is very large and can take many different forms in your paper. I hope that these two examples will help you!

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • Ana Perez

    So I am writing a paper on the confederate flag and I’m having trouble coming up with a thesis. Any help would be appreciated!

    • Hi Ana- I assume your paper will be about whether or not the Confederate flag should be banned from flying on public properties. Your thesis statement needs to choose a position and offer reasons that you will support.

      Example 1 – position for banning

      The Confederate flag should be banned from being displayed on public properties because it’s a symbol of racism and oppression and REASON #2.

      OR

      Example 2 – position against banning

      The Confederate flag should not be banned from being displayed on public properties because REASON #1 and REASON #2.

      The reasons you choose will depend on your stance and the research that you do. Make sure that you kind find arguments to support your claims.

      Good luck!

  • Thuong Le

    please help revise my thesis of working from home.

    Some people assume that working from home will represent the benefits to workers alone, but not employers. In reality, employers can receive a lot of advantages such as reducing the cost for operation system and broadening the productivity in tasks. But they also encounter some disadvantages of the difficulty in managing and monitoring employees’ performance as well as in maintaining the team spirit.

    thank you so much

    • Hi Thuong, I would stick to this as your thesis statement (you need to choose one side of the argument not both), I also added a third point to support (timezone coverage–you can use it or discard it):

      Some people assume that working from home only benefits employees and not employers. In reality, employers can gain a lot of advantages such as reducing overhead costs, increasing productivity, and improving time zone coverage.

      The next section doesn’t belong in your thesis, but it would be great to include in the body of your essay, since it shows the other side of the argument. Make sure you show how these challenges can be overcome:

      However, employers also encounter challenges such as the difficulty of managing and monitoring remote employees’ performance as well as maintaining team spirit.

      • Thuong Le

        thank you so much 🙂 I understood the requirement for argument paper ^^

  • Justin Borja

    Hi, i love your work! it’s like everything is a thesis statement, like what you’ve said about thesis statement “A good thesis statement will accomplish the same thing. It gives readers an idea of the most important points of an essay, shows the highlights, and makes them want to read more.” I’ve made it through the end of the blog. i was so interested in reading it till the end haha. Can i ask for a thesis statement about Legalizing Divorce in the philippines thanks hoping for a reply soon. Thanks again bye

    • Hi Justin! Aww thanks for the nice words–happy that you were interested enough to read through to the end. I really love your point about my thesis statement–guess I’m just a natural huh?

      So your statement needs to take a stance for or against legalizing divorce in the Philippines (is it really illegal there?! I did not know that. So for example:

      Divorce should be legalized in the Philippines because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      Or–if you prefer:

      Divorce should not be legalized in the Philippines because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      I haven’t done research on this, so you’ll want to come up with reasons that you can defend and support in your essay.

      Good luck!

  • You are welcome!

  • wendy

    Hi, I have an argumentative essay to write, the topic is “Is virtue ethics dead in the modern organisations?” I would truly appreciated if you could give me an idea how to write thesis statement for this.
    Many thanks.

    • This topic opens you up to an easy thesis statement:
      “Virtue ethics is dead in modern organisations as evidenced by evidence 1, evidence 2, and evidence 3.”
      OR
      “Virtue ethics is not dead in modern organisations as evidenced by evidence 1, evidence 2, and evidence 3.”

      Just fill in evidence from your research that you can support and that matches your stance.

      Good luck!

  • Hamza Jamal

    revolution is an important aspect and we must bring almost a revolution whenever a society goes astray
    need a thesis statement for that

    • Hi Hanza,
      You’re close! I think your statement just needs a bit of editing.

      Revolution is an important tool for people to use to fix a society that has gone astray; revolution provides solution #1 and solution #2 to these broken societies.

      Pick two solutions that revolution offers (for example, government reform and social justice) that you plan to support in your paper.

      Good luck!

  • Hi Grace,
    The thesis statement functions like a mini road map of your paper and tells your readers the subject and focus of your paper. You’re writing a literary analysis on “The Lost Hero” so you need to pick a focus that you are going to discuss.

    I haven’t read “The Lost Hero” so as my example, check out these thesis statement examples you might use for a literary analysis of The Lord of the Rings.

    Sample Thesis Statement #1: The key symbol in The Lord of the Rings is the ring itself, as it symbolizes power.

    Sample Thesis Statement #2: Upon close reading, a number of themes emerge from The Lord of the Rings; however, one of the primary themes is good versus evil.

    These sample thesis statements provide readers with a specific focus, with the first example clearly focusing on symbolism and the second clearly focusing on theme.

    Once you have written an appropriate thesis statement, you have a direction for your paper and are ready to begin the actual analysis.

    Good luck!

  • You’re close.

    War impacts (WHO? Veterans? be specific about who you are focusing on) by bringing about inner conflict, stress, and the inability to move on.

    Good luck!

  • Government should control the internet and its content because of reason #1, reason #2, and reason #3.

    OR

    Government should not control the internet and its content because of reason #1, reason #2, and reason #3.

    Pick the side that you can defend the best.

    Good luck!

  • Bantar

    Hi after reading through your blog i’ve learned a lot, i have a topic i find complex, comparing two soccer players, Cristiano Ronaldo to Lionel Messi, especially the thesis statement . thanks

  • Zoe Sperry

    Hello there! I need help writing a thesis for: Money can’t buy you happiness. I am having some trouble making it sound more professional, and also finding a claim (for now I only need one)

  • Latifah

    I’m writing about the benefits of organising sports for people with disabilities. I need the thesis statement.

  • Stacia Evans

    I need help with wirting a thesesis statement for whether minimum should be raise, decrease or eliminated all together :

    There are alot of different aspect that contribute to allow this economy to function properly. One of the major aspect is money. There has also been many discussion regarding miniumin wage, should it be raised, decerease, or moved altogether. Minimum wage is the least amount of payment a employer pay to an employee for work. I do not agree with increasing Mininmum nor decreasing it or eliminating it all together.

  • Stacia Evans

    I need help with wirting a thesis statement for whether minimum should be raise, decrease or eliminated all together :

    There are alot of different aspect that contribute to allow this economy to function properly. One of the major aspect is money. There has also been many discussion regarding miniumin wage, should it be raised, decerease, or moved altogether. Minimum wage is the least amount of payment a employer pay to an employee for work. I do not agree with increasing Mininmum nor decreasing it or eliminating it all together.

  • Definitely should be written in the same style. Do not use phrases that prohibit categorically do something. Understand communication through the recommendation of a lot better. Of course if you choose not to write an essay on their own, simply contact research paper writing services

  • Jr

    I need help writing a thesis about the fear of failing college. Please help me

    • Hi there–this is a tough topic to write about! Maybe you could choose to write about it from the perspective of the three things a student can do to combat the fear of failing college. For example:

      A fear of failure is perfectly normal, but it shouldn’t lead students to self-destruct. Here are three things a student can do to help alleviate the fear of failing college and get on the road to success: thing 1, thing 2, and thing 3.

      Good luck!

  • Natoria Woods

    I need help on making a thesis on the lifestyle differences of a college student twenty years ago versus the lifestyle of one today

    • You should come up with three ways that the lifestyles of these two generations of college students are different. For example, who works more? who parties more? who studies harder? Your thesis statement could look something like:

      College students today lead much different lifestyles than college students in the nineties; today’s college students work more, party more, and study harder….

      But you should pick actual facts that you can support.
      Good luck!

  • Mary Ann De Asis

    Hi there . I need help for my thesis . I don’t know how I am going to start a topic, if making a thesis statement is hard for me . What suitable thesis topic for the students who addicted in internet nowadays and free wifi . what should a proper thesis statement be accurate for that . Thank you very much for the response .

  • Mary Ann De Asis

    Hi there . I need help for my thesis . I don’t know how I am going to start a topic, if making a thesis statement is hard for me . What suitable thesis topic for the students who addicted in internet nowadays and free wifi . what should a proper thesis statement be accurate for that . Thank you very much for the response .

    • Hi Mary Ann–
      Your thesis statement will depend upon your stance and how you want to tackle this paper. One option might be something like this:

      Present day students are suffering from an addiction to internet access made worse by free wifi available nearly everywhere. Schools should no longer allow students access to free wifi, which will lead to benefit 1 and benefit 2.

      Example benefits might be improved concentration and breaking the addiction, but you should include benefits of this that you find during your research.

      Good luck!
      Naomi

      • Mary Ann De Asis

        Thank very much . I’ll get an idea .

  • McDonald’s needs to enact a strategic management process because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

    For more information on what a strategic management process is, check out this link: http://study.com/academy/lesson/the-strategic-management-process.html

  • Mary Ann De Asis

    Hello . I need help again, what suitable / appropriate Thesis Statement about online education ?

    • Is online education effective? Why or why not? Come up with three supportive statements to back your stance up. For example:

      Online education is just as effective as in-person education because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      Good luck!

      • Mary Ann De Asis

        hello naomi , ” we should favour online education that provides better assortment of education in every people and establish the self assertion to their future” this is my thesis statement I write , this is suit for online education had benefits..?

        • This is a good start, but I think it could use some cleaning up. How about this: “Online education is extremely effective because it provides students with a wide variety of education options and establishes a sense of self discipline that is very useful for the future.”

  • Thiha

    I need help to present a good thesis under my research title: “The transactions of nerve impulses during hypnosis”. Basically that’s about studying biology behind
    hypnosis.

  • robelto

    how to write a Thesis statement if the topic is Perception and Misconceptions about Circumcision in Trinidad and Tobago

  • Lisa

    Hi I need help with a thesis with regards to policing and mental illness. I know what my paper is trying to research like how police perceive and interacted with person of mental illness and vice versa.

    • Maybe something along the lines of the need to educate police officers. For example, “Police departments (or who exactly?) should take steps to educate their police force on how to manage incidents involving people with mental illnesses including how to recognize signs and symptoms of mental illness and how to most effectively respond.” Good luck!

  • karla

    Hello, I need help writing a thesis about what is the power of writing and words. Please help!

    • Hi there–this is a bit vague, but maybe you could narrow it down to improve your paper. In what context specifically are you arguing that writing is powerful? For example, good writing is critical to running a business where you’ll have to be able to create compelling marketing copy and write succinct and effective emails. I suggest figuring out a focus first and then working on your thesis statement.

  • Jane Reyes

    Hi Miss Naomi. I’m having a hard time to make a thesis statement on our topic about The Most Optimal Positioning for MSME’s during ASEAN Integration. Can you help me ? Can someone help me please ?Thank you.

  • Mariah Clark

    I need a thesis statement for a symbol paper that analyzes the 3 scaffold scenes in The Scarlet Letter and how they connect to Hawthornes purpose in writing. Im really struggling!!

  • bfigueroa

    hi , i need help writing a thesis statement for a narrative essay. its about my personal experience waiting on the arrival of a sibling

  • Ryan Sareo

    hi
    can you help me I’m trying to write a thesis on the Ethnic conflicts which is going on long since the Indian took over my people’s land and since my homeland is inhabited by various Ethnic groups and each groups are fighting for their identity from the government of India and from the present ruling state government blood has spilled on all sides.

    • Wow! It sounds like you are tackling a pretty big topic here. Is there any way to narrow it down a bit? What is your proposed solution to this struggle–that could help you come closer to a workable thesis.

      Are you suggesting something as drastic as the ruling state government of India should be overthrown? Or are you looking to write about more subtle changes. Perhaps your ethnic group should be given independence from the Indian government and land to call its own? Or maybe you are seeking smaller measures such as aid and reform for ethnic groups in India?

      Decide what aspect of this immense conflict you want to focus on in your paper, and this will help you determine your thesis statement.

  • Sithabile Msiza

    Hi, I need help writing a thesis statement. my broad topic is CONTRACEPTIVES. I want to argue that the use of contraceptives by school girls decrease the financial strain on the government.

    • This is an edit of a version you sent me:

      The use of contraceptives by high school girls reduces financial strain on the government by decreasing expenditures on child grants and allowing it to redirect that money to improving the country’s economy and, thus, reduce poverty.

      Good luck!

  • The U.S. Government should not be allowed to control what students eat because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

    Choose three supportable reasons that you can defend with evidence!

  • robelto

    my topic is Online education. I need to get to questions tat I hope to answer at the end of my research paper, the rationale behind It

  • robelto

    sorry two questions that I hope to answer at the end of my research and the rationale behind it. Thank you

  • alilu

    PLZ!!! I need help on writing a thesis on how the framing effect inflences or decission making when purchasing lets say a big screen TV…. thnx

    • The framing effect influences our decision making, for example when making a big purchase, by either framing the decision in a positive way and encouraging the purchase or by framing the decision in a negative way and discouraging the purchase.

      Then you can offer examples for how this works exactly.

  • Rhett

    Hi Naomi, I need help on my thesis statement/topic about Illiteracy. How we can help or how they survive in life knowing they dont know how to read. Poverty can be ruled out. My brother says its a risky topic. thank you

    • You should probably answer the question of what should be done about illiteracy… and who should do it! So for example:

      Our school should focus on helping illiterate students learn to read by offering after school reading classes and implementing weekly progress reports.

      OR

      The city of X should focus on helping illiterate citizens learn to read by…

      You get the idea.

      The more specific you can make this, the better since “illiteracy” itself is a very broad topic with a lot of angles you could take. Your brother is right, it is risky!

      Good luck!

      • Rhett

        Thanks alot. this helps by a metric ton. i was getting worried.

      • Rhett

        Although I dont have a clue of how i can make this topic more specific.

      • Rhett

        thanks for the help tho. Can you help me again? My last resort is |School start time affects academic and achievements of students|

  • yen yenZ

    i need a thesis statement , well my topic is Compare and contrast between group work and individual work.

    • Your compare and contrast thesis statement should

      ● State the topics

      ● State your stance (are the topics similar, different, or both?)

      ● Include your supporting similarities/differences

      For example:

      Group work and individual work are very different from each other as shown by evidence 1, evidence 2, and evidence 3.

      OR

      Group work and individual work are very similar to each other as shown by evidence 1 and evidence 2.

      OR

      Group work and individual work have some similarities as shown by evidence 1 and evidence 2 and some differences as demonstrated by evidence 3.

      Have fun!

  • Sayed Abdul Qader Samiee

    Hi Naomi Tepper I Need your Help to find a Topic in Finance Section I tried hard to find it but I couldn’t Find any so Please Help me and The Professor Said that I have to Find 5 Topics and he will give me one from those 5 topics thank you Tepper.

  • monique lewis

    need help with a thesis statement for Working as a childcare teacher is much more difficult that it appears.

    • Working as a childcare teacher is much more difficult than it appears because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

  • Kelly

    I need help with a thesis statement on why I decided to attend college at this time in my life and the reasons behind my decision. Please Help!

    • You’re really the only person who can answer this question, but a general framework for your thesis statement could be this:

      I decided to attend college at this time in my life (what time specifically?) for reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      For example:
      I decided to attend college at the age of 35 because I finally have the time to focus on my education, I’m in between careers, and my kids are grown and out of the house.

      Or whatever your real reasons are… 🙂

      Good luck!

  • Sugey Perez-Hernandez

    I need help writing a thesis on whether or not Anthropology should be considered a STEM field. The side I am on is yes Anthropology should be considered a STEM field. Please HELLP!

    • Anthropology should be considered a STEM field because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      Just come up with your reasons that you can support with evidence, and you should be good to go!

  • Bethany Hall

    Hi there! Your tips are great, thank you! I just need some direction and a bit of a start, ‘A teacher is little more than a child minder’, i’ve got my agree’s and disagree’s i just can’t think of how to structure it and start it off, can you help me please?!

    • Hi Bethany–you’re welcome! Glad you like the tips.

      While a teacher certainly must mind children as part of his or her duties, a teacher is much more than a child minder as evidenced by agreement 1, agreement 2, and agreement 3 etc.

  • Here’s a general framework for you–change my reasons for yours!

    I don’t want or need a cell phone because I don’t like for people to constantly be able to be in touch with me, I don’t want want to spend the money, and if I have an emergency I can be certain that someone nearby will have a phone available to use.

  • Felicha Mcclelland Framke

    I need help with a research topic. cant be about psychology

  • beauty forever

    Can you help me for my Thesis statement? the the Introduction because I am not good on it. just one paragraph of introduction, the title is “what new restaurant(s) would you like to see come into your city and why?

    • I would like to see a new X restaurant come to my city because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      I’d just pick a type of restaurant that there aren’t many of and that you’d like to eat at. That’s two reasons right there!

  • Faith

    Hi Naomi. I have a thesis statement and three claims, but i was hoping you could help me refine it and make it more academically suitable. My broad topic is CONTRACEPTIVES. I want to argue that the distribution of contraceptives in state high schools will reduce pregnancy rates and STIs.

    Thesis statement: The distribution of contraceptives in state owned high schools will effectively reduce the increase in pregnancy and sexually transmitted diseases among South African teenagers/students.
    The claims i made:
    1. “Contraceptives are highly effective when used correctly or used at all.”
    2. “The down side is that contraceptives are not readily available to teenagers(or hard for teenagers to purchase)”
    3.”There has been an increase in the number of pregnant teens and those who are infected with an STD/STI”

    • You’re off to a great start. Just an edit for you:

      The distribution of contraceptives–in the form of condoms and birth control pills(??)–in state-owned high schools will effectively reduce the rates of pregnancy and sexually transmitted diseases among South African teen students.

      1. “Contraceptives are highly effective when used correctly.”
      2. “The down side is that contraceptives are not readily available to teenagers. Schools can remedy this by facilitating access to condoms and sex education.”
      3.”There has been an increase in the number of pregnant teens and those who are infected with an STD/STI. Condoms are shown to reduce the rate of STI transmission by X% and pregnancy by X%. While birth control pills can reduce the rate of pregnancy by X%.”

  • este soy yo

    Hi , i need help with writing a thesis statement on emerging family trends and support to strengthen families in singapore . Please someone help me !!

  • Hi Rachel–you have a lot of examples in the above blog post on a bunch of different topics that you can adapt for your own use. You can also check out this blog post for even more ideas: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/12-argumentative-thesis-statement-examples-help-next-essay/

  • I think you are off to a good start here, just a quick edit for clarity:

    Laws and rules imposed by the government do not necessarily make people more ethical– since ethics come from within–rather these laws make people less inclined to commit certain criminal acts or harmful behavior for fear of consequences.

  • Ikram Blh

    i need help writing a thesis about the theme of rejection on the catcher in the rye and the adventures of hucklberry finn

    • Hi there, your thesis can be pretty simple and straightforward:

      The Catcher in the Rye and The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn both share the theme of rejection.

      You will then spend the rest of the paper showing evidence from the texts that support this thesis.

      Good luck!

  • Khalessi_23

    hello

  • Alethea Latrice

    i need help with a thesis statement for why children should be tried as adults

    • Children (who commit murder?) should be tried as adults because reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

  • Kimberly Lewis

    Hi Naomi. I need a little help with my thesis statement about “Does divorce really destroy family life?

    • Hi Kimberly, first you need to pick a stance. Do you think divorce is the end of family life?

      Option A:

      Divorce destroys families as evidenced by A, B, and C.

      Option B:

      Divorce does not have to be the end of family life as evidenced by A, B, and C.

      Good luck!

  • Kosy

    I need help writing a thesis on barriers to effective communication on the job. Please can someone help. Thank you

  • Sarah

    Hey! I need help writing a thesis statement about perseverance being bad as well as good.

    • Hey there– here’s a structure for you:

      While perseverance is usually described as a good quality because of EXAMPLE 1 and EXAMPLE 2, it can also have negative consequences in the form of EXAMPLE 3.

  • latania johnson

    I need help in coming up with a thesis statement. I want my topic to be about why I think abortions should be legal.

    • You can use a simple framework for this:

      Abortions should be legal because A, B, and C.

      Come up with 2-3 reasons that you can support in your essay with your research. You might also try using our thesis statement builder for more help: https://www.kibin.com/thesis-builder/topic

  • Mariana

    I need some help desperately, I need a thesis statement for my essay. My essay is on How technology had dumbed down our generation ? I cant come up with a good thesis for that subject

    • Technology has dumbed down our generation as evidenced by X, Y, and Z.

  • Joe Rebello

    i need a thesis statement for substance abuse in nursing

    • Are you arguing that something should be done to prevent substance abuse in nursing? If so what should be done and who is responsible? If this is the direction you are taking here is a structure for you:

      Hospital administrators (OR who is responsible?) need to take steps to prevent substance abuse in nursing including action 1, action 2, and action 3.

      The steps that you think should be taken should be supportable with your research.

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • Alexus Paige

    Hi I am writing a paper on why schools should decrease the use of tablets and chrome books inside the classroom and go back to the basic textbook teaching method and I need help creating a thesis

    • Your basic structure will look something like this:

      Schools should decrease the use of tablets inside the classroom and go back to using textbooks because of A, B, C.

      You’ll need to find three arguments that you can support with research. This might help send you in the a good direction: http://tablets-textbooks.procon.org/

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • gabby

    Hi, I had problem on choosing my topic on a thesis paper. My teacher keeps on rejecting my chosen topic. So can you help me choose
    ?

  • Not having read this book, I’m not sure where it falls when it comes to this topic, but two possible structures for you:

    Equality among the races is evident in the novel “The Algerine Captive” by Royall Tyler as shown by A and B.

    Or

    There is no equality among races in the novel “The Algerine Captive” by Royall Tyler as evidenced by A and B.

    Good luck!

  • zem2012(Mr.Amwoma)

    I love this these examples. I need a thesis statement on physician assisted suicide. Any idea?

    • Hi there–first take your stance. Should physician assisted suicide be legal? Why or why not? Then you have two options for structure:

      1. Physician assisted suicide should be legal because of A,B, and C.

      OR

      2. Physician assisted suicide should NOT be legal because of A,B, and C.

      Choose arguments that you can back with your research.

      Good luck!

      • zem2012(Mr.Amwoma)

        Appreciate this a great deal

  • Cheyenne Baldonado

    Hi I am writing a paper on how much regulation should be put on technology and would like to know if my introduction is well written or if it can be improved. My current intro paragraph is:

    There has been an ongoing debate on whether or
    not the government should put regulations on technology and how much regulation
    should be put on technology. How much regulation should be put on technology is
    the real question. There should be strict regulations on technology,
    specifically on electronics for young children because of the effects smartphones
    and electronics have on young children, protection from cybercrime, and the unauthorized
    downloading of apps.

    • Here is a clarity edit:

      There has been an ongoing debate over whether or not the government should put regulations on technology. The real question is: how much regulation should be put on technology? There should be strict regulations on technology, specifically in regards to the the effects smartphones and electronics have on young children, protection from cybercrime, and the unauthorized downloading of apps.

      I’m a bit worried that you might be covering WAY too much ground in this thesis statement though (unless you’re writing a massive paper, you’re going to have a hard time covering this all). What would happen if you focused your thesis statement only on the effects technology has on children?

      There should be strict regulations on technology, specifically in regards to mitigating the negative effects smartphones and electronics have on young children such as effect 1, effect 2, and effect 3.

      Good luck!

  • Nil MM

    Hi. I need an advice urgently. I am writing article critique on topic of personal fashion blogs. My thesis statement: An analyse of this article shows that the author undermined the bloggers role in the modern society, because the development of the bloggers as fashion celebrity changes the blogging style a lot. Is it strong thesis statement?

    • Hi there– I’m actually having a hard time following your meaning on this. Would the following be what you are trying to say?

      An analysis of this article shows that the author undermines the blogger’s role in modern society, because changes in celebrity fashion lead to changes in a blogger’s writing style.

  • fatima

    need help writing a thesis for nutrition.

    • You’re really going to need to narrow your topic down in order to write a good thesis statement here. What aspect of nutrition are you trying to tackle? For example, you might talk about promoting nutrition in school lunch menus, or you might talk about efforts to educate the American population about common sense nutrition… without a clear, focused topic, a thesis statement will be hard to write.

  • Chajay

    Hi there, can you help me? I can’t start my introduction for my expository essay cause I don’t know what thesis statement should I pick just for my essay to be more productive and my topic is all about increasing human population worldwide.

    • Hmmm… I’m not clear on what your stance will be on this, but here are a couple of ideas:

      The increasing human population is harmful to the environment as evidenced by X,Y, and Z.
      OR
      Governments should work to prevent an increasing human population by enacting X, Y, and Z laws.
      OR
      The increasing population is not a problem and may actually be beneficial as evidenced by X, Y, and Z.

      Good luck!

  • Emma

    Hi
    I need help writing a thesis statement on the Egyptian pyramids and how they were built and why they were built.

    • Hi there–this sounds more like an informative essay than an argumentative one, so your thesis statement will serve as a mini-outline. Your structure might be like this:

      There is still uncertainty about how and why the Egyptian pyramids were built; however, one plausible idea is the Egyptians were built by X method for Y reason.

      I’ll leave it to you to fill in X and Y. 🙂

  • Monica Teoh

    I need help writing a thesis. My topic is Framing Diplomatic Visit: A comparative analysis of Malaysian and Chinese newspapers coverage of Xi Jinping’s visit to Malaysia. Please help me thank you ~

    • Hi there–you might want to use this framework to get started:

      Whereas Malaysian newspaper coverage of Xi JinPing’s visit to Malaysia focused on X, Chinese newspaper coverage of the visit focused on Y.

      This should set you up to write about the fundamental point(s) of difference in the coverage (X and Y).

      Good luck!

  • Ami Mel

    Hi Naomi! I need your help on my thesis statement. My topic is “Variables
    which impede Chilean learners to develop English skills”. Since i Just got this and also a lot of information to support this claim, i Don’t know how to keep on writing. Thanks in advance!

    • Sounds like you are part of the way there already! A basic framework would be:

      The variables that most impede Chilean learners from developing English skills are variable 1, variable 2, and variable 3.

      Since you have a lot of information, plugging in the variables that you can most easily support shouldn’t be very hard.

      Good luck!

      • Ami Mel

        doesn’t it sound too broad when saying ‘The variables’ as a general thought?

        • Hi Ami–yes it might be too broad. You could easily replace the word for something more specific once you choose the variables that you plan to address in your paper. For now, it’s a kind of placeholder.

          Other word choices could include: issues, problems, challenges… but, again, it will be easier to choose once you fill in the rest of the statement.

  • insanitymed

    Hi, I’m having hard time making a thesis on my research topic about obesity in the nation. Should I focused on one area? Please help.
    Thank you

    • Yes! You have a good instinct on this… obesity is a HUGE topic and you need *focus.

      Some possible areas to focus on could include:
      -US obsession with fast food–should government enforce policies that limit fast food or require more transparency?
      -US obsession with fad diets and quick fixes instead of healthy lifestyle choices–who should be responsible for teaching Americans that diets don’t work, but healthy lifestyle choices do?
      -Childhood obesity–should something be done in schools?

      These are just a few of the many focuses you could pursue here. The more focused you are, the better off you’ll be.

      Good luck!

      • insanitymed

        Thank you so much!

  • You need to pick a side and defend it. A couple of frameworks to choose from:

    Argue in favor of:

    The recent changes to the national breakfast lunch program are an effective measure for improving nutrition and health as evidenced by 1, 2, and 3.

    OR

    Argue against:

    The recent changes to the national breakfast lunch program are not an effective measure for improving nutrition and health as evidenced by 1, 2, and 3.

    Good luck!

  • Raven Harris

    I need help coming up with a thesis for my persuasive pro organ donation essay. Anyone have an idea?

    • More people (who specifically??) should sign up to be organ donors because reasons 1, 2, and 3.

      This essay would probably be better if you could identify who your focus is–are you talking about students at a particular university, residents of a particular state, Americans? Who should become organ donors? Then choose three reasons why these people should sign up as organ donors that you can explore and defend in your essay.

  • rendrag1

    im writing a thesis on global warming. im stumped on what to write for the precise opnion. can someone help?

    • It sounds like you need to narrow your focus. Maybe reviewing these articles can help you choose an angle and a stance: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/global-warming-articles/

      Good luck!

      • rendrag1

        my focus is
        Global warming can be attributed to natural phases of the earth and an increase in the greenhouse effect because the earth dows cool and warm on its own, it is currently getting warmer, and humans are contributing to the greenhouse effect.

  • Rabea

    Hello,
    I need a topic for an argumentative essay, I have tried so hard to come up with one but it is just too hard. I also need to write a good thesis statement that does not have listing in it, because our instructor does not like listing, can I get help ?
    thank you,

  • Rabea

    Hello,
    I need a topic for an argumentative essay, I have tried so hard to come up with one but it is just too hard. I also need to write a good thesis statement that does not have listing in it, because our instructor does not like listing, can I get help ?
    thank you,

    • Hi there, here are 50 topic ideas for you: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/50-argumentative-essay-topics/

      Hopefully you can find a good topic there!

      Also, with the *magic* of editing, you can always change the format of a list-style thesis statement into one that is not. I think creating a list is always a good starting point so that you cover your bases. Then you can edit it to remove the list!

      For example, this list-y thesis: Sending foreign aid to African countries is doing more harm than good, and it should be discontinued; the practice has caused African countries to become vulnerable to inflation, currency fluctuations, corruption, and civil unrest.

      Can become a non-list-y thesis statement: Sending foreign Aid to Africa is fraught with corruption and should be discontinued; in fact, the practice does more harm than good especially when taking into account the issues of inflation caused by currency fluctuations and subsequent civil unrest.

      Good luck!

  • First you need to choose your stance. Are you for or against the Indian Removal Act? Why?
    A basic structure can be:

    The Indian Removal Act was beneficial (or detrimental) to (who exactly?) as it resulted in reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

    Fill in the reasons why the Act was beneficial or detrimental with evidence from your research.

    Good luck!

  • Liz

    Hey, I need help to how build a good thesis statement on The effects of video games on children.

    • Here is one possible structure for you:

      Video games have a negative/positive impact on children as shown by effect 1, effect 2, and effect 3; therefore, parents should/should not limit the amount of time children spend gaming.

      Good luck!

  • mopii mopoh

    I need help writing a thesis describing a celebrity personality by looking up their persona on social media. please help me out

  • 江娜

    Hi, Naomi. I need your help. I am writing a thesis statement, teacher said it should indicate the psychological principle and the main point. My thesis statement is: the ranking of students’ mark will cause the grades step backward or bad for students’ performance according to the principles of psychological treatment, Self-efficacy and Pygmalion Effect. I will talk about how these three principles prove that ranking of students’ mark lead to bad performance in three body paragraph. Can you help me to revise my thesis statement into a more academic way?

    • Hi there–you’re off to a great start! You just needed to edit for clarity. Here’s my suggestion:

      According to the principles of psychological treatment, self-efficacy, and the Pygmalion Effect, the practice of ranking students’ marks will negatively impact student performance and lead to lower grades.

  • Hmmm it’s hard for me to answer this question not knowing the context of your studies, but maybe this blog post will give you some ideas or send you in a good direction? https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/50-research-paper-topics/

  • joaane thomas

    i need help on starting a thesis on the novel catcher of the rye

  • alush

    I need help with my thesis statement on should Johnson County community college have a health clinic on campus? please

    • This one is pretty simple, you just need to pick a side for or against.

      Johnson County Community College should have an on-campus health clinic because reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      OR

      Johnson County Community College should NOT have an on-campus health clinic because reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      Make sure to pick a stance you can defend and choose reasons based on your research.

  • Vinceㅤ

    Hi Ma’am Naomi, I need help on writing a thesis statement about Development Communication. Thank you so much!

    • Hi there– that’s a pretty vague topic so I can’t really help much. Maybe if you make an attempt at a thesis statement using the guidelines in this document, I can help you refine it.

      Good luck!

  • 江娜

    Hi, Naomi. Can you help me to change my thesis statement into a more academic and flowing form?
    Through the effect of economic globalization in nowadays,the encouragement of the spirit of capitalism and the family virtues become a way for government to develop Chinese economy,
    which were indirectly affect people’s moral notions of Confucianism.

    • Hi there–how about something like this ?

      Through the effect of modern day economic globalization, the Chinese government develops its economy through the encouragement of the spirit of capitalism and family virtues, and these influences indirectly affect people’s moral notions of Confucianism.

  • Sarah Jane Maniquiz

    I request for your opinion on what thesis title I can use about educational management. you’re comments will be much appreciated. thanks

    • I don’t have a lot of expertise there, but maybe reviewing these titles on similar topics can help you with yours: http://edl.appstate.edu/dissertation-titles

      Good luck!

      • Sarah Jane Maniquiz

        wow. that’s a huge help.thank you so much Ma’am for noticing me considering you have lot of things to do and for answering my query. Hope and pray that you will continue helping us regarding this matter. thank you again. god bless and more power. 🙂

      • Sarah Jane Maniquiz

        by the way Ma’am, my adviser already approved the thesis title I’ve proposed namely “Comparative analysis of teachers above and below 40 years of age: their performance towards the development of effective teaching”.. Again, may I request in your helping heart to sight some related topics for them to be my reference? thank you so much for your time. god bless

  • I think you’ll find this blog post really helpful to get you started: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-start-a-narrative-essay/

  • ABRAKEGABRA

    Really appreciate the personal note at the end

  • Amanullah

    What will be the appropriate thesis statement for the essay ‘WHY I STUDY IN ENGLISH LITERATURE’ ?

    • Hi there, it sounds like you have to write a reflective essay. The nice part is there is no wrong answer since you are just reflecting on your personal experience. Here’s a basic thesis statement structure for you:

      I study English literature because reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      Fill in 2-3 reasons that are the true reasons why you are interested in English lit. Try to choose things that are authentic and not too obvious so that you’ll be able to expand upon those reasons later in your paper.

      For more information on writing a reflective essay, check out this post: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/reflective-essay-outline/

      Good luck!

  • Krystle

    I need help on a thesis sentence for why community college should be free tuition? Please help I’m going for it

    • Community college should offer free tuition for (all?) students because reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

  • Christine

    wow thanks . having my finals tomorrow and u helped a lot !

    • Woot! You’re welcome. Good luck with finals. 🙂

  • DERPMERP

    I need to write a thesis on why it’s good that you cant die via overdose of LSD or Acid. Help?

    • Hi there–unfortunately your topic is not debatable, so it won’t lend itself to a very good thesis statement. I don’t think anyone can argue against the fact that it’s good that you can’t die from an LSD/acid overdose.

      I would suggest changing your approach a little. How about taking a stance that is more controversial (and, therefore, more argumentative) such as:

      LSD should be legalized because you can’t die from an overdose and REASON 2, and reason 3.

      Or if that’s too extreme of a stance for you something like this:

      LSD is less dangerous than alcohol because you can’t die from an overdose and reason 2, and reason 3.

      Now that’s debatable…

      Good luck!

  • lisa

    i need to write an essay about federlism and anti-federlism.And why federlists carry the day. how should i form my thesis statement??

    • How you form your thesis statement depends on what type of essay you are writing. Are you writing an essay that informs the audience about federalism and anti-federalism? Or are you arguing in favor of one side or the other? Or perhaps, you are arguing that one side has been more influential to American politics than the other? Considering these questions should help you get closer to your thesis statement.

  • Amy

    Hi. Can you plz help me write a thesis statement about the American dream is still alive with three reasons? 1. work hard to rich, 2.look for a better life. and I cant think of the third reason. if you have better reasons plz let me know. Thx so much!!

  • Amy

    The American dream is still alive since people can achieve their goals by working hard, people still can have a better life and they still have opportunity to change their situation. Is this a okay thesis statement???

    • Hi Amy–Yes this is okay! Here’s a quick revision:

      The American dream is still alive since people can achieve their goals, improve their lives, and change their situations by working hard and pursuing the many available opportunities.

      Good luck!

      • Amy

        Thank you!!!

  • Sierra

    I am suppose to write a research paper on Edgar Allan Poe and I don’t know how to start my intro and thesis statement, can you please help me?

    • Hi there–to get a good start, you really need to narrow your focus. What aspect of Poe are you writing about? Are you writing about his life in general? A few of his select works? (If so, which ones?) or something else? Once you narrow down your topic, you’ll have a better chance at coming up with a thesis statement and hook. Good luck!

  • sonia

    hi good evening, i need help i have to make a thesis, on cause and effect of technology into school curriculum

  • j

    Hi! I hope you can help me too :'( I’m having a hard time creating the statement of the problem for our thesis which is about “Factors Influencing Consumers’ Preference of Life Insurance Services” (Philippines)I really need to make one asap but I really don’t know where to start. I’m confused because someone told me it’s just at least 3 questions relevant to our topic and questionaire? But when I searched for samples just like what you’ve given, it should be an essay form??? I’m sorry haha but yeah I’m really not good at this, so I’d really appreciate your prompt reply here, it would be a great help for me! Thanks a lot and God bless 🙂

  • Hi there,
    Here’s a framework that you could use:

    The three main challenges that university students face today are A, B, and C.

    Fill in A, B, and C with three specific issues such as the cost of tuition, balancing school and work, and something else that you can think of.

    Good luck!

  • Maih Delany

    what about thesis ideas for ancient history? i know its kinda broad but my teacher said thats what our thesis has to be on.

    • Yes that’s incredibly broad and nearly impossible to write a thesis statement about. Did your teacher want you choose a specific topic under the umbrella of ancient history? What is your exact prompt?

  • Jackie Quek

    Hi Naomi,

    I am from Malaysia and I have played around with a few statements, but after running wildly in a circle, I find that I am right back on the first dot I stepped on. I need a business-and-management thesis statement but I am in education and I am an academic. I am not in any management role, so writing a business thesis seems an impossibility……any ideas from you would set my brain spinning again, hopefully

  • Mark Kaufmann

    Hi there….I wrote this a thesis for class but what told it was a good start. How can I improve it? My topic for argumental paper is convincing management to change the promotional process.

    People who work hard and take pride in their work should be afforded an equal opportunity to be promoted to a higher position. The chance of being promoted shouldn’t not be based off a persons ability to promote how good they think they are

    • Hi there–here’s an edit for you. I’m not 100% sure whether this will tick your teacher’s boxes, but hopefully it’s a step in the right direction! Good luck. 🙂

      People who work hard and take pride in their work should be afforded an equal opportunity to be promoted to a higher position. The chances of being promoted shouldn’t be based on a person’s ability to showcase how good they think they are, rather it should be based on their actual achievements in the workplace.

      • Mark Kaufmann

        I like that extra touch to it. Thank you

  • This is a pretty general topic. Whose burial practices are you discussing? These vary widely across cultures. Also, is this an argumentative paper where you pick a side? Or is it supposed to be informative? I think answering these questions should help you narrow in on your thesis.

  • Jonny

    I need help with a thesis statement.

    The topic is: Does being impoverished also promote poor eating
    habits and poor health?

    • You need a pick a side and stick to it so either:
      Poverty promotes poor eating habits and poor health as evidenced by A, B, and C.

      OR

      Poverty does not promote poor eating habits and poor health as evidenced by A, B, and C.

      My instinct says that you’ll probably find better research to support the first version of the thesis statement. Some things to consider are how unhealthy and fast foods tend to be cheaper and the problem of food deserts in poor towns and neighborhoods (i.e. no access to fresh fruit and vegetables in these areas).

      Good luck!

  • komolafe oluwatoyin

    I want to write a thesis statement on the topic ” Smart Specialization strategies : Assessment and Issues in the Case of Estonia “

  • Nicole

    I need help writing a thesis statement on how Canada was able to break apart from the British rule and become dominion

    • Hi there–it sounds like you are writing an expository essay that explains how this situation came to be. With that in mind, you should treat your thesis statement like a mini-outline. For example:

      The factors that enabled Canada to break away from British rule and gain dominion include A, B, and C.

      For more information on how to write a thesis statement, read this post: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-thesis-statement/

      Good luck!

  • Jane

    I need help writing a thesis statement about Some of the factors that make university students unhappy with their studies. Please help

    • Hi there, a basic structure for this type of thesis statement would be:

      University students can become unhappy with their studies due to 1, 2, and 3.

      Choose factors that you can support with your research/evidence. Some factors might be: high tuition costs, time commitments, and the importance of choosing a major/focus at such a young age.

  • sherryb

    I need some help with writing a thesis statement for my college class English Compostition. Submit a reflective essay that analyzes the writing processes you used to compose the first and final revised drafts of your narrative essay and your persuasive essay.

  • Rosanna Roberto

    I need help writing a thesis statement on the article Girl, by Jamaica Kincaid. My teacher assigned us to do an argumentative piece. I am choosing to argue the good that the mother is implying with her somewhat brutal wording. I am taking the approach of the daughter is translating her message in a rough tone. I have to separate my thoughts and bring them in with bullet point breaking it apart. I’m just stuck on how to write an good thesis statement that will address my whole argument? Any pointers

    • Hi Rosanna,

      Hmm this is a tough one!

      Maybe something like: “Despite her brutal word choices, which the daughter misinterprets as (hateful? mean?), the mother is actually looking out for her daughter in her messaging as evidenced by 1, 2, and 3. ”

      I’m not sure what the bullet points are meant for, but maybe if you add your supporting arguments as bullets (the 1, 2, 3) that would satisfy your teacher’s requirements?

      For more information about literary analysis, check out this post: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-literary-analysis/

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • Zyrah Asuncion

    I need help writing a thesis on “lime mud as a raw material in cement mortars”… thanks! GBU

    • Hi there– are you arguing for the case that this should be used? If so, your thesis statement might be:

      “Lime mud should be used as a raw material in cement mortars because X, Y, Z.”

      For X, Y, Z, choose arguments that you can support with evidence. Perhaps it’s better than the traditional material used? Cheaper? More eco-friendly?

      Good luck!

  • Hi there,

    Here is a revision for you:

    “Society should work to change social inequality since inequality forces people to migrate, obliges people to work hard for low salaries, and pushes people into depression and death.”

    If you use this thesis, I would further define who you mean by “society.” Are you focusing on a single government in particular?

    Also, be careful that you are not trying to tackle too broad of a topic. “Social inequality” in general is a very big subject… you could focus more specifically on something like the Syrian crisis which is forcing people to migrate, or the water crisis that is forcing people to migrate from rural California, or perhaps the income inequality in the U.S. which leads to low wage workers living off of government assistance. I think you might be trying to cover too much ground, especially if this is meant to be a short paper.

    Best,
    Naomi

  • Alex

    Hi there, I need help to write a thesis about “Don’t Let Kids Play Football” and I’m standing for it. I men I’m going to support it, so what’s can be your suggests?

    • Hi Alex,
      Here’s a basic structure for you:

      “Children shouldn’t be allowed to play football because 1, 2, and 3.”

      Choose arguments that you can support with evidence. (It causes concussions and other injuries? What else?)

      Good luck!

  • carol

    how do i write a thesis statement on the book pirate latitudes by michael crichton?

    • Hi Carol–You might find this blog post helpful: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-literary-analysis/

      In a literary analysis, the thesis statement functions like a mini road map of your paper and tells your readers the subject and focus of your paper.

      You want to determine which aspect of the book you are analyzing (i.e., symbolism, characters, theme?) and then break it down in your thesis statement.

  • ilubarde

    i need help to write an essay on why judicial independence is indispensable for the consolidation of democracy in developing countries

    • You’re almost there–you just need 2-3 key points that you can defend with evidence.

      Judicial independence is critical to the consolidation of democracy in developing countries because 1, 2, and 3.

      • ilubarde

        Thank you so much, Naomi.

  • Hans

    Can someone help me make a thesis?

    Topic: How the minor subjects affect the major subjects of College students

    • I’m not 100% certain I understand your topic as you state it here. However, perhaps something like this is what you are going for:

      Students who combine minor subjects with major subjects, such as minor subject 1 with major subject 2, will obtain a more well-rounded and useful education because reason 1, and reason 2.

      Fill in the blanks with your supported reasons. Also, I suggest you use an example combination of subjects to better support your argument. For example, how would psychology and criminology work together? (Or whatever subjects you are most interested in discussing).

      Good luck!

  • Even though it is a controversial practice, the benefits of cloning outweigh the risks as it offers benefit 1, benefit 2, and benefit 3.

  • Christine Encarguez

    Hi. I need help for writing a thesis statement for virtual teams. What are good thesis statement for this?

  • Hi Lorena,

    I would need to know a little bit more about the angle that you are planning to take on this topic. “The mediocrity of students” is pretty vague and could go a zillion different directions.

    If you haven’t already, you should consider these questions:
    1. Which students are you talking about? High school? College? Public school? Private school? U.S.? India? China? Somewhere else?
    2. What are you arguing? That (above) students are mediocre? That something should be done about mediocrity? If so, what should be done?
    3. Are you stating that these students are mediocre in all subjects or just one?

    Further defining your research should help you a lot. I also think that this blog post can you get you thinking about how to tackle this topic: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-research-paper/

    If you don’t want to read the entire thing, definitely read step 3.

    Thanks and good luck!

    Naomi

  • Vikas Chhabra

    I need to write a thesis statement about a automotive engineers imagination of a car turning into reality

    • Hi Vikas–

      I’m not quite sure where you are heading with this one. What is your argument? (You can’t really be for or against an engineer’s imagination, for example.) If this is not intended to be an argumentative paper, what type of paper is it? Answering these questions can help you hone in on a thesis statement.

      Best,
      Naomi

  • Alexa123

    Hi Naomi. I am having trouble coming up with a thesis statement for an analytical essay. I’m focusing on adultery in the late 1880s to the late 1990s and why its considered disgraceful. Thank you!

    • Hi Alexa–
      Wow! You are covering quite a lot of ground there (100+ years of adultery?). My first recommendation would be to try to focus that down if possible (one decade would be a lot more manageable).

      My second recommendation is to reconsider your argument. It’s really hard to argue *against the idea that adultery is disgraceful. Most everyone will agree with that statement. As I point out in this post, a good argumentative thesis statement needs to be debatable.

      One possibility is to focus on the reasons people cheat. You could argue that there are no excuses for such a behavior; line up some excuses that people use and shoot them down one by one.

      Think about this and then try to draft a thesis statement from there.

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • Alexa123

    Btw it has to be in third person!

  • Hi Jonah,

    You could argue that agricultural technology innovation is ultimately beneficial. A framework might look like this:

    “While some argue that innovation in agricultural technology is destructive (to the environment?), it is actually beneficial because it allows the world to feed more people and |insert benefit 2|.”

    Also, “innovation in ag tech” is a pretty huge topic, can you narrow that down to one innovation in particular? That would make your thesis stronger.

    Good luck!

  • Hi Naomi (great name!),

    Here’s a framework for you:

    While some argue that gene therapy (is bad because of why?), it plays a critical role in the advancement of healthcare by allowing benefit 1, benefit 2, and benefit 3.

    Good luck!
    Naomi

  • tara

    hi
    i’m doing an argumentative essay that it is acceptable for women to brestfeed in public. i really need help with a thesis statement.

    • Hi Tara–

      A basic structure for you will be:

      Women should/should not be able to breastfeed in public because reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

      Just make sure to pick a side and have evidence ready to back up your reasons.

      Good luck!

  • Kay

    I need help on going against that football is the most rewarding sport in the world

    • Hi Kay,

      Here’s a template for you to work with:

      While some argue that football is the most rewarding sport in the world, it is in fact a (dangerous? boring? unfair? please insert your word of choice here) sport that leads to problems with X, Y, and Z.

      Good luck!

  • Roshni

    I need help writing a thesis based on “media and images of violence against children in the family.” Can somebody please help 🙂

    • Hi there,

      I’m not sure what your angle is. Are you arguing that the media should avoid this type of imagery? If so…

      The media should avoid depicting images of violence against children in the family because it leads to problem 1 and problem 2.

      Good luck!

  • Gabrielle Brady

    I need help forming a thesis about what effects a negative living environment has on children

  • Gabrielle Brady

    I’d like some help forming a thesis statement about the effects of a negative home environment on children.

    • Hi there, are you simply writing an informational essay? Or are you writing a problem-solution essay?

      If informative essay:
      A negative home environment causes more damage than one might think including Effect 1, Effect 2, and Effect 3.

      If problem/solution:

      A negative home environment causes more damage to children than one might think including Effect 1, Effect 2. For this reason, (WHO?) must act on Solution 1 (and Solution 2), to mitigate this troubling situation.

      Good luck!

  • fofo

    hay i need help with my thesis its about not belonging and belonging is there any chance if you can
    help me thx

    • Hi there–I’m sorry but that topic is a bit too vague for me to help with. You’ll want to be able to better express what you are writing about before you can really come up with a thesis. Belonging in what sense? Be specific. For example, you could pick a specific topic like: Students who feel a sense of belonging in their communities get better grades. OR Teenagers who don’t feel a sense of belonging in their peer groups suffer from depression. These topics would lead you to a stronger thesis statement.

  • First you need to pick a stance. Do you think curfews keep teens out of trouble? Why or why not? The structure of your thesis statement will be:

    Curfews (don’t) keep teens out of trouble because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3.

    Make sure to pick reasons that you can support with evidence.

    Good luck!

  • Melon

    Our teacher wants us to write a short story, but she said she’s still looking for a thesis statement? Is that normal and is that possible? Wouldn’t that ruin the story?

    • Hi there–
      Yes, that is an odd request from your teacher since typically a thesis statement is a mini-outline of your paper that tells the reader your whole plan for the essay. Maybe you could instead offer some foreshadowing–I think that’s the creative element that is most like a thesis statement. “John McGoo was about to experience the worst day of his life, but he didn’t know it yet.” type of thing. 🙂 I would also bring up your concern to your teacher and ask for her clarification.

      Good luck!

  • darkblumidnight

    Hi Naomi, could you help me formulate a thesis statement for an informative essay? The topic is ” A Look at the Psycho-social Effects of Sexual Abuse on Child Development”. I have been trying to make my own thesis statement but i’m just hoping for some great examples! Thanks

    • Here’s one possible framework for you:

      “The psycho-social effects of sexual abuse on child development are far reaching and damaging including effect 1, a brief explanation, and effect 2, a brief explanation. *Optional add a your proposal about what can be done to mitigate this problem if you will be covering that in your paper*.”

  • belagat

    hi! I need help writing my thesis that is teacher-parent partnership and its impact on the child’s social relationships but I cant write about ‘INTRODUCTION TO THE PROBLEM’ please someone help me !

  • Hi there,

    The difficulty with this thesis statement is that there are ten elements of journalism, and if you are covering each of the ten it’s a bit difficult to give your reader a full preview. For that reason, I might recommend a summary thesis statement like this one:

    “There are ten elements of journalism that are critical to its function as a trustworthy source of information to society, and this paper will discuss each element and its specific importance.”

    Also, here is a helpful summary of these elements: https://www.americanpressinstitute.org/journalism-essentials/what-is-journalism/elements-journalism/

    Good luck!

  • Tara White

    I’m confused about everything right now.
    My topic is “What is Critical thinking? How does Critical thinking help students to evaluate information sources in the media debate on climate change?”
    What kind of essay am I writing?
    Would my thesis statement be – Critical thinking is X. It is the key component to helping students assess sources in the media debate on climate change because X ??
    I’m going out of my mind…

    • Hi there–

      It looks like you are writing an expository essay https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-an-expository-essay/

      Your teacher wants you to think about YOUR OWN definition of critical thinking. It’s kind of meta really, critical thinking about critical thinking. No wonder you are confused. 🙂

      You are totally on the right track with that thesis statement though.
      Critical thinking is X. It is the key component to helping students assess sources in the media debate on climate change because X, Y, and Z.

  • 江娜

    Hi there. I need your help for a thesis statement. The essay question is ‘What is positive education? How does positive education contribute to our personal development and our attitudes toward life? Discuss and give examples to support your answers.” Thank you very much.

    • Here’s a template:

      Positive education is X (provide your definition). Positive education brings Contribution 1, 2, and 3 to our personal development and life attitudes.

      Choose contributions that you can support in your paper!

      Good luck!

  • Dee

    I need help writing a thesis statement on American attitude towards Mexicans immigrants

    • First you’re going to need to pick an angle and a stance.

      Some ideas from two different stances:
      Americans have a poor attitude toward Mexican immigrants and fail to realize the positive role this group plays in American society such as X, Y, and Z.
      Americans have every right to be concerned about Mexican immigrants because of X, Y, and Z.

      Good luck!

  • Azari

    Hi I need help writing a thesis statement about media violence

    • You need to get more specific about your focus and your stance. This is a very broad topic. What aspect of media do you want to talk about? Video games? Movies? The news?

      Then how do you feel about violence in your chosen media? For example, do violent video games lead to violence in real life? Do you buy that idea? Why or why not? Here’s a good source for you if you choose this angle: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/effects-of-video-games-essay-sources/

      Good luck!

  • Margalena Remington

    I am writing a research paper 5-8 pages about the 12 steps A.A. I need help with the thesis statement. I know alot about them. I was against them in beginning now 6 year later I know they work. Help

  • Margalena Remington

    I need help writing a thesis on God or higher power being one of the most controversial words alcoholics anonymous.

    • The words “God” and “higher power” are the most controversial words used in alcoholics anonymous because Reason 1, Reason 2, and Reason 3.

      • Margalena Remington

        Thanks my reasons would be spiriual not religous program ,the believer and the non-believers

        • Great! Then your complete thesis statement would look something like this: The words “God” and “higher power” are the most controversial words used in alcoholics anonymous because AA is a spiritual, non-religious program that should serve both believers and non-believers alike.

  • kappa

    Hi. I really need help on constructing a thesis statement for an expository paragraph. Can you please give me some examples? Thank you so much.

  • Margalena Remington

    I need a thesis statement does treatment work for addicts and alcoholics

    • Margalena Remington

      Even though people contuine to relaspe, treatment can work for alcoholics and addicts because there are many options for recovering from drugs and alcohol and people are realizing locking someone away does not fix the problem. Could you help me with this statement. What changes should i make ? This is for another class

      • I think you should start your thesis statement on a high note:

        With a variety of available methods, treatment is the best option to help alcoholics and addicts recover from their addictions. Even with a given percentage of relapse, treatment works far better than locking people away, which does nothing to fix the problem.

  • saida meftah

    hi how are you? i have a B.A research for this year and my supervisor has given me an arabic play to translate into english, and so he told me to write in the introduction these three points: why did i choose this play and what are the words that attracted my attention.. and the conclusion he ask me to write the difficulties i’ve faced during the translation.
    my question now is: how can i organize a suitable table of content? and how can i write a relevant, useful thesis statement in the introduction?
    and thanks in advance 🙂

    • Hi there–it seems to me that your instructor will be happy if you simply answer his or her questions as your thesis statement. So for example:

      “I chose to translate “Title of Play” because reason 1, reason 2, reason 3. The words that attracted my attention the most were: X, Y, and Z.”

      This type of thesis statement provides a mini-outline of your paper and lays out everything that your instructor asked from you in the intro. Your body paragraphs can go deeper into those reasons you mentioned, and yet another body paragraph can discuss the words that you mentioned. Finally, your conclusion will discuss the difficulties you faced (per your teacher’s suggestion).

      Did your instructor also ask you to write a table of contents? If so, I’d ask for his advice on how he wants to see that laid out.

      Good luck!

  • Claudia De Anda

    Hello Nicole!
    I’m stuck writing a thesis statement for the theme: Collaborative consumption and its role for a sustainable future. I want to state that it can indeed be a great tool in order to achieve sustainability, but as long as it satisfies some criteria.

    I wrote: “Collaborative consumption could play an important role into the creation of a more sustainable future, since it can help to solve issues in the economic, social and ecological fields, providing that they have fixed structures and control.” is it ok?

    • “Collaborative consumption plays an important role in the creation of a more sustainable future as it can help to solve issues in the economic, social, and ecological fields, providing that they have fixed structures and control.”

      -I changed “could play” to “plays” as you want to take a stance and stick to it. “Could play” implies that you aren’t confident in your stance.
      -When you say “they have fixed…” is the “they” referring to the economic,social, and ecological fields? If so, then the use of this pronoun is okay. If you are instead referring back to “collaborative consumption,” though, you’ll want to make this more clear.

      • Claudia De Anda

        Thanks Naomi!
        -You’re right. I think used “could play” because I wanted to state that Collaborative consumption is like a double edge sword, I mean, if it is properly regulated can helps a lot, but if not, it could be counterproductive, but I didn’t know how to say that in the thesis statement.
        -The “they have fixed” part, I meant collaborative consumption…I got it wrong, sorry, English is not my first language…so, if I write the pronoun “it” would it make sense?

        “Collaborative consumption plays an important role in the creation of a more sustainable future as it can help to solve issues in the economic, social, and ecological fields, providing that it has fixed structures and control.” ??

        Thanks again!

        • Hi Claudia, great that makes much more sense. You could even make this tweak of moving the modifier for added clarity: “Collaborative consumption–provided it has fixed structures and control–plays an important role in the creation of a more sustainable future as it can help to solve issues in the economic, social, and ecological fields.”

          It sounds like this is an important project! If you need a final set of eyes once you’re done drafting it, you might consider sending it one of our awesome editors. Here’s more info on that service: https://www.kibin.com/essay-editing-proofreading

          Thanks for reading and for your comment!

          Best,
          Naomi

  • You’re definitely going to want to narrow down the topic first. You could look at forgiveness from a hundred different angles. Here is one idea:

    Forgiveness is more important to the perform doing the forgiving than the person being forgiveness because X, Y, Z.

    Good luck!

  • craig

    I am sitting in class. I am being asked to right a thesis statement on technology and how it will affect education In the 21th century.

    • Hey there– Sorry I’m not available to provide instant help during in-class essays, but love that you gave it a shot anyway.

      A general structure for this thesis statement would be:
      Technology will affect education in the 21st century by 1, 2, and 3.

      One example might be “bringing more classes online”

      Hope you had a successful class today!

      Best,
      Naomi

  • saida meftah

    thank you so much, your explanation was useful for me and i benifited from it a lot

    • Sweet! So happy to hear that. Thanks for your comment. 🙂

  • Hi there,
    First you’re going to need to take a stance on this topic. Some questions to answer to come up with your stance (and then your thesis statement) include: do you think that there needs to be more or less privacy measures? How important is privacy in the context of technology? Who should (or should not) do something to ensure privacy? What should (or should not) be done?

    You might also find this post helpful: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-thesis-statement/

    Best,
    Naomi

  • Wow, yes this is a tricky chicken-egg situation huh? It sounds like your thesis statement might be:

    Success is not more important than happiness, but being successful can lead to happiness and being happy can lead to success.

    Hope this reply isn’t too late!

    Best,
    Naomi

  • jamie west

    Hi I’m struggling with a statement about salvation in the Christian faith and can it be lost

  • Tiffany king

    I need help creating a thesis about my trip to Costa Rica.

    • Hi Tiffany, your thesis statement will definitely depend on the type of essay you are writing. Are you trying to just explain all the beautiful things you saw? Or are you trying to add deeper meaning and maybe describe what you learned from your trip to Costa Rica? Or, are you arguing that Costa Rica is one of the greatest places to visit?

      Version 1: The three most beautiful natural wonders I saw while visiting Costa Rica were the jungle, the Volcano Arenal and it’s hot springs, and the pristine beaches of Manuel Antonio.

      Version 2: While visiting Costa Rica I learned the importance of environmental preservation and respect for the land and its animal inhabitants.

      Version 3: While there are many beautiful countries to visit, Costa Rica is by far the most beautiful because of it’s natural wonders, abundant wildlife, and kind people.

      You see what I mean? There are so many directions you could take this.

      In any case, your thesis statement will be like a mini-outline for your essay laying out exactly what you plan to cover in your body paragraphs. You can learn more about how to write a thesis statement like that in this post: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-thesis-statement/

      Best,
      Naomi

      P.S. isn’t Costa Rica amazing?

  • Yuki-Sorata

    I’m doing a thesis statement about Donald Trump makes a commerical video to Japan in supporting him, gets united and destroys the earth and dominates the entire race of planet earth..a bit offensive, but seemed funny to a thesis on so if anyone can help me that’ll be great ^^

    • Hi Yuki-
      I know the video that you are talking about, but be aware that Trump did not actually make that video! It was created by an indie producer named Mike Diva. So if you want to write a thesis statement around this video, you’ll want to understand it’s purpose according to the creator. Diva writes about his video, “Trump is turned into the ultimate teen idol, dictator, and action hero, all rolled into one. He seig heils in front of a swastika and destroys the world, but he creates an amazing spectacle in the process. And the video seems to be saying that that’s all the media really care about.”

      So I guess what argument can you draw from this understanding of it? That will help you pinpoint your thesis statement.

      Best,
      Naomi

  • Hi KC– your argument could revolve around what *should be done. If this is a procedure that any bystander can use to save a person’s life, then what would be the best way to ensure that more people are aware of it ?

    Some questions to answer:
    Who should be responsible for teaching this procedure to the average person? Should this be taught in high school health classes across the country? Should it be a requirement for certain (non-medical) professionals such as teachers or restaurant workers or bus drivers or other professionals who come into contact with a large number of people on a daily basis?

    In other words what SHOULD be done about this knowledge and who should do it? I think in answering that question you can find the basis for your argument.

    Best,
    Naomi

  • Hi Kim–basically your thesis statement should serve as the mini-outline for your speech. Are you going to be talking about ways to improve your health? Or reasons for improving your health?

    Example templates:

    There are so many reasons to improve your health, chief among those are a, b, and c.

    Or

    In this speech, I’ll cover the three easiest (most important, best) ways to improve your health: 1, 2, and 3.

    You might find this blog post helpful: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-thesis-statement/

    Good luck!

  • Kelly

    The director of a local domestic violence shelter has asked you (a board member and volunteer for the organization) to write an informative paper about your local organization’s program. Describe the process and benefits of the program for the community members.

    Can you please help me come up with a thesis statement on the above topic and thank you!

    • Hi Kelly– This is an informative paper, so you’ll want to treat your thesis statement as a mini-outline of your paper rather than an argument. So a general framework will look like this:

      Our organization’s program will benefit the community in three key ways: a, b, and c.

      For more information on writing a better thesis statement, check out this post: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-thesis-statement/

      Good luck!

  • yan yin

    Hello there i dont know if you still responds to questions here coz the activities here are from two years ago…

  • yan yin

    I really need help writing a thesis on bystander apathy, my title is bystander apathy is a serious psychological phenomenon. please help me out if this is cotrrect or not 🙁

    • Your thesis statement might look like this:

      Bystander apathy is a serious psychological phenomenon that leads to X, Y, and Z.

      The above thesis statement would help you outline the points about bystander apathy that you plan to cover in your paper.

      If you are going to pose solutions to this problem, your thesis statement might look like this:

      Bystander apathy is a serious psychological phenomenon that leads to x (state the problem), and it requires (WHO?) to (DO WHAT?) to solve it.

      Good luck!

  • Kristina

    Hey there! I need help forming a thesis statement for an essay about Femicide in Guatemala. I want to address how those committing the crime often get away with it without any form of punishment, how femicide needs to be addressed more by the media, and also the need for a change in the way society views women.

    • Hi Kristina,

      It looks like you are most of the way there already. Your thesis statement might look like this:

      Addressing the serious problem of femicide in Guatemala requires a multi-prong solution which includes strict and consistent punishments for perpetrators of femicide, increased media coverage of the issue, and a fundamental shift in the way Guatemalan society views and values its women citizens.

      Though as I write that out, it seems like you are taking on a lot! If this is a longer research paper, that could be okay, but if this is a shorter essay, you might consider narrowing your focus a bit more.

      Best,
      Naomi

      • Kristina

        Thank you so much, this helped a lot!

        • Woot! Happy to help. 🙂 thanks for the comment.

  • helphelphelp

    hi i help!!! can i get examples of thesis statement for plagiarism

    • Hiya– Is your topic plagiarism? That’s pretty broad and you could approach it from many different angles. I think the first thing you’ll need to do before you can come up with a thesis statement is to narrow your focus. For example, Are you arguing for or against a certain plagiarism policy (perhaps at your school?)? Are you arguing about the definition of what constitutes plagiarism? Are you arguing about what the consequences of being caught plagiarism should be? Or, are you arguing that teachers aren’t doing a good enough job of preventing plagiarism?

      You see what I mean? There are so many directions you could go, so you need to figure that out before you’ll be able to nail down a thesis statement.

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • moniquue

    I need help writing a thesis statement for my Argumentative essay/ research paper on Cinderella by Grimm brothers VS. the Disney version

  • Gemila Eunice Estobo

    Hi there! I need a help. I am a graduating student and there’s this thesis thing, of course, every gradwaaaiitting has to encounter this. Here’s my thesis title – Toxicity Assessment on Soil in the Landfill Site of Surigao City. I couldn’t think great on its hypothesis and problem statement. Could you do some extra help for me? Thanks!

  • pushed

    please help Miss Naomi Tepper… my thesis on housing for informal settlers in a certain city through the programs of national agency and local gov’t….

    • HI there, you’ll probably want to focus your thesis statement on what *should be done about this issue. You’ll also want to make it very focused or your essay might grow out of control. Here is an example structure you might use:

      Local and national government programs (such as which ones exactly?) should help informal settlers (from where exactly?) settle in to (what city exactly) by offering A, B, and C services.

      For more info on focusing your essay topic, check out this helpful post: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-narrow-a-topic/

  • Kelly

    Hello,
    Can you please help me create a thesis statement on this topic:
    write about the major causes and effects of stress on college students. The paper will be presented to senior administration in order to help students have a more positive college experience.

  • Dominic Pahimnayan

    how to write grammaticaly? is that ryt ?
    if that’s my title its impossible to make it

    • Hi there, no that is not grammatically correct since grammatically is a modifier, you need something for it to modify. 🙂

      You could revise this to: “How to write grammatically correct English.”

      Best,
      Naomi

  • Dominic Pahimnayan

    I need help in my thesis pleaseee my topic is how to write grammaticaly is that correct??? plz I need uy respond’

  • george

    can someone help me pls i need to write a thesis statement about the differences between women and men’s emotion like taking in a tragedy news.

  • gaurab

    how to write essay on sisters love including a thesis statement
    in both indroductin andcolclusion paragraph

    • Hi there,

      First, you’ll need to take a stance on sisterly love. You’re probably in favor of it, I imagine, but a good thesis will make an argument about it and will provide evidence for why that argument is true. Here are a couple examples:

      Sisterly love is an important force because X, Y, and Z.

      Or:

      The love between sisters is unrivaled because X, Y, and Z.

  • gaurab

    how to write a lifee based story on passing interview as a sucess and big step of life including thesis statement
    Hope the tips u give me willnt fall on plagrirism
    Its a assignment for me

  • Hi there!

    To start off your essay, you need a great hook! Check out these posts: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/good-hook-sentences/ and https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/what-is-a-hook-sentence/.

    As for your thesis, you’ll want to introduce your example of hard work paying off (your interview) and also provide some evidence that it is true (that you were able to come to the USA and maybe how you’ve succeeded since then). So here’s an example:

    “Preparing for and successfully completing my immigration interview was hard work, but the effort and determination were worth it because X, Y, and Z” — X, Y, and Z would be the outcomes or examples of success that you’ve enjoyed because you successfully navigated your interview. So those might be things like landing a great job, or continuing your education, or anything else that happened as a result of your hard work and focus, and they will also serve as the topics of your body paragraphs in your essay.

    Best,
    Erin

  • DTorres

    I would like some assistance for a thesis statement on global marketing?

    • “Global marketing” is a pretty broad topic. To write an effective thesis statement, you’ll need to pick an angle on that topic. Are you in favor of it, or against it? And if so, what are a few reasons why? Once you have those ironed out, you can plug them into the thesis builder (choosing “argumentative” if that’s indeed the type of paper you’re writing): https://www.kibin.com/thesis-builder/type.

      Happy writing!
      Erin

  • Kat

    Hi , I need help writing a thesis statement on linking race with gun control . I have a few key points I’m focusing on but don’t know how to put this together. Like mass shootings media coverage and perception? Can anyone help ? Thank you !

    • Hi Kat,

      Sounds like an ambitious topic that might need to be narrowed and focused a bit. For instance, I’m not sure what type of media coverage/perception you’re referring to or how you want to link mass shootings and race, or what your stance on gun control is. Here’s one possible approach covering as many of those ideas as possible:

      “Media coverage falsely influences society’s perception that gun violence is primarily perpetrated by minorities in America despite the fact that white men commit more mass shootings than any other demographic.”

      I’d recommend that you take a look at How to Narrow a Topic and Write a Focused Essay (https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-narrow-a-topic/) and then try plugging your stance and claims into the Thesis Builder (https://www.kibin.com/thesis-builder/type).

  • Melissa Smith

    Hi Naomi, I need assistance with a thesis statement discussing the significant impact technology has had on day to day life. I have chosen technology and health and fitness. I would appreciate any help. Thanks!!

    • Hi Melissa,

      Your thesis should definitely take a stance on technology and its impact on health and fitness — you could definitely argue this topic either way! I’m going to assume you’re arguing that technology has had a positive impact on health and fitness, but you can definitely use the following examples to argue the other way, too:

      Technological advances, including X, Y, and Z, have made it possible for people to live healthier, more fit lives.

      In that case, “X, Y and Z” are placeholders for things like fitness trackers, smartphone apps, or even medical equipment — whatever facets of technology you want to focus on.

      You could also focus less on the technology and more on the specific improvements that technology has had:

      Technology had positively impacted human health and fitness, as evidenced by Reason 1, Reason 2, and Reason 3.

      Those reasons might include things like “people are living longer thanks to medical technology” — whatever you’ve decided to focus your research on 🙂

      Happy writing!

  • Ms. Markkeysha Johnson

    I’m doing a Capstone for my Senior Seminar that requires a 16-20 page paper. It can be on ANY topic as long that we choose two from any area below: arts and humanities, social sciences, physical sciences, life sciences, mathematics, literature, language and communications. I’m a liberal studies major- Minor special ed. My longterm goal is a medical social worker. I’m currently a special ed para-eductor at a low poverty middle school.

    1. Finding a peer reviewed article of interest area: so are: obesity, psychological issues, something in relation to social work, ASD low poverty vs middle class/suburbs I am open to many subjects.

    So, my interest for my assignment is opened to many opportunities and interests. Where should I start?

    Thank you.

    • Hi Markkeysha,

      I love that you are so curious and interested in so many subjects, but I can see how this could also cause you a little bit of stress as you focus in on your paper.

      I would suggest that you start narrowing your focus sooner than later just because it is really hard for you to do even preliminary research on every single one of the topics you listed. So pick two. Give yourself a couple of hours to investigate each one. Immerse yourself in the articles and start collecting different angles and approaches you could take. For example, let’s say you decide to dig into “obesity.” This is a topic that itself could take you a million different directions. Start listing possible directions you could go: childhood obesity, obesity prevention, obesity research from a cross-cultural perspective, etc. etc.

      In the end, after you’ve done your preliminary research, choose a topic and focus that meets these two criteria: 1. it has plenty of evidence and material that you can use in your paper 2. it’s really interesting and exciting to you.

      Here is an excellent post on narrowing a topic: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-narrow-a-topic/

      Cheers!

      • Ms. Markkeysha Johnson

        Thank you greatly! Will keep in touch. ?

        • you’re welcome! I hope your project goes well. 🙂

          • Ms. Markkeysha Johnson

            The topic I chose is:

            The Disparities of Obesity and African American Women

          • This is a good start! Since “disparities” means a “great difference” you’ll need to round this out a bit. Do you mean to say the disparities of obesity between African American women from REGION 1 and REGION 2 (for example urban and rural, or two different cities)? Or do you mean to say the disparities of obesity between African American women and SOME OTHER GROUP OF WOMEN (for example white American women or Asian American women)?

            Cheers!

          • Ms. Markkeysha Johnson

            Oh yes disparities of obesity between African American women and Latinos women. So will I do on obesity itself first? Or obesity of African American women? And second search Latinos women?

          • You’re going to want to get into an explorer mindset and start searching on all different angles. Obesity in the U.S., obesity among African American women, obesity among Latin American women… etc. I’m guessing that you have access to a school research database, but you might also want to use Google Scholar to find some helpful articles. Here is an example search result (check out the second result it covers exactly your topic!) : https://scholar.google.com/scholar?q=obesity+in+latin+american+women&btnG=&hl=en&as_sdt=0%2C5

          • Ms. Markkeysha Johnson

            Yes, I have database access. I changed topic again ? ‘The misdiagnosis of mood disorders and schizophrenia in African American women in the United States’ but now I understand how to began my research.

            * schiz & mood disorders in the U.S.

            Thank you

  • Emily-Swan

    I need help! I’m writting a research paper on wether racism exist in America. My outline includes the history and racism in society and the Goverment but I’m not sure how to put everything together.

    • Hi Emily-

      It seems like the history of racism in society and the government makes for good background information but doesn’t necessarily answer your question about whether or not racism exists in America today (spoiler alert: it does). What you need to do is formulate your thesis statement, which will then serve as a mini-outline for the arguments that you will cover in your paper.

      For example: While the slave trade and Jim Crowe laws are a thing of the past, racism in the U.S. is alive and well manifesting as Example 1 (i.e., police killings of unarmed black men), example 2, and example 3.

      Also–note that this is a HUGE topic, so you might want to narrow it down. For example, are you talking specifically about racism against blacks? Or do you want to tackle racism against Muslims or Hispanics? Do you want to focus in on racism in one aspect of society (such as criminal justice or education), or in one geographical region (such as the Texas)? Answering these types of questions will help you a great deal as you get into this project.

      Here is a post that talks about narrowing your topic: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-narrow-a-topic/

      Here are some example essays on racism: https://www.kibin.com/essay-examples/search/racism%20in%20the%20united%20states (this shows how you could choose so many different directions on this topic).

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • Yeni

    hello i am having trouble making a these about undocumented immigrants having the right to obtain a driver’s license…. it can benefit us very well.
    please, please help.

  • Yeni

    hello i am having trouble making a these about undocumented immigrants having the right to obtain a driver’s license…. it can benefit us very well.
    please, please help.

  • Yeni

    hello i am having trouble making a these about undocumented immigrants having the right to obtain a driver’s license…. it can benefit us very well.
    please, please help.

    • Yeni

      please help

    • Hi Yeni,
      Interesting topic!

      It looks like you have taken your stance in favor of the driver’s license for undocumented immigrants, and now you just need to lay out your argument. So your thesis statement could be:

      Undocumented immigrants should be granted the right to obtain a state driver’s license as it would provide many benefits to society including Benefit 1, Benefit 2, and Benefit 3.

      When finding these benefits, make sure you choose ones that come from reputable sources and that you can expand upon in your paper.

      Good luck!

  • Fatimah Al Ghanim

    how should i construct my thesis statement if it talks about a scientific research (Rheumatism: types, causes, symptoms, management (treatment).).
    i have thought of this thesis; Understanding Rheumatism by studying its types, their causes and how to manage living with it.
    but i think i need to make it richer, so how can i do that?

  • kean

    hi can i ask about illuminati thesis statement?

    • Hi Kean–Illuminati is a pretty broad topic, so you’ll need to narrow your focus in order to develop a thesis statement.
      What’s the purpose of your paper?
      -To prove the illuminati is real?
      =To disprove its existence?
      -To convince your reader that they are/are not involved in a specific conspiracy?

      You might want to work out your focus with the help of this blog post: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-narrow-a-topic/

      Once you determine your focus, you should have an easier time developing your thesis statement which is there to make clear the point and stance of your paper.

      Cheers!
      Naomi

  • Cadymm

    I’m giving a speech over the benefits, harms, and alternatives to eating red meat and need a thesis statement for my introduction paragraph as well as an altered restatement of my thesis for my conclusion

    • The structure for your thesis statement could look like:

      Eating red meat offers BENEFIT 1, however, it also leads to HARMFUL EFFECT 1, and HARMFUL EFFECT 2. Alternative food choices such as EXAMPLE 1 (and EXAMPLE 2) provide all of the benefits of red meat with none of the drawbacks.

      Regarding your conclusion, you might read this post for more guidance on restating your thesis: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/essay-conclusion/

      Cheers!

  • zapton albarico

    Can you help me? On my thesis paper? I dont know how to a write a thesis

  • Hi Jenny–

    You are almost there. Here is a revision and further exploration for you:

    Americans should be able to choose passive or negative euthanasia when they have an untreatable or incurable illness since it is an ethical choice that will ease suffering and REASON 2.

    In the above example, you can see that I repurposed the “ethics” element of your original statement to be one of the reasons that you will defend in your paper, and I left you room for a second reason if you need to develop your paper even further.

    Good luck!

  • I haven’t seen this film, so I can only offer general advice on your assignment. It looks like it’s an opinion essay so there is no right or wrong answer, you just have to be able to defend the answer you choose with “evidence” from the film.

    So pick a side on the question and use one of these structures to get started on your thesis statement:

    An individual’s choice affects the lives of others due to REASON 1 and REASON 2.
    OR
    An individual’s choice does not affect the lives of others due to REASON 1 and REASON 2.

    You will spend the rest of your essay defending the reasons you select with quotes and evidence from the film.

    Also considering that this is an analytical essay, this post might help you get started: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/analytical-essay-outline/

    Cheers!

  • melissa

    i need help writing about clash of rights
    when two rights are in direct conflict of each other

  • Johnet Dosee

    i need help writing a thesis on the health concerns of children living at homes with substance abuse

    • Your thesis statement will depend on the purpose of your paper. Are you looking to provide solutions to this problem or just state and explicate on the problem?

      Framework for a problem-solution thesis statement:

      Children who live in homes with substance abuse are exposed to numerous health concerns such as CONCERN 1 and CONCERN 2, and (WHO?) should provide SOLUTION 1 (and SOLUTION 2) to address these issues.

      Framework for just stating the problem:

      Children who live in homes with substance abuse are exposed to numerous health concerns such as CONCERN 1, CONCERN 2, and CONCERN 3.

      Your thesis statement will serve as a mini-outline for your paper. Here is another helpful post on the topic: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-thesis-statement/

      Best,
      Naomi

  • Isabeau Perez

    i need help writing a theisis statement on how culture norms and values influence how the communicators behave

    • Hi Isabeau,

      It’s a little hard for me to pin down what your topic is because your description is pretty broad. For example, I find myself asking which culture? And who are these communicators? You might need to narrow your focus a bit before you can develop a thesis statement. Here is a great post about that: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-narrow-a-topic/

      Then, your task will be to create a thesis that serves as a mini-outline for what you are about to cover in your paper. Here is a post about that: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-thesis-statement/

      A general draft version might look something like:

      Cultural norms and values such as EXAMPLE 1 and EXAMPLE 2 influence how communicators (can you be more specific?) behave. These behaviors include POINT 1, POINT 2, and POINT 3.

      The rest of your paper will be spent discussing each of the points.

      Good luck!

  • Peggy Mulkey

    i need a thesis statement my topic is How to Survive the Teenage Years

    • Hi Peggy– It looks like you are writing a process essay, so you might want to check out this blog post for guidance: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/6-simple-steps-to-write-a-better-process-essay/

      Your thesis statement will basically be a preview or outline of things to come in your essay. A general structure might look like this:

      There are four basic steps to surviving the teenage years and these include step 1, step 2, step 3, and step 4.

      Then you’ll spend the rest of the essay going into detail about each of these steps, including evidence from your research.

      Good luck!

  • Hi Rukiye,

    Sounds like the heart of your thesis statement should be something like: “Citizenship should not be conferred to [name the specific groups of people you’re focusing on] because X, Y, Z.”

    You could also be more specific by saying what action should be done and by whom: “The [US/UK/Canadian/Australian] government should not confer citizenship on [group] because X, Y, and Z.”

    In both versions of the thesis statement, “X, Y, and Z” are your specific reasons why this group should not receive the rights of citizenship.

    I hope this helps!
    – Erin

  • Hi Dialani,

    You’ve already got your stance covered, so you’ll just need to add some reasons to support that stance:

    “Journalists do not have a responsibility to remove all bias from their [stories/reports/articles — whatever type of media you’re focusing on] because X, Y, and Z.”

    X, Y, and Z would be the reasons that you think journalists should be allowed to reflect bias in their reporting. Note that you don’t *have* to provide three reasons — at least two is a good idea, though.

    Happy writing!
    Erin

  • Hey Sam!

    If you’re arguing in favor of spending a year in service helping others — and I imagine you are — then your thesis might look something like: “Every [student/citizen of a certain country/etc.] should spend a year in service helping others because X, Y, and Z.” In the brackets, you would say *who* should spend a year in service, and then X, Y, and Z are your specific reasons for arguing that way.

    I hope this helps!

    Best,
    Erin

  • Hi Gina–
    Here is a potential framework for you.

    A teacher’s approach directly impacts a student’s performance in class: an approach using SPECIFIC METHOD 1 or SPECIFIC METHOD 2 is more likely to lead to a positive outcome, while an approach using SPECIFIC METHOD 3 will result in a negative outcome in student performance.

    Make sure that you and defend/critique each of the methods that you choose with research in the body paragraphs of your paper.

    This is just one framework to approach this thesis statement, but I hope it gets you thinking.

    Cheers!
    Naomi

  • Hi John–I’m not quite sure what you are comparing and contrasting here based on this question. Are you comparing how people interact in real life compared to how they interact online?

    If so here is a framework if you are contrasting the two:

    Online interactions and real life interactions between people are starkly different from each other, as real life interactions are DIFFERENCE 1 and 2, while online interactions are DIFFERENCE 3 and 4.

    Here is a framework to compare the two:

    While interactions between people online as compared to in real life may at their surface seem quite different, they’re essentially the same as they both SIMILARITY 1, 2, and 3.

    Or to both compare and contrast:

    While interactions between people online as compared to in real life are quite similar in that they both SIMILARITY 1, they are also quite different from each other, as real life interactions are DIFFERENCE 1, while online interactions are DIFFERENCE 3.

    Finally my example based on the last framework:

    While interactions between people online as compared to in real life are quite similar in that they both lead to friendships and the exchange of ideas, they are also quite different from each other, as real life interactions are often more realistic and polite, while online interactions are often exaggerated and abrasive.

    Also don’t miss this post on comparison and contrast essays with a downloadable outline template: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/compare-and-contrast-essay-outline/

    Happy writing!
    Naomi

  • Eva

    Hi,
    Could you please help me to write a thesis for my research paper that is an analysis of policy ( abstinence -only-until marriage program)?Because the first element requires that Title V-funded abstinence-only-until-marriage programs have as their “exclusive purpose” promoting abstinence outside of marriage, programs may not in any way advocate contraceptive use or discuss contraceptive methods except to emphasize their failure rates.

    • Hi Eva–
      Are you arguing in favor or against this program? That’s a critical bit of information for developing your thesis statement here.

      Best,
      Naomi

      • Eva

        Hi Naomi, I’m arguing against this program based on the facts that program violates human rights, has lack of information on use of contraceptives, and found to be inefficient Thank you!

        • Nice! Well you have your thesis statement right there! So to put it together:

          The Abstinence Only Until Marriage Program should not be enacted because it is inefficient and ineffective, violates human rights, and prohibits information about the use of contraceptives.

          Then you’d spend the rest of your paper defending each point in your thesis statement with solid evidence.

          Happy writing!

  • Marco

    I need argumentative thesis statement about teen pregnancy and not going to college

    • Hi Marco,

      Are you arguing that teenagers who become pregnant should or shouldn’t go to college? Or are you planning to argue that these young women who become pregnant generally don’t go to college. I would advise taking a stance on the first question (should or shouldn’t) because you can’t really base an argument around the second issue (that they generally don’t) because that boils down to a statistical fact more than an arguable stance.

      My thesis statement would look something like this:

      Young women who become pregnant in their teens should be encourage to continue their education and go to college; but they face unique challenges, which is why schools should provide X, Y, and Z services to help these women through.

      Some services that come immediately to mind include daycare and financial assistance.

      Best,
      Naomi

      • Marco Dee

        Thank you so much

  • Donella McFayden

    I need some help writing a thesis statement on “How do Memory and Intelligence change as we age?”

    • Hi Donella,

      If you’re writing an argumentative essay on this topic, then you’ll need to be able to take a stance on it. So rather than simply describing the ways that memory and intelligence change, you’re going to want to form an argument that is debatable. Here’s an example of what I mean: “The fact that memory and intelligence decline as we age is a myth; in fact, in the absence of dementia, memory and intelligence [do not change significantly/increase/whatever your research shows you].”

      I’m not really sure *what* the research says on the topic, so the bracketed part is just some potential ways to approach the topic depending on what the research says. Alternatively, you could say that it’s *not* just a myth if the research does indeed support that.

      Happy writing!

      Erin

  • Hi Derick,

    Based on the way the topic is written, it sounds like your instructor wants you to dig deep and challenge the prevailing notion of what a double standard is. You might consider constructing your thesis statement like this: “While double standards are commonly defined as ________, they are actually __________.” I can’t say what your personal definition of a double standard is and I’m not sure of the context in which you’re writing your essay, but I hope that helps you string your thoughts on the subject into a thesis that answers the prompt.

    Best,
    Erin

  • Ms. Markkeysha Johnson

    Hello,
    I’m trying to write a capstone proposal and I’m considering ‘childhood Obesity’

    Proposal Question: How is childhood obesity causesd by emotional problems & stress?

    After researching 10 peer articles. I must seek the known and unknown of my topic and to contribute something new and original.

    16-20 pages.

    • Hi Markkeysha,

      Your thesis statement framework might look something like this:

      Emotional problems and stress such as STRESSOR 1 and STRESSOR 2 and STRESSOR 3 are known to lead to childhood obesity.

      You could take this a step further and discuss how these stressors can be mitigated (if this is in the scope of your project).

      Therefore, your framework would be

      Emotional problems and stress such as STRESSOR 1 and STRESSOR 2 and STRESSOR 3 are known to lead to childhood obesity and it is the responsibility of WHO(?) to take PREVENTION 1 and PREVENTION 2 to mitigate these problems.

      The details will depend on where your research leads you. Make sure to choose elements that you can clearly and easily defend with evidence from your research.

      Happy writing!
      Naomi

  • Elena Munoz

    hi, i’m having a hard time starting my thesis. Can anyone help me to write a strong thesis and argument statement in the issue of Nurse shortage? I am arguing that there is a nurse shortage in the U.S. because of the work environment, Education/Retention and Aging of nurses/retirement.

    Thank You

    • Hi Elena–
      You are almost there! You have all the ingredients you need for a thesis statement here. So to put it together:

      The U.S. is facing a serious nursing shortage due to three main contributing factors: the challenging work environment, and a lack of education and retention combined with the reality that so many older nurses are presently coming into retirement.

      Then you would spend the rest of your paper addressing the three factors that you laid out in your thesis statement with strong evidence from credible sources.

      Happy writing!

  • Loris

    I need a thesis statement for proposition 66?

    • Hi Loris–
      First, you need to pick your stance. Do you want to argue for or against proposition 66? This will determine the framework of your thesis statement.

      For:

      Residents of XYZ County should vote for proposition 66 because REASON 1, REASON 2, and REASON 3.

      or Against:

      Residents of XYZ County should vote against proposition 66 because REASON 1, REASON 2, and REASON 3.

      Then you would spend the rest of your paper defending the reasons that you laid out in your thesis statement, using credible evidence from reliable sources.

      Happy writing!
      Naomi

  • Susan Watkins

    I am trying to write a thesis statement over describing what I have learned by completing certain assignment (CRIOP assessment tool, Mini Case Study and Action Plan) and how it makes me a better teacher. Any suggestions

    • Susan Watkins

      I am writing a reflection (3 point essay).

    • Hi Susan,
      In this instance, your thesis statement basically serves as a mini-outline for what you’re going to cover in your paper. First, brainstorm three major things you learned from this assignment and then lay it out in your statement. The framework would look like:

      After completing the CRIOP assessment tool, I learned LEARNING 1, LEARNING 2, and LEARNING 3.

      The rest of your paper will be going into detail on these learnings, so make sure to choose what you want to write about wisely. You need to be able to expand on them! Here is another great post about writing a thesis statement that may help you: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-thesis-statement/

      Happy writing!

      Naomi

  • Julie Simon Mac

    This is very helpful, thank you so much. I guess, however, I need more help, tons of help. I just can’t put my statement into words. I am thinking of ‘making universities give students majoring in English language an entrance test battery or simply an entrance or qualifying exam’ in major universities in my city. Is ‘making’ a huge word? Clearly, i need help.
    Thanks a lot. More power!

    • Hi Julie,

      I understand what you’re arguing and think just rephrasing it will make it more clear. What about something like: “Universities in [city name] should require prospective English majors to pass a qualifying examination in order to X, Y, and Z.”

      In that example, X, Y, and Z would be the reasons that you support such a requirement. You wouldn’t necessarily have to list three reasons, but I would certainly list at least one.

      I hope this helps!

      Best,
      Erin

      • Julie Simon Mac

        Hi Erin,

        Thanks a lot!

  • Fatema Helal

    Hi every one. I need help in my thesis statement on slavery trade in Arab peninsula. and my main focus is on the trade that was related with african people and a little bit of arab slaves too.

    • Hi Fatema,

      To write your thesis, you’ll need to take a stance/position on the slave trade so that you’re making a unique argument about the topic. In other words, your thesis should state that the slave trade of African and Arab people had a specific effect on a group of people or a region, or that it impacted the history or future economy of this region, etc.

      Best,
      Erin

  • Maria Victoria Colina Zerna II

    Hi I need help in writing my thesis statement. I would like to ask if would it consist to 2 paragraphs?

  • Hi Jenna–
    Thesis statements can come in a variety of formats. There is really no one exact way to write one. If your teacher has prompted you to start with the word because, you had better go ahead and start with the word “because”. There may be a very specific reason that your teacher is requesting this (perhaps she is really prompting you to find a supportable reason in your thesis statement).

    Also, it’s not grammatically incorrect to start a sentence with “because” although some people avoid doing this as a matter of style preference. Here is a post about that: http://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/grammar/can-you-start-a-sentence-with-because

    Best,
    Naomi

  • Hi Carrie

    You will need to narrow down your focus before you write a thesis statement: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-narrow-a-topic/

    Best,
    Naomi

  • lucifer

    Hi im writing an argumentative research paper and i already have a thesis statement. im just wondering if its a good argumentative thesis statement or not “There should be no limit on medical technology since it contributes to a better understanding on how the body works, improves the health of people, raises awareness of medical issues, and benefits modern society.”

    • Hi there,

      Really good structure here. You have a stance and four reasons that you plan to defend in your paper. You are off to a good start. However, I have one concern for you to consider:

      Medical technology is a pretty broad topic. You might have a stronger paper if you limit this to a specific type of medical technology (for example stem cell research or something like that.) Otherwise, you’re going to have a pretty unwieldy paper on your hands. If you do choose to narrow your focus a bit, it might also help you narrow your arguments which are a bit broad for example “benefits modern society” and “improves health” are some big claims to support.

      I hope that makes sense! You might want to check out this post: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-narrow-a-topic/

      A more focused topic will be easier to research and support.

      Best,
      Naomi

  • While I’m not exactly sure I understand how the virginity test is related to ignorance ( or even what the virginity test is), if you know the answer to that, then I think you’re in fine shape.

    An edited version of your thesis statement would read: The virginity test should be banned because it is fallible and leads to human rights violations.

    Best,
    Naomi

  • jean Bailey

    Hello. Can you help me formulate a thesis statement for the subject below?
    Thanks muck.
    Acts 1:8King James Version (KJV)

    8 But ye shall receive power, after that the Holy Ghost is come upon you: and ye shall be witnesses unto me both in Jerusalem, and in all Judaea, and in Samaria, and unto the uttermost part of the earth.

  • Shelley Broadnax

    I need help writing a thesis statement on homelessness in Baltimore, MD. I am using the points of who are homeless, what are the causes and challenges, and through social policy and community action homelessness can be eradicated.

    • Hi Shelley,
      You have a great start here. You’re going to have plenty to cover in your paper and I think your topic is sufficiently focused.

      I think one potential structure for your thesis statement could look like this:

      While the causes and challenges of homelessness in Baltimore are numerous, homelessness can be eradicated through social policy and community action such as POLICY 1 and ACTION 2.

      Happy writing!
      Naomi

      • Shelley Broadnax

        So, I sent in an outline about who are the homeless and stereotypes that exist, the causes and barriers, and short and long term solutions to eradicating the issue. Can you help me put that in a thesis statement. I have a ton of research that I will edit to fit this. I just need a strong thesis statement.

  • Shelley Broadnax

    Hi Naomi,
    If it is possible, could you help me develop a strong thesis with the points of who are the homeless, the causes and barriers and short and long-term solutions to eradicate the problem.

    • Since I haven’t done your research, I can’t offer specific details. But here is a framework that you can follow:

      Homelessness (in Baltimore) is primarily caused by CAUSE 1 (and CAUSE 2), and the barriers to solving it are many, including BARRIER 1; however, both short-term solutions such as SOLUTION 1 and long-term solutions such as SOLUTION 2 will go a long way toward eradicating the problem of homelessness in the community.

      Best,
      Naomi

  • shabrina anastasia

    Hi there, can you please help me. i’m having a hard time starting my thesis statement for essay. my thesis is how bloody type affects personality. please help thankyou!

    • Hi Shabrina,

      In your case your thesis statement’s main goal is to side in favor of the blood type theory. It can look something like this:

      While the results of blood type personality theory has been widely criticized by the scientific community, there is some reliable evidence that blood type directly affects personality such as EVIDENCE 1 and EVIDENCE 2.

      Then you will spend the rest of the paper defending the theory and showing evidence from credible sources.

      Happy writing!
      Naomi

  • Hi Cole,
    No that’s not a strict rule. Sometimes you may find that you only have one point of support and sometimes you might find you have four or five (or more). This will all depend on the specific requirements of the assignment and topic. I just find that three is a great number to work with for a balanced paper, and it makes for an easy example.

    Best,
    Naomi

  • Timothy Annor

    Hi help me write a thesis statement on why fire outbreak in the various market places are as a result of institutional failure.

    • Hi Timothy–
      A basic framework for you might look like:

      Fire outbreak in the various market places is a direct result of institutional failure as evidenced by EVIDENCE 1, EVIDENCE 2, and EVIDENCE 3.

      I don’t actually fully understand your topic as you describe it, but just fill in the blanks with evidence that you can defend with your research.

      Good luck!

  • Clare Thomas

    Hello Naomi,
    I was wondering if you would be able to help me get started on my thesis where I have to Outline the argument that a consumer society makes and remakes inequality? Thanks!

    • Hi Clare–
      Here is a basic structure for you (I have listed three points but you may have more or fewer).

      A consumer society propagates inequality by METHOD 1, METHOD 2, and METHOD 3.

      One method I can think of is that the consumer society lures people into debt that they never repay in full, which in turn enslaves them to financial dependence on the wealthy lenders (banks, landlords, and corporations).

      Good luck!

  • Jemeel Rodney

    Great examples 10/10

  • Hi Billie,

    Hmm if you’re trying to write an argumentative essay, you might be better off attempting to argue what should be done to help this baby. Writing about how infant drug addiction is bad isn’t really going to give you a lot of room to debate.

    With that in mind, a potential structure for your thesis statement might look like:

    When a baby is born with an addiction due to a drug-addicted mother, the baby should be given the best chance to live a healthy life and become a contributing member to society; therefore, the state (or who exactly?) should provide rehabilitation services (or what exactly?) at no cost to the family.

    The reason a thesis statement like the above is good is because it is up for debate. Not everyone will agree that these services should be covered at no cost. Not everyone will agree that the baby is entitled to these services. On the other hand, simply listing out the effects of a drug addicted baby aren’t very debatable–those will be mostly facts (not great for an argumentative essay).

    Hope that helps!

    Happy writing,
    Naomi

  • Hi Lianna,
    This is a great topic because it is definitely up for debate (http://money.cnn.com/2017/01/11/news/nickelodeon-philippines-underwater-theme-park/)

    To make your thesis statement, you first need to take a stance FOR or AGAINST the park.

    So your template thesis statement will look like this:

    Nickelodeon’s Underwater Theme Park should/should not be built in Palawan because A, B, and C.

    Some example points for: it will stimulate the tourist economy and create jobs.
    Some examples against: it is bad for the environment and will devastate the coral reefs.

    Make sure that you choose arguments that you can defend with research.

    If it were me, I’d probably argue against the park, but that’s up to you!

    Best,
    Naomi

  • Kelly

    Hello there,
    I am writing a formal outline on cybercrime, can you help me in creating a thesis statement please and thank you.

    • Hi Kelly,
      What angle are you planning to take on this paper? “Cybercrime” is a pretty big topic and you could go in a million different directions with it.
      First, I would suggest focusing in on a certain type of cybercrime–that will make your paper more manageable.
      Next, I suggest proposing WHO should do WHAT to resolve this particular type of Cybercrime.
      Those components will end up being the basis of your thesis statement.

      The general format would be something like this:

      [WHO] needs to take immediate measures to resolve cases of [Specific Cybercrime] immediately by enacting [SOLUTION 1, SOLUTION 2, and SOLUTION 3].

      You might also want to check out this post: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-narrow-a-topic/

      Good luck!

  • Kaloy Ikong Garcia

    Can i have a thesis about the use of stem cells to achieve immortality/longevity even without any access to actual stem cell expert? I mean, can i just use youtube lectures as reference for the thesis?

    • Hi Kaloy,

      Certain Youtube videos can certainly be used to help you inform your argument, particularly if the videos are published by reputable sources and feature reputable scientists/thinkers. You might also want to check out documents in Google Scholar, for example: https://scholar.google.com/scholar?q=stem+cell+longevity&hl=en&as_sdt=0%2C5&oq=stem+cell+long

      Once you’ve done some research, you can take your stance for or against the use of stem cells being used for the achievement of immortality.

      Happy writing!

      • Kaloy Ikong Garcia

        Thanks. My professor told me that the internet is a bit lacking when it comes to specifications about topics for thesis. But i, myself think that the internet is the main source for people to have enough information for defense.
        Thanks for the link too. Big help.

  • Ruby

    Hi there, I need help on thesis statement. It’s about makeup and smartphone. Please reply, THANK YOU

    • Hi Ruby-
      Not really sure what makeup and smartphones have to do with each other. Can you make the connection between those two things for me? That might help me figure out how to help you with this thesis statement.

      Best,
      Naomi

      • Ruby

        Basically, the two are different topics. I really don’t know how to write. Thank you

  • Hi Steffa,

    How you approach your thesis depends on the specifics of what you’re arguing. Are you arguing that the two films are similar or that they’re different? You might also try the Thesis Builder (https://www.kibin.com/thesis-builder/type) and choose the “compare and contrast” thesis type — this will help you organize your ideas into a cohesive statement.

    Best,
    Erin

  • Florence Miller

    Please, i need help..i dont know how to start my research..our teacher told us to write an educational research based on the teaching, learning, teaching-learning process

  • Kelly Gonzales-Thurman

    I need help writing a thesis for the US and the Revolution in Haiti?

    • Hi Kelly,

      I’m afraid that I’d need a little more information about your topic. Are you writing about the United States’ role in the Haitian Revolution? If so, the first step toward writing your thesis is to take a stance on that issue, i.e. the US should have played a larger role (or a smaller one), or that the outcome would have been different with more (or less) involvement from the US, etc.

      Best,
      Erin

  • latasha Cramer

    Hello can you please help me with a thesis statement on Comparing Sculptures of Ancient India and Greece. comparing the way gods and humans were depicted in sculpture in ancient India and Greece, and identify the cultural values and ideals that these art works reflect in each case. But I am going to focus my writing on Buddhism.

    • It sounds to me like you might be trying to cover way too much in a single essay. It’s not clear to me why you want to focus on Buddhism but also cover ancient Greek and Indian sculpture.

      To make that topic more specific, what you if you tackle your thesis like this: “While sculptures in the ancient Greek and ancient Indian Buddhist traditions both reflect X, Y, and Z, they differ in that A and B. ”

      In that example, you’re still narrowing your focus to Buddhist sculpture in India, but you’re also able to list any similarities (X, Y, and Z) between the two cultures’ depictions and differences (A and B).

      I hope this helps!

  • Harley

    I need a thesis statement for my argumentative essay against zoos

    • Hi Harley,

      A good structure for you to start with would be something like this:

      Zoos should be closed down over the next several years because 1, 2, and 3.

      If you can talk about a specific zoo, that might be even better.

      For example: The Saint Louis Zoo should be closed down over the next several years because 1, 2, and 3.

      You will spend the rest of the paper defending the three (or two or four) reasons that you choose to include in your thesis statement, so make sure that you choose arguments that you can defend with evidence from your research.

      Happy writing!

      Naomi

  • Kayla

    Hello. I need help with my thesis regarding education and how it’s long process is negative..

    • Hi Kayla–
      I guess I’m not 100% sure what your topic is about. What do you mean by “its long process” do you mean that education should not take so much time to complete? And if that’s the case, which part of education is too long? College or high school? If so than maybe a structure like this would work:

      Achieving a bachelor’s degree should be reduced from four years to two years because 1, 2, and 3.
      Or
      Achieving a high school diploma should be reduced from a four year process to a two year process because 1, 2, and 3.

      The reasons that you choose will depend on your research. Make sure that you can support them with evidence!

      Best,
      Naomi

  • mitsuki

    I am writing about illegal drugs. Can you help me in writing a thesis statement about it? Actually I am just a first stimer so I really don’t have an idea. Please help me thanks.

    • Hi Mitsuki,

      I think you’re going to want to narrow your topic a bit first. “Illegal drugs” is pretty broad and you could take it in many different directions.
      What type of illegal drug do you want to focus on?
      Do you want to focus on how it’s affecting a specific community?
      Who should take responsibility for this and what do you think should be done about these illegal drugs? This will probably be the heart of your thesis statement.

      If you can answer the above, your thesis statement template might look like this:

      The illegal use of SPECIFIC DRUG is at an all time high in SPECIFIC COMMUNITY and WHO needs to act quickly by providing SOLUTION/ACTION 1, SOLUTION/ACTION 2, and SOLUTION/ACTION 3.

      Make sure you choose actions that you can support with evidence from your research.

      For more information about narrowing your focus, visit: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-narrow-a-topic/
      For more information about writing thesis statements : https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-write-a-thesis-statement/

      Happy writing!
      Naomi

  • Lopler

    I need help writing a thesis on my support of teenage pregnancy and the success of teen mothers. I’m not in support of all teens getting pregnant, but I’m in support of if they are to get pregnant that they can have a bright future.

    • Hi Lopler,

      I agree that a teen mom can have a bright future if she has the right assistance. Your thesis statement might take that approach and look something like this:

      Teen mothers can have a bright future if they are supported in a few key ways including 1, 2, and 3.

      An example of some necessary support for a teen mom would be: daycare assistance, financial aid for college tuition, access to online classes, access to parenting classes, and housing and food support particularly while completing school.

      I’d pick a few that you can find evidence to support from your research and expand from there.

      Good luck!
      Naomi

  • Keziah Dupahnay

    hello! can you please help me. I’m really new to making thesis, my topic is about Teacher-Student relation.
    I’m really glad to hear any favorable respond.

    • Hi there,
      “Teacher-student relation” is a pretty broad topic, so you’ll want to narrow your focus before you attempt a thesis statement. Here’s a helpful post about doing that: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-narrow-a-topic/

      Some questions you might try to answer:
      What specific relationship issue are you discussing? Disciplinary? Personal? Communication about expectations? Respect?
      Do you want to discuss a specific issue within a specific school?
      Once that’s defined, answer this: What should be done about this student-teacher relationship issue?

      An example thesis could be something like this:

      Relations between students and teachers at XYZ School are difficult because there are too many students per teacher, which leads to miscommunications about expectations and assignments. For this reason it is imperative that class sizes be reduced to no more than 30 students per teacher and teachers should set aside office hours each week where students can come with questions about the course material.

      Happy writing!

  • micah

    Hi there! I need a thesis statement on Teacher-Student relations. please

  • Jula

    I have question if is possible that you check an essay and judge if is good. I don ‘ t Ask for checking errors just for a look on general shape of it. Few teachers check our essays and with group of people we try to find a way to satisfy each of them enough to pass our exams. But is hard As they don’ t give us any clues.

    • Hi Jula–
      Our editors are available 24/7 to review your essays. Along with correcting for errors in grammar etc., they will also give you feedback on the essay’s general condition, whether it makes sense, whether your arguments are supported, your writing style… etc. You just need to let the editor know in your instructions what you are most concerned about. I know that writing to please your teacher can be quite a stressful experience and it’s definitely nice to get an objective review before you turn an essay in. You can learn more about our editing service here: https://www.kibin.com/essay-editing-proofreading

      Thanks for the comment!
      Naomi

  • A simple template you could follow could be:

    Gun control laws do not reduce gun violence as evidenced by A, B, and C.

    Find three points that you can support with your research and elaborate on those throughout your essay.

    Also, you might find this blog post helpful for your research: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/12-gun-control-articles-for-argumentative-essay/

    Best,
    Naomi

  • The ethical issues of non-sensual marriages include A, B, and C.

    List approximately three specific points of evidence that you can support with your research and elaborate on throughout the rest of your paper.

    Best,
    Naomi

  • sapatos29

    I need help writing a thesis statement regarding to the implementation of club periods to grade 10 students. can someone help please

    • Hi there,

      First you need to take a stance for or against the implementation of club periods. A good structure that you can use looks like this:

      Club periods should / should not be implemented for grade 10 students because REASON 1, REASON 2, and REASON 3.

      You’ll come up with approximately three different reasons for your stance for/against the club periods and then the rest of your paper will be about defending these reasons with evidence from your research.

      Happy writing!
      Naomi

  • marwa

    hi, I need help about how to write statement about giving enough examples.
    thank u

    • Hi Marwa,

      A little extra context about your assignment would be helpful, but a basic way to construct such a thesis would be: It is important for [someone] to give enough examples of [something] because X, Y, and Z. You can simply plug in your information (and your reasons for your claim — x, y, and z).

      Best,
      Erin

  • Hi again,

    Thanks for sharing the details of your essay, this is helpful. A few questions for you to answer before you can formulate your thesis statement:

    1. Are you arguing in favor of free education? Why or why not?
    2. What are some of the challenges to implementing free education?
    3. What are the benefits/problems of providing a free education in secondary study?

    Answering those questions will help you be able to fill in the blanks on one of these templates:

    Template in favor of:
    While there will be challenges such as challenge 1 and challenge 2 to implementing free education in secondary study, the benefits are numerous and include benefit 1, benefit 2, and benefit 3.

    Template against:

    The challenges of implementing free education are numerous including challenge 1 and challenge 2, and the benefits are few leading to problems such as problem 1 and problem 2; thus, free education should not be considered a feasible option in secondary education.

    Hope this helps!

    Happy writing!
    Naomi

  • Hi John,
    My apologies but I don’t fully understand your topic. You may need to work to narrow your topic down before developing your thesis statement. Here is a helpful post about doing just that: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-narrow-a-topic/

    Feel free to reply to this comment with a narrower topic and I’m happy to help out with your thesis statement.

    Happy writing!
    Naomi

  • Hi Kim–I’m sorry but I’m not quite sure I understand your topic. Would be happy to help with a clearer topic to work with.

    In the meantime, you might find this post helpful: https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/how-to-narrow-a-topic/

    Best,
    Naomi

  • alexandra

    im trying to write an essay on how people with mental disorders end up in jail. or a thesis statement that some how is for people who are in prison with mental disorders to get out of prison. if that makes sense..

    its a 10 page argument essay i just have no clue on how to start a thesis on this.

    i wanted to include the joe arridy case as well so thats kind of the route i wanted to go in. (btw joe arridy was menatlly ill and charged with a crime he did not commit. they ended up killing him in prison before they found him innocent.

    • Hi Alexandra,

      I think the best place to start here is to really pin down what you’re trying to argue. For instance, are you arguing that people with mental disorders are more likely to end up in jail, or that people with mental disorders are more likely to be convicted of/charged with crimes they didn’t commit? Given the Joe Arridy example, I think the second option listed there is possibly your strongest one.

      So if that’s your main argument, then you’ll also need some supporting points (i.e., why people with mental disorders are more likely to be imprisoned for crimes they didn’t necessarily commit). Perhaps they’re less able to present a strong defense, for instance, plus another reason or two.

      With all that said, a potential thesis statement might look like this: “People with mental disorders are more likely to be wrongfully convicted and imprisoned because they are less able to defend themselves in the legal system, ____, and _____.”

      As for the rest of your essay, I encourage you to check out https://www.kibin.com/essay-writing-blog/argumentative-essay-outline/ for help outlining/structuring your essay.

      Cheers!
      Erin

  • Obee

    I need to write a thesis on what is truth? Can anybody help me with this ?

  • vchen1@ocdsb.ca

    The organ donor thing is really dumb because a donation means for charity or giving for free. I would say to change the donors to something else because it really irritated me.

    • Haha that’s a good point. Unfortunately, there is no word for someone who sells their organs (legally) since it’s not an accepted practice. I guess we could call them “organ sellers” but that might confuse the intent. Thanks for your comment. 🙂